The Forgotten Valley
A Beautiful Place39 total reviews
Comment from Selina Stambi
I love it here ... the simplicity of the four-word concluding line is powerfully eloquent. It says it all!
Your Forgotten Valley sounds like an idyllic patch of paradise, Ulla.
I love cherries - yum!
Best wishes for the contest.
Sonali
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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I love it here ... the simplicity of the four-word concluding line is powerfully eloquent. It says it all!
Your Forgotten Valley sounds like an idyllic patch of paradise, Ulla.
I love cherries - yum!
Best wishes for the contest.
Sonali
Comment Written 30-May-2015
reply by the author on 31-May-2015
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Thank you so much for your lovely review. It is beautiful here. Ulla
Comment from alexisleech
How enchanting. This is the kind of life my late husband and I looked forward to in rural France. The simplicity of life, reconnected to nature, is truly a wonderful experience. You have certainly introduced us to 'A sense of a place' here.
This is an excellent entry for the competition.
Alexis x
He only barks if someone enters who shouldn't.
We call our place(,) The Forgotten Valley,
just how hard (the) work is.
we are totally knackered(,) when the
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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How enchanting. This is the kind of life my late husband and I looked forward to in rural France. The simplicity of life, reconnected to nature, is truly a wonderful experience. You have certainly introduced us to 'A sense of a place' here.
This is an excellent entry for the competition.
Alexis x
He only barks if someone enters who shouldn't.
We call our place(,) The Forgotten Valley,
just how hard (the) work is.
we are totally knackered(,) when the
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Thank you. I am glad you liked it. Ulla
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Good morning Ulla. I'm so glad I got your message because I didn't realise I had hit a four instead of a five on the rating box (I think I forgot I was out of sixes and just hit the second highest rating by mistake) I have rated it correctly now. Apologies!
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Hi Alexis, That is really nice of you. Thanks a lot. Ulla
Comment from WindPen
You seem to be one of the luckiest person in the world
your life is enchanting like a fiction story
simple on the outside and beautiful within
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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You seem to be one of the luckiest person in the world
your life is enchanting like a fiction story
simple on the outside and beautiful within
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you so much. Yes, it is lovely to live here. Ulla
Comment from thee-name
Excellent story. I enjoyed reading your story.
( I got 4 cherry trees.)
Right now, well into the month of May,( we get very) busy picking cherries. We have more that 300 trees on our land, so the month of May is big business for us.
Suggestion: change to ( we get very ) from we are so
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Excellent story. I enjoyed reading your story.
( I got 4 cherry trees.)
Right now, well into the month of May,( we get very) busy picking cherries. We have more that 300 trees on our land, so the month of May is big business for us.
Suggestion: change to ( we get very ) from we are so
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you so much. I am glad you enjoyed it. I am looking into your suggestion. Ulla
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thank you!
Comment from Larissa B
Good descriptions. And I have a clear sense of the writer's love for the mystique this place holds. However, as one reviewer did point out, this is a writing prompt for sense of place-- the dog and its breed ( especially mentioned at the opening paragraph) kind of takes the reader away from the main focus.... reason why writing prompts are called such: to train us writers to focus. Further on in your piece, the topic shifts into more in depth discussion about work and break time. I realize maybe it is important to mention it but to go into detail about breakfast and lunch break, etc..... again, take the reader to another realm. On a positive note, you seem to be in such a wonderful place that no doubt will continue to inspire you to write.:)
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Good descriptions. And I have a clear sense of the writer's love for the mystique this place holds. However, as one reviewer did point out, this is a writing prompt for sense of place-- the dog and its breed ( especially mentioned at the opening paragraph) kind of takes the reader away from the main focus.... reason why writing prompts are called such: to train us writers to focus. Further on in your piece, the topic shifts into more in depth discussion about work and break time. I realize maybe it is important to mention it but to go into detail about breakfast and lunch break, etc..... again, take the reader to another realm. On a positive note, you seem to be in such a wonderful place that no doubt will continue to inspire you to write.:)
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you for your review. I am sorry you don't like it, but this is just how I felt like writing it ,whether it complies with the contest or not. I concede that I should maybe not have entered the contest. This is a tribute to where we live. Kind regards Ulla
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I understand. Yes, you may be right. It is true, we grow as writers not so much on the positive but empty praises. Sometimes the learning process is enhanced by folks who allow you to see where you need to develop. In this case, fitting in to the mold as you had ventured to enter a contest, which required such. I hope you continue to write and remain open to both praise and constructive comments. Best regards.
Comment from flip86
You captured the five senses of sight, hear, smell, taste and touch. Readers can feel being in the place. I like the use of descriptive nouns and verbs, very poetic and emotional. It makes you appreciate the simple things in life where you don't have to travel far and wide. Just look around you and you can see the beauty anywhere you go. Nicely written.
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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You captured the five senses of sight, hear, smell, taste and touch. Readers can feel being in the place. I like the use of descriptive nouns and verbs, very poetic and emotional. It makes you appreciate the simple things in life where you don't have to travel far and wide. Just look around you and you can see the beauty anywhere you go. Nicely written.
Comment Written 28-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you so much. I am glad you liked it. Ulla
Comment from zanya
Does such an idyllic place as here described really exist on our planet - a veritable Shangrai-la - it would be a joy to visit such a peaceful and fertile place and linger for a while
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Does such an idyllic place as here described really exist on our planet - a veritable Shangrai-la - it would be a joy to visit such a peaceful and fertile place and linger for a while
Comment Written 27-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Yes, it does exist, I live here.. Thank you so much. Ulla
Comment from Jackreese
Sounds very beautiful and had me wanting to visit. I could almost smell the oranges, cherries, olives and even imagined the mountains scattered about. What you described could've been a print from Courier and Ives. I was getting tired just reading what you had to do.
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Sounds very beautiful and had me wanting to visit. I could almost smell the oranges, cherries, olives and even imagined the mountains scattered about. What you described could've been a print from Courier and Ives. I was getting tired just reading what you had to do.
Comment Written 27-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you so much for your encouraging review. ulla
Comment from His Grayness
This is a delightful story of course of a deeply personal nature, sharing the joy of a new and wonderful environment full of stimulating things of nature and life. The work is easy to read and filled with enough interesting thoughts to make the reader easily visualize the location and share in the emotion. Well done! Congratulations!
HIS GRAYNESS
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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This is a delightful story of course of a deeply personal nature, sharing the joy of a new and wonderful environment full of stimulating things of nature and life. The work is easy to read and filled with enough interesting thoughts to make the reader easily visualize the location and share in the emotion. Well done! Congratulations!
HIS GRAYNESS
Comment Written 27-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you so much. I am glad you liked it. Ulla
Comment from Ginnygray
Great descriptive writing! Would love to sample those fresh cherries and see the beauty of so many cherry trees! You have mentioned the mountains, which just gives me a picture of the majesty of their heights! I really enjoyed the mention of the bees and the pollination! Maybe the next project along with the almonds and the cherry should be to consider raising bees for honey! All in all, you live in a beautiful place, I am convinced! Keep up the hard work since you gain enjoyment from it! Enjoy
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Great descriptive writing! Would love to sample those fresh cherries and see the beauty of so many cherry trees! You have mentioned the mountains, which just gives me a picture of the majesty of their heights! I really enjoyed the mention of the bees and the pollination! Maybe the next project along with the almonds and the cherry should be to consider raising bees for honey! All in all, you live in a beautiful place, I am convinced! Keep up the hard work since you gain enjoyment from it! Enjoy
Comment Written 27-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Thank you so much. I am glad you liked it. Ulla
