A New Beginning
Viewing comments for Chapter 11 "A Problem Shared"The girls leave their chat line days behind.
21 total reviews
Comment from joann r romei
im glad you added the comments and explanations in the authors notes, this read fine and i am anxious to hear how they resolve this,
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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im glad you added the comments and explanations in the authors notes, this read fine and i am anxious to hear how they resolve this,
Comment Written 27-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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The resolution is now posted, and I hope you enjoy the result. My thanks again for your review. Alexis x
Comment from jpduck
She's a clever girl, is your Karen. What a brilliant idea! A good, eventful chapter.
'she shot across the reception hall and grabbed it out of [the receiver] *its cradle*. (The receiver is, technically the earpiece which generates the sound. In practice, the combined earpiece/microphone is referred to as the receiver, as opposed to the box with the dialling buttons on which the receiver rests when not in use).
Adrian
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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She's a clever girl, is your Karen. What a brilliant idea! A good, eventful chapter.
'she shot across the reception hall and grabbed it out of [the receiver] *its cradle*. (The receiver is, technically the earpiece which generates the sound. In practice, the combined earpiece/microphone is referred to as the receiver, as opposed to the box with the dialling buttons on which the receiver rests when not in use).
Adrian
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Good point, Adrian. I can always count on you to pick up on my less obvious mistakes. After deliberation, I now merely have her crossing the hallway and grabbing the phone. A 'cradle' sounds more like a traditional telephone, and my other alternative 'pod' sounds a bit strange too. Many thanks for watching my back! Alexis x
Comment from scongrove
Fantastic chapter Alexis! I'm so glad Karen and Laura were quick on their feet to help out Patsy. I just don't believe this Deirdre will just forget all about Patsy though. She seems like a con that will still be persistent. Can't wait to read more!
Shana :)
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Fantastic chapter Alexis! I'm so glad Karen and Laura were quick on their feet to help out Patsy. I just don't believe this Deirdre will just forget all about Patsy though. She seems like a con that will still be persistent. Can't wait to read more!
Shana :)
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Don't worry, I think the thought that she might be investigated by the police will make Deirdre worry sufficiently to disappear from Patsy's life! My thanks again for your wonderful review and the glittering stars! Alexis x
Comment from Walu Feral
Hahahaha! Cop that! G'day Alexis, they love playing roles these girls and I love reading them when they do. This is another great chapter in my favorite book and it seems a while since I've had the oportunity. I loved it mate, great stuff. Bring it on, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Hahahaha! Cop that! G'day Alexis, they love playing roles these girls and I love reading them when they do. This is another great chapter in my favorite book and it seems a while since I've had the oportunity. I loved it mate, great stuff. Bring it on, cheers Fez
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Your reviews always bring a smile to my face, Fez. Thank you! Alexis x
Comment from Annette Gulliver
A fast moving chapter, Alexis. Some dirty work at the crossroads by Dierdre, trying to take advantage of someone like Patsy. Clever thinking on Karen's part by fobbing off the caller on the phone, which I presume was Dierdre.
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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A fast moving chapter, Alexis. Some dirty work at the crossroads by Dierdre, trying to take advantage of someone like Patsy. Clever thinking on Karen's part by fobbing off the caller on the phone, which I presume was Dierdre.
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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I'm glad you enjoyed it, Annette. Yes, it was Deirdre. Alexis x
Comment from Cindy Warren
I would have liked to see Deirdre get what she had coming, but at least she'll be sweating bug juice for a while and she'll think twice before she does it again. Perhaps prosecuting her would have taken the book too far off track. Karen certainly came up with a creative solution.
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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I would have liked to see Deirdre get what she had coming, but at least she'll be sweating bug juice for a while and she'll think twice before she does it again. Perhaps prosecuting her would have taken the book too far off track. Karen certainly came up with a creative solution.
Comment Written 25-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Me too, but as you say, it might have taken the book down a track that took it off course. Although I touch on serious subjects, the book is based on laughter, and lots of it! Alexis x
Comment from Ulla
Excellent. The story is coming along nicely, and poor Patsy is maybe getting the better of Deidre with the help of her friends. Could find no faults and I am looking forward to reading on. Ulla
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Excellent. The story is coming along nicely, and poor Patsy is maybe getting the better of Deidre with the help of her friends. Could find no faults and I am looking forward to reading on. Ulla
Comment Written 25-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Thank you, Ulla. Patsy is a great character to work with because she's led such a reclusive life. I just have to make sure she doesn't take over the book! Alexis x
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Action in this story continues to flow smoothly. Easy to follow story line. Descriptive language holds reader's interest throughout.
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Action in this story continues to flow smoothly. Easy to follow story line. Descriptive language holds reader's interest throughout.
Comment Written 25-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Thank you, Brett. I'm delighted you're still enjoying the antics at the Bedford. Alexis x
Comment from rwilliam
When Laura went back through to the reception area after she calmed Patsy down, Jenny and Karen were waiting for her. After she told them how the so called 'friend' had tried to con Patsy out of her inheritance, their mouths dropped open.--Here's just a suggestion:
Laura had managed to calm Patsy down. She went back through to the reception area where Jenny and Karen were waiting for her. She told them how the so called 'friend' had tried to con Patsy out of her inheritance. Their mouths dropped open.---Just a thought.
YAY... what a great way to help out Patsy! I loved it! I like how you are tweaking this. It is so good. You took great work and are making it better. Good job!!
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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When Laura went back through to the reception area after she calmed Patsy down, Jenny and Karen were waiting for her. After she told them how the so called 'friend' had tried to con Patsy out of her inheritance, their mouths dropped open.--Here's just a suggestion:
Laura had managed to calm Patsy down. She went back through to the reception area where Jenny and Karen were waiting for her. She told them how the so called 'friend' had tried to con Patsy out of her inheritance. Their mouths dropped open.---Just a thought.
YAY... what a great way to help out Patsy! I loved it! I like how you are tweaking this. It is so good. You took great work and are making it better. Good job!!
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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Another great suggestion. Isn't it funny how we see things more clearly when we get someone else's perspective? Thank you, my friend. Your opinion is always appreciated. Alexis xxx
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Good job! Yes, perfect solution. She will hardly call the police station. LOL!
plunge the filter top down << Cannot figure out what this means... help?
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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Good job! Yes, perfect solution. She will hardly call the police station. LOL!
plunge the filter top down << Cannot figure out what this means... help?
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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Having created the problem of Deirdre, I had to think of a way to get red of her. It took me two days, but hopefully that's the last of her! Alexis x
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plunge the filter top down << Cannot figure out what this means... help?
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A cafetiere is a cylindrical see-through jug with a 'plunger' incorporated in the lid. You put your ground coffee in the bottom, top up with boiling water with the plunger in the 'up' position for couple of minutes. You then push down the plunger (which is a tight fit inside the jug) and the coffee granules get trapped at the bottom. That leaves you with a jug of coffee similar to a peculator. http://www.wikihow.com/Use-a-French-Press-or-Cafetiere
Hope this explains it. x
