Maggie's Kiss
A Car crash leaves a man hanging onto life.26 total reviews
Comment from mommerry
I really liked this well=written story -- guess those folks who handle emergencies are called on to do many things. Sally was going above the call of duty but it was certainly a generous act on her part - so comforting for the victim.
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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I really liked this well=written story -- guess those folks who handle emergencies are called on to do many things. Sally was going above the call of duty but it was certainly a generous act on her part - so comforting for the victim.
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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Thank you so much for the kind review. Yes, I believe First Responders sacrifice much to save people when seconds matter. Thanks again.
Comment from danpald
How sweet the thought in this situation
To carry the kiss with respiration
So quick to think with the need
To calm the man was such a feat
Well done fine lady for the task
Sweet the lips that kissed so fast
For the love that her holds for his wife
You gave your lips for her in sacrifice
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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How sweet the thought in this situation
To carry the kiss with respiration
So quick to think with the need
To calm the man was such a feat
Well done fine lady for the task
Sweet the lips that kissed so fast
For the love that her holds for his wife
You gave your lips for her in sacrifice
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Wow, what a wonderful response to the story. Your poem is sweet and thoughtful.
Comment from flylikeaneagle
Life and death kisses. A small price to pay to save a life. He was not seeing the lady but he thought it was her, his love. It takes a lot of skilled EMT's and doctors to help in an accident. We hear the helicopters come into and leave our hospital. I pray. Great imagination for this contest entry.
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Life and death kisses. A small price to pay to save a life. He was not seeing the lady but he thought it was her, his love. It takes a lot of skilled EMT's and doctors to help in an accident. We hear the helicopters come into and leave our hospital. I pray. Great imagination for this contest entry.
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Thank you so much, and it's a nod to all First Responders and the sacrifices they make. Thanks again.
Comment from Spitfire
What a beautiful gift to give this wounded man. Shows that love can keep you stabilized. Let's put Sally up for saint hood. She knows how to heal without meds.
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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What a beautiful gift to give this wounded man. Shows that love can keep you stabilized. Let's put Sally up for saint hood. She knows how to heal without meds.
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Aww, that is so sweet! Love does conquer all!
Comment from LIJ Red
The slight absurdity of a kiss between strangers well taken care of here. And a
short straight shot of a story. I didn't bother counting the words, I am no judge
in any contest. Five.
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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The slight absurdity of a kiss between strangers well taken care of here. And a
short straight shot of a story. I didn't bother counting the words, I am no judge
in any contest. Five.
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Thank you so much for the wonderful revie and comments. A kiss between strangers is a bit absurd, so I thought the greatest reason for that would be to save lives!,
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements with a correct theme and word count. This was a highly imaginative way in which to bring the concept of a stranger into the story and you deserve kudos for such creativity in one hundred words. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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This meets the contest requirements with a correct theme and word count. This was a highly imaginative way in which to bring the concept of a stranger into the story and you deserve kudos for such creativity in one hundred words. I wish you all the best in the voting and thank you for sharing it.
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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What a kind and thoughtful response. Thank you so much for reading and sharing.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good job! I like your story. It meets the 100 words requirement and it is a complete little story that you could use for a longer and more complete story.
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Good job! I like your story. It meets the 100 words requirement and it is a complete little story that you could use for a longer and more complete story.
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Thank you so much. That's a good idea on a longer story; they are so much easier to write.
Comment from Dean Kuch
I had to read this twice, and on the second reading it finally sank in.
Wow! What an excellent, poignant piece of flash fiction writing this is. Very powerful.
It simply illustrates the lengths that those brave men and women who attempt to rescue us from the twisted hulks of metal that once used to be a car will go to in saving a life. One day, that life might be our own.
Great work here, and best of luck to you in the contest. ~Dean
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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I had to read this twice, and on the second reading it finally sank in.
Wow! What an excellent, poignant piece of flash fiction writing this is. Very powerful.
It simply illustrates the lengths that those brave men and women who attempt to rescue us from the twisted hulks of metal that once used to be a car will go to in saving a life. One day, that life might be our own.
Great work here, and best of luck to you in the contest. ~Dean
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Thank you, Dean, the idea was to give a nod to these first responders. Thanks for drawing the correlation, and thanks for the well wishes.
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Anytime...
Comment from lancellot
Very interesting, that's some EMT. Yes, I can see how an act of kindness, perhaps a little white lie could do more good than harm and perhaps save a life. Good story idea.
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Very interesting, that's some EMT. Yes, I can see how an act of kindness, perhaps a little white lie could do more good than harm and perhaps save a life. Good story idea.
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. It doesn't hurt to act a part sometimes!
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
a lot of very varied entrants into this competition.
I liked this one a lot. The mercy of a stranger's kiss.
Nicely told
GMG
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Hi there,
a lot of very varied entrants into this competition.
I liked this one a lot. The mercy of a stranger's kiss.
Nicely told
GMG
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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Thank you so much. I wanted to highlight the importance of the jobs and sacrifices of first responders!
