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Comment from danpald
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I wonder with your poems
What are your paintings like
So dark in the soul
Searching for light

Not sure the theme of the poems
Always feel a little the sad tone
What is the dream that touches the heart
Where is the muse that forgets candles in the dark

 Comment Written 24-May-2015


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
    My muse is my music, music is my muse.....sadness....yes I'm sure we all entertain some or will eventually. My paintings....now are negotiated .....lawyers shit like that.....anyway I'm not complaint fame has its fair amount of benefit .....lol ...love bug
Comment from l.raven
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HI Bab, you know I love your poetry Michael...may not always say it right...but I do understand...I know your feelings and your unique style that is your own...a true gift from God...sometimes cradles drop baby.....and our dreams come tumbling down...but for me there is always hope ...just my feelings...the song is one of my favorite...and it's a great poem...love you always...Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 23-May-2015


reply by the author on 25-May-2015
    Hi sweetheart....-smile- ahh thats what you say anyway....haha.....thanks .....yes dear hope proppels us all.....without it we'de all drown. I love you Linda.....I'm grateful to god for your life......always Michael
reply by l.raven on 25-May-2015
    Hi Baby, and that's what I mean...and I love you too Michael...and am so grateful God put you in my life...always...I may not write it in a thousand words...but I mean it in a million...when I say I love you too...thank you so much...Linda
Comment from visionary1234
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I always admire your unique use of words Michael - you have your own unique style (thank heaven!) - though you do have a little thing with apostrophes on occasion ...
sometimes cradle's drop - makes me have to go back and re-read because, as written, it means 'cradle is drop' which grammatically, is a bit of a stopper. "sometimes cradle drops" I THINK is the sense of what you intended?
:)Sharyn

 Comment Written 23-May-2015


reply by the author on 27-May-2015
    why thank you Sharyn and Ion yourn...-wink- style is a smile in the face adversety a teaching lesson student born....lol..ahh How are you pretty Lady....oh yes of course that's what I meant let me go change it before its noticed...-wink- love Bug-
Comment from sibhus
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Great lines to this very interesting poem. weight overbearing dream crushing, wow isn't that so true the pressures of life bring such an overbearing weight upon our dreams. But, if I understand this there is always hope. Great poem.

 Comment Written 23-May-2015


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2015
    thank you very much....-smile-....very pleased you enjoyed....love Michael
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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good job! Your poem's action flows smoothly, you used descriptive language, you have excellent format, video and picture, and it held my interest all the way to the end.

 Comment Written 23-May-2015


reply by the author on 04-Jun-2015
    Hey gypsy....-smile- thank you maam...much oblidged....love Bug-
Comment from Glasstruth
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Really like the first stanza, but I think if you divided "weight overbearing/ dream crushing" into another line it would read better. Without a comma I read it together and thought, Huh! Also like the stanza with "God forbidden..." Wonderfully written. Les

 Comment Written 23-May-2015


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
    Hey Les...-smile- thanks man...glad you enjoyed....love Michael
Comment from TPAC
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A thought. Poet select items with various ingredients stir striking the reader with thoughts such as

"God forbidden mysteries just right
coaxing trampled flowers back to beautiful
is given life..."

Poet terminology great Thanks for sharing


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 Comment Written 23-May-2015


reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
    Hey T...-smile- thank you very much...happy you enjoy it....love Michael
Comment from His Grayness
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Oh if I ever wished deeper for a sixth star, it could not match my sorrow and shame for missing it's gift to you for this brilliant work! I'm truly touched by the depth and majesty of your passion, transformed into word imagery of pure magic! Great work dear friend! Vance

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 Comment Written 23-May-2015


reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
    yes yes dear friend indeed....Hey Vance...-smile-...ah not a problem...Tom says sixes don't matter anyway....yep, I'm afraid that long stretch of yellow brick road ran out of Eureka...Franklin I don't give a damn Scarlett...-wink-....R-E-S-P-E-C-T...find out what it mean to me....lol ...love Michael