Let's Talk Dirty!
Viewing comments for Chapter 78 "The Meeting"The story about three women who need to make money
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Comment from wordsfromsue
The day he tried to show prospective buyers around the house, when he thought Karen was at work, had made them quits in the having an affair department. (I'm not sure if this is a word used there and not here, but 'quits', is it 'quit' in the having an affair, or is it 'call it quits'?
I know Karen is open to giving him a 2nd chance, but underneath it all, I wonder if she should. He didn't seem interested in coming back just when she was sober, I have a sore side toward a woman having to be thin to be acceptable, even though I know it's the way of the world!!
However, the chapter was a definite 6. :-)
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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The day he tried to show prospective buyers around the house, when he thought Karen was at work, had made them quits in the having an affair department. (I'm not sure if this is a word used there and not here, but 'quits', is it 'quit' in the having an affair, or is it 'call it quits'?
I know Karen is open to giving him a 2nd chance, but underneath it all, I wonder if she should. He didn't seem interested in coming back just when she was sober, I have a sore side toward a woman having to be thin to be acceptable, even though I know it's the way of the world!!
However, the chapter was a definite 6. :-)
Comment Written 30-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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I couldn't agree more, Sue. My hubby loved me even when I turned into a fat lump after two C sections, which is why I can't take any man seriously who just seems interested because I'm now about 25 pounds lighter. If they don't like your brain, then they's just a pain,' is my motto these days.
Yeah! Another chapter I can mark 'This chapter is being edited prior to publishing!' Thank you, my friend. Your support has been fabulous. Alexis xxx
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Woman on cover seems to be the kind you could talk to about anything dirty. Story line easy to follow. Good choice for a cover.
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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Woman on cover seems to be the kind you could talk to about anything dirty. Story line easy to follow. Good choice for a cover.
Comment Written 24-May-2015
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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The cover is not finished yet, but we're getting there. Thank you so much for your review. Alexis x
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Alexis. As always I love this and it looks like you are ready to go with it. Have you found a publisher or an agent? I like the cover for it simplicity, some of them are to compicated. Well done mate, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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G'day Alexis. As always I love this and it looks like you are ready to go with it. Have you found a publisher or an agent? I like the cover for it simplicity, some of them are to compicated. Well done mate, cheers Fez
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 24-May-2015
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I've decided to keep control and publish on amazon because getting a publisher or agent could take years, and I'm not getting any younger! I have a plan that involves twitter, facebook and LinkedIn. Are you on any of those? Alexis xxx
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G'day mate. I don't have any of those, but I could open one if you want. Can you email me with the details and I'll have a look. Someone suggested a while ago that I should put my stuff on face book but I always worry about some bugger pinching it.... Cheers Fez
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Facebook is fast becoming a good way to promote your business and writing. You don't actually post your work there, just links to 'teasers' if you want to create interest with all your contacts. The knock on effect is that if asked, your friends will share the link with their friends, therefore creating a pyramid effect (a bit like a chain letter) And it's completely free! xxx
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Thanks mate, I'll have a think about it.
Comment from Cindy Warren
I think Mark deserved to sweat a bit. I wouldn't easily forgive someone who called me a fat alcoholic cow. Will Karen tell him the truth about the chat line and the 'affair' or not?
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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I think Mark deserved to sweat a bit. I wouldn't easily forgive someone who called me a fat alcoholic cow. Will Karen tell him the truth about the chat line and the 'affair' or not?
Comment Written 22-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Me too. It's much more fun to have him thinking she'll never forgive him. A friend of mine divorced her husband after he called her something disgusting after she found out he'd bought his own apartment (not fat or alcoholic, but equally bad) He spent years trying to get back with her but twenty years on, she is still with her 'toy boy, who's 14 years her junior. Knowing how that panned out, inspired me to incorporate in Karen's background--hopefully with a happier outcome for the husband! Alexis x
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
I've read this before surely!!
No wonder Mark is nervous - he
has a right to be in the circumstance.
Is this the cover to your book?
Looking good, you are, Alexis.
Margaret
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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I've read this before surely!!
No wonder Mark is nervous - he
has a right to be in the circumstance.
Is this the cover to your book?
Looking good, you are, Alexis.
Margaret
Comment Written 22-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Well, it was three years ago, just after the 'red swimsuit' episode, so I thought I might as well use it because I own it. I searched high and low for a picture of three women in their fifties looking sassy, but I couldn't find one anywhere on the internet. These chapters are just the ones I have to load up to LTD so I can mark the book as complete, although I've still made a lot of changes since I started writing them for 'The Bedford,' the book I abandoned, in favour of 'A new Beginning.' I decided to give LTD a happy ending, because that, as you've pointed out, is what readers want. Thank you for your input, Margaret. You've been a great help throughout. Alexis x
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I think the editing is great, and I really like the book cover, I'm glad you kept the phone in it, seeing as its a major part of the story. I notice you haven't owned up to being the model on the cover!! You should, and be really proud of it. :) xsx Sandra
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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I think the editing is great, and I really like the book cover, I'm glad you kept the phone in it, seeing as its a major part of the story. I notice you haven't owned up to being the model on the cover!! You should, and be really proud of it. :) xsx Sandra
Comment Written 22-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Lol, I'm still having problems trying to pin Mark down so I can get my legs back! As a pastor, maybe he thinks I shouldn't be showing them. Grrrrrr Never mind. At least it's given me some time to do some serious editing to the book, especially the ending. It reads much better now (in my humble opinion!) Your support has been fantastic, Sandra. Thank you! Alexis xxx
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Has Mark read the book? I can't see him recommending it to his parishioners! LOL. I agree with you, your editing has given it the panache it warrants! :) xx
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No, he hasn't but I don't think 'chic lit' is his bag. Neither of my children have read any of my books, although Richard reads the odd chapter from time to time. I think they're frightened in case there's anything sexual in them. Lol, What are kids like!
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Mine are the same. The very idea that I would swear would blow their minds! LOL. I don't swear and don't like swearing but when you are writing, you have to be authentic or you would get nowhere fast. SEX! My kids think I am the virgin Mary!!!! :)
Comment from Ulla
Oh I liked it and I am one of those who have followed the story with great interest. This bodes well for the ending. So write on. No fault detected. Looking forward to reading on. I also quite like the cover your son-in-law has created. Ulla
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Oh I liked it and I am one of those who have followed the story with great interest. This bodes well for the ending. So write on. No fault detected. Looking forward to reading on. I also quite like the cover your son-in-law has created. Ulla
Comment Written 22-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Thank you Ulla. This is just the first attempt, but we'll get there in the end! Alexis x
Comment from scongrove
This is definitely a SIX star Alexis but I still only have five for rating at this time. Sorry.
I love your photo! I showed my boyfriend your picture and this was his exact words, "Damn, she's nice looking."
I'm jealous! :) You deserve the compliment! You're very attractive girl. :)
I do love your story and can't wait to own the book. Let me know when it comes out.
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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This is definitely a SIX star Alexis but I still only have five for rating at this time. Sorry.
I love your photo! I showed my boyfriend your picture and this was his exact words, "Damn, she's nice looking."
I'm jealous! :) You deserve the compliment! You're very attractive girl. :)
I do love your story and can't wait to own the book. Let me know when it comes out.
Comment Written 22-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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I can't wait either, but I have to get the book cover sorted out, and my son-in-law is so busy, I'm not sure when that will be! At my daughters suggestion, he chopped off my legs! Tell your boyfriend I'm very flattered! This studio shot was taken three years ago (when I was 57) after the red swimsuit story hit the press. It's amazing what a make-up artist can do! Alexis xxx
Comment from jpduck
I am confused about my confusion! -- Initially my confusion was momentary and was dispersed when I read your helpful introduction. But then a new confusion replaced the old one: Would I be right in thinking that the novel you originally called 'The Bedford' had its title changed to 'A New Beginning'? I think that must be right. But then, as I read this chapter, I felt I had read at least a version of it before, plus the chapter which follows where Karen storms out of the restaurant. I suppose these must have been the first two chapters of 'A New Beginning'. Have I got this right? I'm afraid this is almost too much for poor old brain to cope with; it seems strangely older than the rest of me.
But I'm supposed to be reviewing this chapter; a tricky thing to do, feeling drowned in deja vue the while. But it's well written (I suspect, edited since the previous version), and does what it says on the tin. Personally, and this is a criticism of me, not you, I find it hard to work up much interest in the fashion details of the first half. But then, I'm proud to walk around looking like the south end of a north-bound gorilla.
As regards your query about the book cover, how shall I put this? ... Had I been one of Karen's customers at the chat line, and she had sent me a copy of the picture, I would have been drooling pitifully. So, clearly, it is spot on as the cover for 'Let's Talk Dirty'.
One SPAG (Square brackets indicate suggested deletions, and asterisks indicate suggested insertions):
' Michelle had decided [to] not only *to* drive her mother to the restaurant' (Split infinitive).
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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I am confused about my confusion! -- Initially my confusion was momentary and was dispersed when I read your helpful introduction. But then a new confusion replaced the old one: Would I be right in thinking that the novel you originally called 'The Bedford' had its title changed to 'A New Beginning'? I think that must be right. But then, as I read this chapter, I felt I had read at least a version of it before, plus the chapter which follows where Karen storms out of the restaurant. I suppose these must have been the first two chapters of 'A New Beginning'. Have I got this right? I'm afraid this is almost too much for poor old brain to cope with; it seems strangely older than the rest of me.
But I'm supposed to be reviewing this chapter; a tricky thing to do, feeling drowned in deja vue the while. But it's well written (I suspect, edited since the previous version), and does what it says on the tin. Personally, and this is a criticism of me, not you, I find it hard to work up much interest in the fashion details of the first half. But then, I'm proud to walk around looking like the south end of a north-bound gorilla.
As regards your query about the book cover, how shall I put this? ... Had I been one of Karen's customers at the chat line, and she had sent me a copy of the picture, I would have been drooling pitifully. So, clearly, it is spot on as the cover for 'Let's Talk Dirty'.
One SPAG (Square brackets indicate suggested deletions, and asterisks indicate suggested insertions):
' Michelle had decided [to] not only *to* drive her mother to the restaurant' (Split infinitive).
Comment Written 22-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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I'm sorry if it was confusing. Basically, I decided to change the ending of 'Let's Talk Dirty' after I wrote three or four chapters of 'The Bedford' because the original ending left things too much up in the air.
I'm glad you like my son-in-law's first attempt, although it needs a lot of 'tweaks' including an apostrophe in the 'Lets' and the removal of the exclamation mark. Getting there though! Many thanks for your input.
Alexis x
Comment from MelB
I like the cover! I like the colors used and the phone as part of the title. And you look amazing Alexis! Your son-in-law did a fantastic job!
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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I like the cover! I like the colors used and the phone as part of the title. And you look amazing Alexis! Your son-in-law did a fantastic job!
Comment Written 21-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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It's good, but we're not there yet! Mark, my son-in-law is really busy with his work as a Pastor, so we hope to get together and try out a few more ideas. I've posted another one today, so any feedback would be really appreciated! Alexis x
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Look forward to it:)
