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Viewing comments for Chapter 20 "Epitaph for a Future"Poems about the coastline
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Comment from Brett Matthew West
One of nature's most destructive and beautiful sights. Easy to follow story line that brings back memories of these events. Well done.
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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One of nature's most destructive and beautiful sights. Easy to follow story line that brings back memories of these events. Well done.
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Always glad to hear from you Brett. Many thanks for the review.
Comment from Benny Beeharry
It is always sad when you come to think of those disasters ...any disasters. Now in Nepal
This little girl was one of the thousands in those horrific situation.
It is terrible.
Benny Beeharry
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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It is always sad when you come to think of those disasters ...any disasters. Now in Nepal
This little girl was one of the thousands in those horrific situation.
It is terrible.
Benny Beeharry
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Thank you for this sympathetic review of this posting.
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Pantygynt - a poem in good rhyming couplets about a terrible disaster in 2011 - a horrible tsunami. You are inspired by a picture of a young Japanese girl standing amidst the havoc of the aftermath. I like your line 'Love unstarted, love unfinished' which describes the lives of all those lost in this awful event. There lives cut short. We are shocked by the pictures - they who were actually there and survived have to live with the memory. Very well written an a good read. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Hi Pantygynt - a poem in good rhyming couplets about a terrible disaster in 2011 - a horrible tsunami. You are inspired by a picture of a young Japanese girl standing amidst the havoc of the aftermath. I like your line 'Love unstarted, love unfinished' which describes the lives of all those lost in this awful event. There lives cut short. We are shocked by the pictures - they who were actually there and survived have to live with the memory. Very well written an a good read. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Thank you Dorothy for your sympathetic and thorough review
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day mate. I am really enjoying the different forms of poetry you write, you are well grounded my friend. These disasters are so tragic, I see lots of the living here and it breaks my heart each time. Well done, this was another great chapter. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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G'day mate. I am really enjoying the different forms of poetry you write, you are well grounded my friend. These disasters are so tragic, I see lots of the living here and it breaks my heart each time. Well done, this was another great chapter. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 23-May-2015
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Thanks Fez. The opinions a great story teller such as yourself. Mean a grest deal to me.
Comment from ravenblack
Intentional or not, the rhythm , particularly in the 5th and 6th stanza echo the push and pull of waves. Blossoms bloom now/yours and mine now- rise/fall, the longer lines that follow the rift - tsunami/distance/death- keeping you apart. Very natural language and precise, "love's larder rifled" really stands out, the bodies swept out to sea. Reads akin to a haiku- which it should. Excellent poem!
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Intentional or not, the rhythm , particularly in the 5th and 6th stanza echo the push and pull of waves. Blossoms bloom now/yours and mine now- rise/fall, the longer lines that follow the rift - tsunami/distance/death- keeping you apart. Very natural language and precise, "love's larder rifled" really stands out, the bodies swept out to sea. Reads akin to a haiku- which it should. Excellent poem!
Comment Written 22-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Thank you so much for this. It came at the right moment when I was feeling a bit low. You've done me the world of ggod RB. I can't remember whether I intended it but I did realise I had done it. Even so its great when somebody else picks up on it. Many thanks.
Comment from lakeport
Epitaph for the future, indeed that was a very tragic disaster, a very heartfelt expressed poem. I enjoyed reading it. God bless you. Lakeport.
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Epitaph for the future, indeed that was a very tragic disaster, a very heartfelt expressed poem. I enjoyed reading it. God bless you. Lakeport.
Comment Written 22-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Thank you so much for reading and reviewing
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you are very welcome,Lakeport.
Comment from benoenose
Desperate situation portrayed by poetic form has a very unique style of poem. The melancholy tone creeps in with the death and disaster. However, the other side of the waters people live and enjoy. The cry and happiness of the world exposed. The author feels disturbed by the death of a girl he loved. Poetic romance and sorrowful note reads the poem.
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Desperate situation portrayed by poetic form has a very unique style of poem. The melancholy tone creeps in with the death and disaster. However, the other side of the waters people live and enjoy. The cry and happiness of the world exposed. The author feels disturbed by the death of a girl he loved. Poetic romance and sorrowful note reads the poem.
Comment Written 22-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Thank you for this kindly and thorough review
Comment from padumachitta
Hi. A good poem about these great movers from nature. These waves are beautiful and deadly and take the future faster than one thinks.
I liked the sensitivity in this poem.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Hi. A good poem about these great movers from nature. These waves are beautiful and deadly and take the future faster than one thinks.
I liked the sensitivity in this poem.
padumachitta
Comment Written 22-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Thank you very much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from danpald
Well the poem does cause one to think
How many times life holds to repeat
The loss of someone young with life
Still a memory to hold inside
The tragic death of one so young
From nature that calls with a storm
Yet it was someone known for time
Now only a memory that death does hide
The mind than wonders what could have been
Had the leaving did not take place
Could a love be lost to time
Could someone than be at my side
Now it is impossible to say
So the force of prayer gives way
To hold close the one lost in time
Now to hold with a spiritual eye
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Well the poem does cause one to think
How many times life holds to repeat
The loss of someone young with life
Still a memory to hold inside
The tragic death of one so young
From nature that calls with a storm
Yet it was someone known for time
Now only a memory that death does hide
The mind than wonders what could have been
Had the leaving did not take place
Could a love be lost to time
Could someone than be at my side
Now it is impossible to say
So the force of prayer gives way
To hold close the one lost in time
Now to hold with a spiritual eye
Comment Written 22-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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What a lovely way to be reviewed. Very many thanks for this.
Comment from Delahay
I like the style you have written this in. It is certainly a thought provoking piece. It is terrible to think of all the potential that is lost with such deaths.
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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I like the style you have written this in. It is certainly a thought provoking piece. It is terrible to think of all the potential that is lost with such deaths.
Comment Written 22-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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You got it. Yes it really is all about the potential. Many thanks for spotting that and the whole review.
