A New Beginning
Viewing comments for Chapter 10 "Time To Leave Part Two"The girls leave their chat line days behind.
17 total reviews
Comment from Glasstruth
Laura's very kind and understanding, is what Patsy needs. Of course, somehow she has to straighten things out. I suppose that's in the next chapters. Like how you've kept me wondering the same way as Laura was. Patsy is a superb addition to this book. Really nice dialogue. Reads smoothly. Les
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Laura's very kind and understanding, is what Patsy needs. Of course, somehow she has to straighten things out. I suppose that's in the next chapters. Like how you've kept me wondering the same way as Laura was. Patsy is a superb addition to this book. Really nice dialogue. Reads smoothly. Les
Comment Written 21-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Yes, everyone has a soft spot for Patsy. Nobody likes the thought of somebody being taken advantage of, especially if they're vulnerable. Now I have to give her a life without letting her take over the book! Alexis x
Comment from joann r romei
like the cliche says, dont sign before reading the fine print, i was scammed one by a real estate broker with the sale of my home, i let the contract expire then i sold it on my own, this added drama to your story
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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like the cliche says, dont sign before reading the fine print, i was scammed one by a real estate broker with the sale of my home, i let the contract expire then i sold it on my own, this added drama to your story
Comment Written 21-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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You're so right! It's happened to me too, so I know what it feels like to be at the receiving end. Alexis x
Comment from Spitfire
Unfortunately, this happens to a lot of lonely people. Con artists draw them in.
Patsy shot Laura a look as if she was a traitor for forgetting -- I found this humorous.
You have the reader roped in with this new turn of events. Will the three girls decide to avenge this poor lady?
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Unfortunately, this happens to a lot of lonely people. Con artists draw them in.
Patsy shot Laura a look as if she was a traitor for forgetting -- I found this humorous.
You have the reader roped in with this new turn of events. Will the three girls decide to avenge this poor lady?
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Yes, they certainly will. Anyone who's been conned knows how devastating it can be because the abuser always tries to justify their actions, leaving the abused feeling stupid. Been there, got the tee shirt, so I know exactly how Patsy would feel! Alexis x
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I love stories of revenge.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, it looks like Patsy has made a dreadful mistake, one of those that can change her's and others whole lives, from now on. But I wouldn't bet on it or anything. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Well, it looks like Patsy has made a dreadful mistake, one of those that can change her's and others whole lives, from now on. But I wouldn't bet on it or anything. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Thank you, Ric. Patsy is based on a guest who stayed at the hotel my husband and I ran, and yes, she nearly lost everything. It was good to be able to help and stop a pariah steal everything she had! Alexis x
Comment from Cindy Warren
How sad that Patsy's only friend would do that to her. Hopefully she has some new ones now. I hope Deirdre gets a big surprise when the police meet her at the station instead of Patsy. Chances are people like her have done something like this before.
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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How sad that Patsy's only friend would do that to her. Hopefully she has some new ones now. I hope Deirdre gets a big surprise when the police meet her at the station instead of Patsy. Chances are people like her have done something like this before.
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Sadly, this is based on a true story. It's a case of the 'have nots' thinking they deserve what someone like Patsy has. Sad, but true. Alexis x
Comment from Ulla
Excellent, The story is taking off nicely and is very well written. I do enjoy following the plot that is starting to emerge. I detected no faults and I am looking forward to reading on. Ulla
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Excellent, The story is taking off nicely and is very well written. I do enjoy following the plot that is starting to emerge. I detected no faults and I am looking forward to reading on. Ulla
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Thank you, Ulla. I really appreciate your review and encouraging comments. Thank you! Alexis x
Comment from MelB
Poor Patsy, it seems there is always someone waiting around to take advantage of someone else, especially at a time when they are vulnerable. Clearly, Patsy was distraught after her father's death and sounds like this person took advantage. So nice of Laura to offer to help this woman. A nice, smooth flowing chapter.
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Poor Patsy, it seems there is always someone waiting around to take advantage of someone else, especially at a time when they are vulnerable. Clearly, Patsy was distraught after her father's death and sounds like this person took advantage. So nice of Laura to offer to help this woman. A nice, smooth flowing chapter.
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Not much laughter in this one but the story had to be told so that Patsy's past is understood. Time to get her sorted out! Alexis x
Comment from jpduck
Poor Patsy! There are few things worse than betrayed trust, and few things more important than the ability to trust. I thought you described Patsy's situation with clarity and simplicity.
Adrian
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Poor Patsy! There are few things worse than betrayed trust, and few things more important than the ability to trust. I thought you described Patsy's situation with clarity and simplicity.
Adrian
Comment Written 20-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Very wise words, Adrian. I think we've all been at the receiving end at one time or another. The problem with me is, I'd rather trust and be disappointed, than never trust again. Alexis x
Comment from Curly Girly
Well done. This shows the compassionate side to Laura. Patsy is in trouble, and she is lucky to have found somebody street-smart like Laura to help.
I didn't like the way the chapter ended. I had to go back and re-read the last paragraph:
'I know a very good lawyer if you have.'
Suggest:
'I know a good lawyer should you need one.'
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Well done. This shows the compassionate side to Laura. Patsy is in trouble, and she is lucky to have found somebody street-smart like Laura to help.
I didn't like the way the chapter ended. I had to go back and re-read the last paragraph:
'I know a very good lawyer if you have.'
Suggest:
'I know a good lawyer should you need one.'
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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I agree, Nicole. I changed it from my original ending because of someone else's suggestion, and also because I thought Laura was maybe getting too close by offering to help Patsy with her problems. I've now returned it to the original thanks to you. Alexis xxx
Comment from royowen
Well done, Alexis, a great progression from the last episode, this is a "silly me" episode, I think we've all trusted someone we thought we could trust, and it turned out we couldn't. And the fact this dear lady, Patsy, ( what an intuitive name for this lady) taken for everything just surfaced, although expected, a great episode Alexis, well written and enjoyable. Well done, blessings, Roy,
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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Well done, Alexis, a great progression from the last episode, this is a "silly me" episode, I think we've all trusted someone we thought we could trust, and it turned out we couldn't. And the fact this dear lady, Patsy, ( what an intuitive name for this lady) taken for everything just surfaced, although expected, a great episode Alexis, well written and enjoyable. Well done, blessings, Roy,
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-May-2015
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I've been there myself, so can really relate to Patsy's character. Isn't writing wonderful. You can mould characters around different things that have happened to you and give them a better outcome. Very satisfying! Alexis x
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Yes that's the good thing about writing,
