Reflections Of Color
Viewing comments for Chapter 6 "Don't Get Me Started"A collection of my All-Time Best rated song lyrics
26 total reviews
Comment from dmt1967
'If you don't want to hear how you left me broken hearted,then don't get me started.' I like this line. I take it the girl asked how the poet was? This is a well written poem. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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'If you don't want to hear how you left me broken hearted,then don't get me started.' I like this line. I take it the girl asked how the poet was? This is a well written poem. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this one. Appreciate your comments always.
Comment from TPAC
Another poem style I must learn and appreciate its values and with these clear identified works -perhaps a better review. I found this work creative.
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Another poem style I must learn and appreciate its values and with these clear identified works -perhaps a better review. I found this work creative.
Comment Written 27-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 27-Aug-2015
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Glad you enjoyed this one. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from Eric1
Hi Brett, this is a wonderful entry for this particular competition, a wonderful repeating line which works really well, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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Hi Brett, this is a wonderful entry for this particular competition, a wonderful repeating line which works really well, I wish you the best of luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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Thank you very much. Always appreciate your comments and support.
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from Nosha17
I liked the use of repetition, it strengthened the feeling of frustration and pain at your loved one's disregard. Excellent rhyming and expression of love. Good luck in the contest. Faye
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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I liked the use of repetition, it strengthened the feeling of frustration and pain at your loved one's disregard. Excellent rhyming and expression of love. Good luck in the contest. Faye
Comment Written 25-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Really do appreciate them very much indeed.
Comment from barkingdog
I'm up late tonight doing bonus reviewing and your work has come up twice.
Is this one of your songs? It has such a nice rhythm and rhyme to it. You have followed the prompt perfectly with your repeat line.
Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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I'm up late tonight doing bonus reviewing and your work has come up twice.
Is this one of your songs? It has such a nice rhythm and rhyme to it. You have followed the prompt perfectly with your repeat line.
Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 25-Aug-2015
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Yes it is one of my Country lyrics. Glad you enjoyed it. Appreciate your comments and support always.
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I fanned you, but your work isn't coming to my message box.
I'm going to fan you again and see if it works this time.
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It says that I already fanned you.
This isn't a blind contest, so it should be in my messages.
Maybe, it takes more than a day for the request to go through.
:) e
Comment from anabellapongasi
Hi there. This is a nicely written entry to this contest. I like the repeating lines, they work very well. This is like a song. I love the picture you used, it's beautiful. Good luck to you in the contest. Anabella
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015
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Hi there. This is a nicely written entry to this contest. I like the repeating lines, they work very well. This is like a song. I love the picture you used, it's beautiful. Good luck to you in the contest. Anabella
Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. Appreciate them very much indeed.
Comment from kriver
HI Bret,
This is a good poem
It is smooth and lyrical.
I really don't see anything
you would need to change or correct.
Have you set it to music yet?
Overall it is a good poem for the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015
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HI Bret,
This is a good poem
It is smooth and lyrical.
I really don't see anything
you would need to change or correct.
Have you set it to music yet?
Overall it is a good poem for the contest.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015
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This actually started life as a Country lyric. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from royowen
Well done Brett, you certainly fulfilled the requirements of these contest conditions, you've done well with this nicely written work, that exudes fine descriptive imagery and eloquently presented language, it sometimes hard to believe that this is a lot longer than it actually is, masterful job, my friend, good luck in the contest, well done, blessings, Roy,
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015
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Well done Brett, you certainly fulfilled the requirements of these contest conditions, you've done well with this nicely written work, that exudes fine descriptive imagery and eloquently presented language, it sometimes hard to believe that this is a lot longer than it actually is, masterful job, my friend, good luck in the contest, well done, blessings, Roy,
Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support as always. Appreciate them indeed.
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Most welcome
Comment from mumsyone
Hi Brett,
This sounds like it could lyrics for a song, especially with the one stanza repeated three times. (At first I thought it was a mistake, but then I realized it is deliberate.) Just a couple of suggestions that you may or may not want to use:
Now, I am the one that's (who's) left behind.
So, if you don't wanna hear how you left me brokenhearted(,)
then don't get me started.
Lois
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015
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Hi Brett,
This sounds like it could lyrics for a song, especially with the one stanza repeated three times. (At first I thought it was a mistake, but then I realized it is deliberate.) Just a couple of suggestions that you may or may not want to use:
Now, I am the one that's (who's) left behind.
So, if you don't wanna hear how you left me brokenhearted(,)
then don't get me started.
Lois
Comment Written 11-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your comments and support. This began life as a Country lyric so the repeating lines are the refrain. Appreciate your comments and support.
Comment from Janet7053
The confines of the repeated lines poetry restrict meaning as they just say the same sentiment in a reverse order. I don't particularly like the contests and writing prompts for that reason. you have conveyed a broken heart that can't fight the urge to tell over and over how wrong he has been done.
Thank you for sharing.
It's a hard fall {from} the top might sound better.
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reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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The confines of the repeated lines poetry restrict meaning as they just say the same sentiment in a reverse order. I don't particularly like the contests and writing prompts for that reason. you have conveyed a broken heart that can't fight the urge to tell over and over how wrong he has been done.
Thank you for sharing.
It's a hard fall {from} the top might sound better.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 07-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2015
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Thanks for your comments.
