A Fall From Grace
It's deadly at the top...46 total reviews
Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Sounds like the date from hell! Okay, you set that joke up, anyway, I will take your advice and never meet with anyone from this site on my own.
He should have known when he showed up that he had more than met his match with the lady in black. Love the last line; she had some "cuts" to make. Very funny and very creepy stuff, my friend,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Sounds like the date from hell! Okay, you set that joke up, anyway, I will take your advice and never meet with anyone from this site on my own.
He should have known when he showed up that he had more than met his match with the lady in black. Love the last line; she had some "cuts" to make. Very funny and very creepy stuff, my friend,
Rhonda
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Thanks for taking a gander at the story, Rhonda. I realize it's rather lengthy. I'm very glad you appreciated the dark humor in it.
~Dean
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It was long, but I didn't realize it as I was very captivated by the story itself. I really liked it.
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Thanks.
Comment from Michaelk
No one would ever stoop to that level just for a higher ranking. By the way, how high are you ranked, Mr. Kuch (runs finger over butcher knife blade)
:)
Your story was well written and engaging. I had thought that she would twist his little plan around, but I kept waiting for him to twist it back. Using a fake publisher as a murder weapon was an awesome turn of events.
I have to wonder how many of us authors would fall for the same ruse. I know I would.
Well done.
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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No one would ever stoop to that level just for a higher ranking. By the way, how high are you ranked, Mr. Kuch (runs finger over butcher knife blade)
:)
Your story was well written and engaging. I had thought that she would twist his little plan around, but I kept waiting for him to twist it back. Using a fake publisher as a murder weapon was an awesome turn of events.
I have to wonder how many of us authors would fall for the same ruse. I know I would.
Well done.
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Yeah, so would I, Michael, that's why I wrote it the way I did.
Thanks for reading the story. I really appreciate your comments. ~Dean
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
Ohhhh! Shudder - shudder - a great entry
for the contest, Dean - good luck, my friend.
A little editing needing doing:
"I know,"Grace continued - space needed between inverted commas and Grace
Anywho, he recognized - shouldn't this be..
Anyway,
"A what?[']"Bruce replied - you have a stray inverted commas and also need a space before Bruce
Margaret
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Ohhhh! Shudder - shudder - a great entry
for the contest, Dean - good luck, my friend.
A little editing needing doing:
"I know,"Grace continued - space needed between inverted commas and Grace
Anywho, he recognized - shouldn't this be..
Anyway,
"A what?[']"Bruce replied - you have a stray inverted commas and also need a space before Bruce
Margaret
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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"Anywho" was intentional, Margaret. My daughter says it a lot. As for the rest, I'll take care of it. Thanks very much for reading. ~Dean
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I learn something new most every day, Dean.
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Don't we all?
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly, as usual. It is very well written and thoroughly engaging. I guess one gets what they deserve when they operate from a place of ill intent and turnabout is always fair play - so they say. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you so much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly, as usual. It is very well written and thoroughly engaging. I guess one gets what they deserve when they operate from a place of ill intent and turnabout is always fair play - so they say. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you so much for sharing it.
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Thanks for reading, Monica.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Very good. Love the way you've used the writing site and the number one position as the crux of this little horror story and then dangling the publisher out as the carrot, all tied in well.Good luck in the contest Dean.
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reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Very good. Love the way you've used the writing site and the number one position as the crux of this little horror story and then dangling the publisher out as the carrot, all tied in well.Good luck in the contest Dean.
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Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Thanks, Pearl. I appreciate you reading it.
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Thanks, Pearl. I appreciate you reading the story first and foremost. I'm very grateful for your thoughtful response. ~Dean
Comment from petalangela
That's it mate that's it my status today says I am exploding.......
We ain't NEVER going to meet EVER
PMSL.
love this one nothing like ambition to cause rift. Lol
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reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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That's it mate that's it my status today says I am exploding.......
We ain't NEVER going to meet EVER
PMSL.
love this one nothing like ambition to cause rift. Lol
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Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Ha-ha, thanks, Petal. I'd never do anything so heinous as this just to be number one. Would I?
I very much appreciate your comments. ~Dean
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Ummmm errrrrrr!!!!!
