Comment from Michaelk

Excellent

Shades of, 'Johnny get your gun'. I wouldn't want to imagine what would go through my mind. Talk about extreme claustrophobia. By the time they unfreeze him, he'll be psychotic. Does this mean that all the other clients were awake for a while until their brains collapsed into a catatonic state?
Quite a horrific thought, living forever unable to sleep, unable to move, only think.
The very thought is making me feel claustrophobic.
Great job. Great addition to the book.

 Comment Written 16-May-2015

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reply by the author on 16-May-2015

Thanks, Michael, I appreciate you taking a look-see at this, and offering your opinions on the story. Much obliged, my fiend...e-r-r-, heh-heh...friend!

Comment from Sis Cat

Excellent

Good, a Tiny Tale of Terror post in the morning. Oh, the horror of being conscious during cryogenics. Aeon Corp. sure botched this one. Poor Mr. Watson.

This tiny tale of terror would have pleased Poe who wrote frequently about people being buried alive. Thank you for "reviving" the genre.

 Comment Written 16-May-2015

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reply by the author on 16-May-2015

Thank you for being so supportive, Sis Cat. I can't thank you enough, and it is greatly appreciated...
~Dean :)

Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is yet another gruesome story from the author. It I so very true. Living forever isn't everything. It is better to just enjoy what time we have.

 Comment Written 16-May-2015

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reply by the author on 16-May-2015

I would have to agree, Tomes. After all, who wants to live as a human popsickle for the rest of their lives anyhow? Not me!
I very much appreciate your support and your review, my friend. ~Dean

reply by Tomes Johnston on 16-May-2015

Good work yet again.

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Ok, a scary thought but without the blood and gore. I read it and actually liked the way you were able to tell this creepy story in such a small space. Good job. I liked the touches of alliteration in the short tale.

Creepy but good.

 Comment Written 16-May-2015

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reply by the author on 16-May-2015

Thanks, jannypan. I did my best to abstain from blood, guts or gore in this tiny, twisted terror tale. Horror isn't always about spurting arteries and monsters tearing people apart. I wanted to create a more of a claustrophobic feel to this one more than anything else, without blood.
Hopefully, I pulled it off.
Thanks very much for your support and review. They are appreciated. :)
~Dean

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 16-May-2015

You did create that feel. It will give anyone who wants to be frozen a lot to think about.

Comment from --Turtle.

Excellent

I read through this short.

Watson's blood pressure is [rapidly] increasing at a [rather alarming rate]. Should we..."
(I wondered if rapidly and rather alarming rate were together an overkill, that one or the other would be more effective.)

I got a sense of scientist setup, but the punchline creepy came so fast, at first I missed it. Maybe consider some sort of examination of Mr. Watson's placement?
Get the reader invested more in Mr. Watson as a person? With the current tone, I was grounded to the doctor's mood... and he don't really care about Mr. Watson. That buffers the empathy I might have felt for Mr. Watson in the moment.
But,
The paralyzed 'locked in' syndrome is a chilling concept, moreso horrifying because it really happens to people. In this setup, you are setting that condition indefinitely. The end notes has a neat... crypt keeper flavor to them.

 Comment Written 16-May-2015

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reply by the author on 16-May-2015

Thanks, Turtlestage, and I'll admit I've mulled over that line you mentioned, contemplating changing it up quite a few times. I suppose there's no time like the present, as they say.
Your feedback is very important to me, and I sincerely appreciate your review. I'll make some edits, and thanks again... ~Dean

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

Hmm, I guess this is similar to being buried alive or perhaps being awake during an autopsy or surgery. The fear of not being able to communicate. Interesting micro.

 Comment Written 16-May-2015

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reply by the author on 16-May-2015

I would guess so, Lance, but I prefer to never find out. How about you?
Thanks so much for reviewing this horror shortie for me. Much obliged... :)
~Dean

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

Oh my goodness, this really sent chills up my spine. The scary thing is it sounds possible. I cannot imagine being in such a horrific situation and pray that no one ever tries to freeze me...besides, I hate the cold.

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 Comment Written 16-May-2015

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reply by the author on 16-May-2015

I ain't too fond of the cold either, Smurph. But, being cremated is the way I'm leaving this earthly realm, and I wouldn't want to be living for that either.
Hey...that gives me an idea...
Thanks very much for reviewing this horror short for me. Much appreciated.
~Dean ;)