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Viewing comments for Chapter 12 "He Restores My Soul"poems inspired by Psalm 23
39 total reviews
Comment from BeasPeas
Hi debi. This villanelle is well done in form and content. Its smooth-flowing lines move easily throughout. Content is reassuring and uplifting. Thank you for writing. Marilyn
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
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Hi debi. This villanelle is well done in form and content. Its smooth-flowing lines move easily throughout. Content is reassuring and uplifting. Thank you for writing. Marilyn
Comment Written 18-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 21-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the wonderful review, Marilyn. I appreciate the encouraging comments. Debi
Comment from Dorothy Farrell
Hi Debi - you have produced a lovely Villanelle - quite a complicated format and you have done so well by using words that do not sound at all contrived when repeating them in the various stanzas. 'He restores my soul' - lovely - like the line from the 23rd Psalm 'He restoreth my soul'. Perfect picture. This would have been a good entry for a Faith poem contest. Lovely read. Warm regards Dorothy x
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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Hi Debi - you have produced a lovely Villanelle - quite a complicated format and you have done so well by using words that do not sound at all contrived when repeating them in the various stanzas. 'He restores my soul' - lovely - like the line from the 23rd Psalm 'He restoreth my soul'. Perfect picture. This would have been a good entry for a Faith poem contest. Lovely read. Warm regards Dorothy x
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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Thank you, Dorothy. You are spot on for the inspiration. I did take the "He restoreth my soul," line from the 23rd Psalm and just updated it to the more modern "restores". I did find the Villanelle an interesting form and challenging. I took a poetry form class from Brooke last year and was amazed at the number of different poetry forms there are. I've been trying out a few just for fun.
Thank you for the gracious comments abut the writing. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
Comment from jmdg1954
Very well written and telling. Religion is about feeling and knowing He is looking out for us.
For He reaches out with love and charity,
and if I look, I'll find He's always there.
Nicely done... John
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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Very well written and telling. Religion is about feeling and knowing He is looking out for us.
For He reaches out with love and charity,
and if I look, I'll find He's always there.
Nicely done... John
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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Hi John,
Thank you for the insightful remarks about the theme and encouraging comments about the writing.
Debi
Comment from CR Delport
I think that is the beauty of religion, not if what is said actually happens or not, but how it makes you feel. This is well written.
Take care.
Christelle.
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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I think that is the beauty of religion, not if what is said actually happens or not, but how it makes you feel. This is well written.
Take care.
Christelle.
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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Hi Christelle,
Thank you so much for the insightful comments about the message. I appreciate the encouraging comments about the writing too. Debi
Comment from danpald
Each one is touched with Divinity
One by one He comes in Majesty
So your poem does say so well
In each of our personal life He comes to last
Well done to remind a miserable crew
This earthly lot that turns from Him
Not seeing He is present here
In every one we meet holding out His hand
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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Each one is touched with Divinity
One by one He comes in Majesty
So your poem does say so well
In each of our personal life He comes to last
Well done to remind a miserable crew
This earthly lot that turns from Him
Not seeing He is present here
In every one we meet holding out His hand
Comment Written 19-May-2015
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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Thank you for taking time to craft such a creative review. I appreciate your insights on the theme and kind comments about the writing. Thank you for taking the time to read and to share such a thoughtful review. Debi
Comment from Bill Schott
This villanelle, He Restores My Soul, simply reminds the readers that God is out there and alive. He came to be our way out and way in.
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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This villanelle, He Restores My Soul, simply reminds the readers that God is out there and alive. He came to be our way out and way in.
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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I love the insightful comment, "He came to be our way out and way in." It would make a great line in a poem, but is a profound statement standing alone. Thank you for the wonderful review. Debi
Comment from dmt1967
I do like the meter and the picture as well. This is a very up lifting poem. The picture and poem goes very well together and I liked the way this poem sounded. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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I do like the meter and the picture as well. This is a very up lifting poem. The picture and poem goes very well together and I liked the way this poem sounded. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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Thank you for a thoughtful review. I am pleased that you found the message uplifting. I too love the picture. It is amazing.
Comment from harmony13
Excellent Poem! The poem flows and connects well. The author's words are heart felt, strong and creative. The reader pondered on the words of this poem. The artwork is perfect and compliments the theme of this poem.
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Excellent Poem! The poem flows and connects well. The author's words are heart felt, strong and creative. The reader pondered on the words of this poem. The artwork is perfect and compliments the theme of this poem.
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Thank you for the encouraging review. I appreciate the comments about the writing and even more that you took time to ponder on the words. Thank you so much.
Comment from jlsavell
w.j.debi,
when someone attempts a difficult poetic form and executes it flawlessly, it intimidates me!!! Why, because strict adherence to form is daunting to me. It puts me in a straight jacket where there is no wriggle room. You, my friend, have no problem with this poetic form.
Absolutely brilliant and beautiful and emotive.. I am in awe.. jlsavell
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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w.j.debi,
when someone attempts a difficult poetic form and executes it flawlessly, it intimidates me!!! Why, because strict adherence to form is daunting to me. It puts me in a straight jacket where there is no wriggle room. You, my friend, have no problem with this poetic form.
Absolutely brilliant and beautiful and emotive.. I am in awe.. jlsavell
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 18-May-2015
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You are far too kind with your praise. Last year I took one of Brooke's classes on forms am just experimenting this year. You have no need to be intimidated. I wish I could do free verse as effectively as you do it. I consider that high art.
Thank you for encouraging comments. I appreciate it.
Comment from TAB_that's me
Isn't it amazing! Isn't He amazing! Wonderful poem which helps me to be restored as your words are great reminders of what He does for us.
teresa
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Isn't it amazing! Isn't He amazing! Wonderful poem which helps me to be restored as your words are great reminders of what He does for us.
teresa
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 19-May-2015
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Thank you for the great review. I am so happy it brought you joy. I appreciate the encouragement. Debi
