The Wonder
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Comment from jlsavell
Good morning Michael,
Your words are elegant and filled with emotion.
There are times in our lives where our trials and tribulations are much to bear.
Many of us feel like we are dying and we need resuscitation, calling for help. Nothing can numb the feeling of anxiety and feelings of isolation.
We revel in distant memories finding or trying to find some comfort. Sometimes this brings warmth and sometimes more excruciating pain.
How fitting to use Adam and Eve, for there began mankind's spiritual struggle and often times feel as if our faith is tested beyond, way beyond our limits. Did Eve know the extreme woes she would bring upon her inheritance by disobeying God and Adam by not admonishing her wrongdoing.
Enough said. I love your spin on the sloe gin liqueur and the slow gin going down to numb it all.
As you know , I can relate to this work though the only thing I drink usually is wine and in modication. In fact red wine is extremely beneficial for you when sipped in modication. As some may falsely believe, alcohol, ir the consumption of alcohol is not a sin, the over indulgence is just as eating over indulgently is. The consequences are 2 fold in health and finances.
What,I loved about you and
I was enjoying a quiet moment with one glass if wine or even a beer after a long long day. We would sit and connect. Drinking alcohol is not always a sign of being a lush or an alcoholic anymore that having sex every night makes you a sexual addict .
In fact my sister who is of a particular religious persuasion doesn't drink alcohol or anything with caffeine, yet her medicine cabinet is filled with drugstore brandishments, sometimes prescribed, sometimes not, but these entities are way more harmful to the body, way more than occasional alcohol consumption. They kill the body. Yet, the do gooders judge the ones who drink occasionally as sinful. Go figure.
And what really gets me, those who tout their Christianity label people unjustly and unfairly. Such hypocrites. And they are the very ones who poison their system with harmful pharmaceuticals. And ALL pharmaceuticals are harmful, all.
Okay didn't nean to get off the beaten path.
Beautiful work worthy of more. Hope you are happy. You deserve to be happy.
I love you dearly my best friend and am only a step away.
Beautiful poet you are
Jimi
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Good morning Michael,
Your words are elegant and filled with emotion.
There are times in our lives where our trials and tribulations are much to bear.
Many of us feel like we are dying and we need resuscitation, calling for help. Nothing can numb the feeling of anxiety and feelings of isolation.
We revel in distant memories finding or trying to find some comfort. Sometimes this brings warmth and sometimes more excruciating pain.
How fitting to use Adam and Eve, for there began mankind's spiritual struggle and often times feel as if our faith is tested beyond, way beyond our limits. Did Eve know the extreme woes she would bring upon her inheritance by disobeying God and Adam by not admonishing her wrongdoing.
Enough said. I love your spin on the sloe gin liqueur and the slow gin going down to numb it all.
As you know , I can relate to this work though the only thing I drink usually is wine and in modication. In fact red wine is extremely beneficial for you when sipped in modication. As some may falsely believe, alcohol, ir the consumption of alcohol is not a sin, the over indulgence is just as eating over indulgently is. The consequences are 2 fold in health and finances.
What,I loved about you and
I was enjoying a quiet moment with one glass if wine or even a beer after a long long day. We would sit and connect. Drinking alcohol is not always a sign of being a lush or an alcoholic anymore that having sex every night makes you a sexual addict .
In fact my sister who is of a particular religious persuasion doesn't drink alcohol or anything with caffeine, yet her medicine cabinet is filled with drugstore brandishments, sometimes prescribed, sometimes not, but these entities are way more harmful to the body, way more than occasional alcohol consumption. They kill the body. Yet, the do gooders judge the ones who drink occasionally as sinful. Go figure.
And what really gets me, those who tout their Christianity label people unjustly and unfairly. Such hypocrites. And they are the very ones who poison their system with harmful pharmaceuticals. And ALL pharmaceuticals are harmful, all.
Okay didn't nean to get off the beaten path.
Beautiful work worthy of more. Hope you are happy. You deserve to be happy.
I love you dearly my best friend and am only a step away.
Beautiful poet you are
Jimi
Comment Written 23-May-2015
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2015
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Good Morning!...,.and what a wonderful rise and shine....my goodness I feel fine...-smile- I've just left Vance and believe he may have spiked my coffee....I cant seem to quit smiling...everything looks so soft and beautiful...fuzzy almost...oh come lets touch it, oh please may we...?....-headtilt- hello Jimi....-smile- thank you angel.....love Michael
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Coffee? You drink coffee? Since when? Today is beautiful, it always is with people I love in my life. Know what I mean, jellybean? Can't wait to see you one day and just talk, talk, talk. Hope you decide one day to come sailing. Sail away, sailing away is where I want to be? How's your seasoned visitor fairing? What a longggggg vacation she has taken. Doesn't she have a home? Or family? Or good friends who need help cuz they are sick?
Hey, tell her she can come sailing too if she is still hanging around. Hey, but some people hang around like a bad habit.
You gave a great day! Love you too!
Comment from His Grayness
Excellent work here my friend with no suggestions for improvements needed. It's always a pleasure to read your highly creative and unique work! Very best wishes! Vance
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Excellent work here my friend with no suggestions for improvements needed. It's always a pleasure to read your highly creative and unique work! Very best wishes! Vance
Comment Written 18-May-2015
reply by the author on 21-May-2015
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Hi Vance....-smile- thank you sir...pleased you enjoy.....love Bug-
Comment from Glasstruth
Sounds like someone taking a drug with booze. Like the short descriptions which are several in one line, like: "ambulance medicine & divine experience spiritual made mess" It all ties together beautifully. Great job! Les
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Sounds like someone taking a drug with booze. Like the short descriptions which are several in one line, like: "ambulance medicine & divine experience spiritual made mess" It all ties together beautifully. Great job! Les
Comment Written 17-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Sometimes drugs and booze just don't do the trick.....like the song says. Thanks man love bug
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Good job!
-excellent rhythm
-action flows smoothly
-descriptive language used
-excellent format and picture (love the pic and the video)
-excellent character development
-held my interest all the way to the end
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Good job!
-excellent rhythm
-action flows smoothly
-descriptive language used
-excellent format and picture (love the pic and the video)
-excellent character development
-held my interest all the way to the end
Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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-wink- mucho gratious......you like maragreetas ....ahhh never mind......thank you Gypsy......love Bug-
Comment from lancellot
Interesting. What I like about your work is that it can mean different things depending of the reader and how one feels at the time of reading. Very artistic.
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Interesting. What I like about your work is that it can mean different things depending of the reader and how one feels at the time of reading. Very artistic.
Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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thank you....I try to do that at times. thanks Lance...appreciate ya man....love Michael
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Somebody called somebody, that's me Michael, no name just a handle and nobody knows anyone where I live, except possibly that 'one'. Texas, I just might fly over and see you one day, Michael, that would shock you, I expect, but they say it is very welcoming in your neck of the woods, big on hospitality?
Your poem caught me a little today, it is really lovely, Sloe Gin was a favourite of my mothers, but it makes my cheeks go pink! Love you, Michael. xsx Sandy.
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Somebody called somebody, that's me Michael, no name just a handle and nobody knows anyone where I live, except possibly that 'one'. Texas, I just might fly over and see you one day, Michael, that would shock you, I expect, but they say it is very welcoming in your neck of the woods, big on hospitality?
Your poem caught me a little today, it is really lovely, Sloe Gin was a favourite of my mothers, but it makes my cheeks go pink! Love you, Michael. xsx Sandy.
Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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ahh Texas would treat you right or find trouble with me.....love you Sandy Michael
Comment from livelylinda
Michael: some pretty forlorn music, my friend . . .and equally forlorn, confused word description . . . just singing the blues . . . no thunder today, only sunshine with a chance of rain. Linda Dos
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Michael: some pretty forlorn music, my friend . . .and equally forlorn, confused word description . . . just singing the blues . . . no thunder today, only sunshine with a chance of rain. Linda Dos
Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Linda I'm worried about you.....I don't like that your alone....come stay......willake a home like you wrote about.....love you michael
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Michael: I may live alone but in a mobile home park where neighbors can hear you flush your toilet because of only a few feet in-between. I have three such neighbors who look out for me and an ex who likes to boss me around so checks on me. I have a system arranged with my neighbor, Michael, directly across the street from me . . . when I get up in the morning, I raise my blinds in the windows that face his mobile home. He knows that if these blinds don't get raised, to come check on me. I have family but they live 1 1/2 hours south of me and are busy with jobs, kids, etc. I have contact with them via Facebook, e-mail and phone. I truly appreciate your concern and offer. However, where I live now is about five minutes from my hospital and doctors. I can't move to Texas and begin that new doctors process over again nor move even farther away from my family. I also love my church and am looked after by several friends from there. I am still functioning enough to care for myself. I grocery shop, take my meds, do laundry, do my housework, etc. I do it much slower now and sometimes I get a little behind, but it gets done. I have several people who give me rides to the grocery store, pharmacy, doctor appointments, church, etc. Having several means I don't wear out any one person! On the top of my "Needs" list, are a reconditioned washer and dryer and a little old car to putz around in so I don't have to depend on others so much. But, until those things magically appear before me, LOL, I manage. Thank you again, so so much. Your concern means a great deal to me. Thunder
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love you
Comment from robina1978
Again I enjoyed the first and last stanza best. The photo complements your poem perfectly. A ballerina on water. It is a free verse, full of alliteration. And a slightly religious touch.
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Again I enjoyed the first and last stanza best. The photo complements your poem perfectly. A ballerina on water. It is a free verse, full of alliteration. And a slightly religious touch.
Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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thank you...-smile-
Comment from lucy marie
Yeah... This is stunning . I love the slow burning sexuality in this one . I found it surprisingly calming ...a sigh on soft lips.
Lucy Marie x
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Yeah... This is stunning . I love the slow burning sexuality in this one . I found it surprisingly calming ...a sigh on soft lips.
Lucy Marie x
Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 16-May-2015
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Lucy Marie....Lucy Marie you are no ordinary love....-smile- like when you pop in like Mary Poppins and remind me of England's real Queen. thank you Beautiful....never forgotten. love you Michael
Comment from TPAC
Insightful. Poet sees zones of loneliness even with other a feeling of not belonging poet realization is self as blame. Very creative in presentation and differ from norm Thanks for sharing
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reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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Insightful. Poet sees zones of loneliness even with other a feeling of not belonging poet realization is self as blame. Very creative in presentation and differ from norm Thanks for sharing
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Comment Written 16-May-2015
reply by the author on 17-May-2015
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uh....-headshake-....no. this is about the love you compare all others against.....I'm not really sure what the hell your talking bout....but thanks for dropping a dime....I'm richer....-smile- love bug-
