Dark Covenant
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Fright "The Berwick Witches Series: Book One
28 total reviews
Comment from Shirley McLain
You have good tension in this chapter. It kept me moving forward when I was reading it. I wanted to know what was going to happen. Now I have to wait for the next chapter. Great job. Shirley
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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You have good tension in this chapter. It kept me moving forward when I was reading it. I wanted to know what was going to happen. Now I have to wait for the next chapter. Great job. Shirley
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Thank you, Shirley.
Comment from sibhus
A well written chapter. The dialogue seems very natural. The tension you have created, draws the reader into the story, and carries them along. A very interesting chapter of what looks like to be a good book.
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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A well written chapter. The dialogue seems very natural. The tension you have created, draws the reader into the story, and carries them along. A very interesting chapter of what looks like to be a good book.
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Thank you sibhus.
Comment from thee-name
Excellent chapter. Seen no mistakes. Writing was interesting.
"Your waking me . . . " She looked at the clock, . . . " twelve o'clock at night to tell me you had a visitor?"
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Excellent chapter. Seen no mistakes. Writing was interesting.
"Your waking me . . . " She looked at the clock, . . . " twelve o'clock at night to tell me you had a visitor?"
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Thank you, thee-name.
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thank you!
Comment from Ulla
This is very well written and I follow the story line with great interest. The suspense within is well captured. I am enjoying it. Didn't come across any faults. Looking forward to read on. Ulla
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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This is very well written and I follow the story line with great interest. The suspense within is well captured. I am enjoying it. Didn't come across any faults. Looking forward to read on. Ulla
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Thank you so much for supporting my book. I really appreciate it, Ulla. I'm glad you're liking it.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
An impressive chapter, amahra --
I hope they don't hurt Charlie
too much, as he doesn't deserve
it.
River said avoid[ed] her eyes. - avoiding her eyes
swig of his beer(,) then placed the - comma
Margaret
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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An impressive chapter, amahra --
I hope they don't hurt Charlie
too much, as he doesn't deserve
it.
River said avoid[ed] her eyes. - avoiding her eyes
swig of his beer(,) then placed the - comma
Margaret
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Thank you, Margaret. I made those changes.
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I wouldn't worry too much about the length. It is fine. I find it better not to draw attention to the length of a piece. If its good, it'll get read. My posts are regularly long (3000 - 5000) and they still get a good showing - if they are any good!
The character list was very useful and long! In fact I have seen posts shorted than that! (only kidding - it was very handy).
Well written piece and the dialogue was fitting and sounded natural in my head as I read it, and the writing is accessible. My favourite line was "Monday morning rose with an orange sun" - says it all economically but descriptively.
Nice chapter
GMG
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Hi there,
I wouldn't worry too much about the length. It is fine. I find it better not to draw attention to the length of a piece. If its good, it'll get read. My posts are regularly long (3000 - 5000) and they still get a good showing - if they are any good!
The character list was very useful and long! In fact I have seen posts shorted than that! (only kidding - it was very handy).
Well written piece and the dialogue was fitting and sounded natural in my head as I read it, and the writing is accessible. My favourite line was "Monday morning rose with an orange sun" - says it all economically but descriptively.
Nice chapter
GMG
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Thank you very much, giraffmang. This was a great review. Thanks for pointing out your favorite line. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from padumachitta
Hi...a chapter to keep us reading for sure.
Murphy's law...dang the mix up with the blood..and now I gotta worry that the wolves will miss...that the Dr, did not buy it and will go a different way or something..
I saw no spag, but then I was too busy enjoying the read...to look proper.
padumachitta
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Hi...a chapter to keep us reading for sure.
Murphy's law...dang the mix up with the blood..and now I gotta worry that the wolves will miss...that the Dr, did not buy it and will go a different way or something..
I saw no spag, but then I was too busy enjoying the read...to look proper.
padumachitta
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Thank you very much.
Comment from barkingdog
The read sped by. Great dialogue. I especially like the wolves teasing each other about their wives. That scene was very visual for me.
I like suspense and this sounds like a good one, Amara. I'll try to keep up with it if you don't post too often. I'm not on site everyday.
:) ellen
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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The read sped by. Great dialogue. I especially like the wolves teasing each other about their wives. That scene was very visual for me.
I like suspense and this sounds like a good one, Amara. I'll try to keep up with it if you don't post too often. I'm not on site everyday.
:) ellen
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Thank you very much, Ellen. I try to post once a week.
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That's perfect. :)e
Comment from Scripter Ink
I know it's mostly dialogue, but I got a two-fer! It feels like a script as well, like I was part of a series and part of a novel. Which maybe that you did this on purpose, or it could just be me. Either way, if you're story has that ability to be played off as both novel and script and be equally as good, I hope that your series will become so popular I get to see it as an actual show!
You're characters a believable, I love the dynamics between them. The little things, that offer you hints of what the character is doing. Like the good doctor crossing her legs, not sure why that stuck out.
Additionally, you get a bonus. I had to get up close and personal so I could see that bird in your profile and I wasn't disappointed.
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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I know it's mostly dialogue, but I got a two-fer! It feels like a script as well, like I was part of a series and part of a novel. Which maybe that you did this on purpose, or it could just be me. Either way, if you're story has that ability to be played off as both novel and script and be equally as good, I hope that your series will become so popular I get to see it as an actual show!
You're characters a believable, I love the dynamics between them. The little things, that offer you hints of what the character is doing. Like the good doctor crossing her legs, not sure why that stuck out.
Additionally, you get a bonus. I had to get up close and personal so I could see that bird in your profile and I wasn't disappointed.
Comment Written 26-May-2015
reply by the author on 26-May-2015
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Thank you so much, Scripter. I'm really flattered that you liked it that much. I try to narrate only when possible, but let the character's interactions push the story.
Comment from c_lucas
Some one needs to bite the good doctor and turn him into a werewolf. This is very well written with a touch of suspense at the end. There is good imagery.
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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Some one needs to bite the good doctor and turn him into a werewolf. This is very well written with a touch of suspense at the end. There is good imagery.
Comment Written 25-May-2015
reply by the author on 25-May-2015
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You're so mean, Charlie. But that's a good thought. Thanks for the review.
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You're welcome, Amahra. Charlie
