The Curse of 'Gator Bayou
Viewing comments for Chapter 7 "Chapter 7-Voodoo Curses"A young Cajun girl struggles to survive.
7 total reviews
Comment from jusylee72
enjoyed every minute of this read. I don't believe in voodoo at least i don't want to but this has me interested and waiting to see what happens. Good Character development. I will keep following the story.
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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enjoyed every minute of this read. I don't believe in voodoo at least i don't want to but this has me interested and waiting to see what happens. Good Character development. I will keep following the story.
Comment Written 06-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2016
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Thank you so much for your encouragement. Chapter 8 will be coming soon. I am glad you liked it. :O)
Jo
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Jo. I was right in the middle of some fried squid when I started reading this one, remind me to finish my dinner before I read your next on please LOL. This is a great chapter, very well excplained and the dialogue is superb. There was only one sentence that tripped me a bit that you might want to look at. I enjoy your work mate...
"That's most(of) the people I know who would know this kind of stuff." ....
how about tring something like..."They are the only types of people that I am aware of that would know"...
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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G'day Jo. I was right in the middle of some fried squid when I started reading this one, remind me to finish my dinner before I read your next on please LOL. This is a great chapter, very well excplained and the dialogue is superb. There was only one sentence that tripped me a bit that you might want to look at. I enjoy your work mate...
"That's most(of) the people I know who would know this kind of stuff." ....
how about tring something like..."They are the only types of people that I am aware of that would know"...
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 11-May-2015
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Smiling. The fried squid sounds good. The awkward sentence has been fixed. Thanks for the heads up. Glad you are enjoying the story.
Jo
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Nice picture. Reminds me of the bayou swamplands, and, no, voodoo curses are not real. Easy to follow story line. Action flows smoothly. Write on.
reply by the author on 10-May-2015
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Nice picture. Reminds me of the bayou swamplands, and, no, voodoo curses are not real. Easy to follow story line. Action flows smoothly. Write on.
Comment Written 10-May-2015
reply by the author on 10-May-2015
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You are so right Brett, voodoo is real but their curses have no power over those who are filled with the Holy Spirit. Thank you for staying with me on this journey of my first book.
Jo
Comment from Wabigoon
Jo--
Back to Renee. Don't know what time this is yet. Well done. Grisly, grimy. Still don't "figure" Evangeline in here, or how she figures.
Again, I think, you are working a bit hurried. Her are some notes:
Sally quenched up her nose as in disgust. Why the "as" and is "quenched" the word you mean or need?
Evangeline laughed (hardily). "Heartily?" You look it up.
had (escaladed) when "escalated?"
any later." Renee walked out the door toward his truck.
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Launching the police boat went off without any problems. Pat and Renee were soon on their way to
Here, is a formatting problem, with no separation between segments suggesting you are not checking your copy once it is posted. Happens more than once.
"told him when you get that feeling "someone's walking over your grave." This is excellent. I know this particular feeling.
Thanks, you are almost overwhelming ME with new stuff but so far I am keeping up.
Jeff
reply by the author on 09-May-2015
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Jo--
Back to Renee. Don't know what time this is yet. Well done. Grisly, grimy. Still don't "figure" Evangeline in here, or how she figures.
Again, I think, you are working a bit hurried. Her are some notes:
Sally quenched up her nose as in disgust. Why the "as" and is "quenched" the word you mean or need?
Evangeline laughed (hardily). "Heartily?" You look it up.
had (escaladed) when "escalated?"
any later." Renee walked out the door toward his truck.
**********
Launching the police boat went off without any problems. Pat and Renee were soon on their way to
Here, is a formatting problem, with no separation between segments suggesting you are not checking your copy once it is posted. Happens more than once.
"told him when you get that feeling "someone's walking over your grave." This is excellent. I know this particular feeling.
Thanks, you are almost overwhelming ME with new stuff but so far I am keeping up.
Jeff
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 09-May-2015
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You are so right Jeff. I have been rushed the past few days. I need to slow down. I will. I would nominate you again for all your help but can do only one time per month. I think Evie's part will come in to play later for you as the chapters progress. Right now her role is just Renee's selfish bitch of a wife.
Jo
Comment from abbasjoy
Very interesting about voodoo and the curses. I think someone used that as an excuse to kill Marcel. Furthermore, this individual went to great extremes to ensure that so many things with this particular type of lipstick was found. There was no attempt to hide it at all, and make it appear to be a woman, whether it is actually so or not.
Good read.
reply by the author on 09-May-2015
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Very interesting about voodoo and the curses. I think someone used that as an excuse to kill Marcel. Furthermore, this individual went to great extremes to ensure that so many things with this particular type of lipstick was found. There was no attempt to hide it at all, and make it appear to be a woman, whether it is actually so or not.
Good read.
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 09-May-2015
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I'm glad the story is giving you some thoughts as to what may be happening. Glad to have you reading my story.
Jo
Comment from Misrael
This is a very creepy part of the story but it makes it very interesting and keeps my attention very well. I hope that Rene and the coroner find who did this. Good read and keep on writig.
reply by the author on 09-May-2015
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This is a very creepy part of the story but it makes it very interesting and keeps my attention very well. I hope that Rene and the coroner find who did this. Good read and keep on writig.
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 09-May-2015
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Oh, I hope this does not get too creepy for you. There will be more violence before the end.
jo
Comment from olliebuster
Nice. I like the way the wayward wives were used up front to get the interest going then calmly left behind as the "meat" of the story took over.
The voodoo profile of the story added more mystery in what could very well be a murder to silence an unsuspecting witness. It is building nicely. The next chapter should be very interesting. There is one mis-spelling I picked up. "The confrontation had escaladed" Change escaladed to "escalated". Other wise a good read.
Olliebuster.
reply by the author on 09-May-2015
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Nice. I like the way the wayward wives were used up front to get the interest going then calmly left behind as the "meat" of the story took over.
The voodoo profile of the story added more mystery in what could very well be a murder to silence an unsuspecting witness. It is building nicely. The next chapter should be very interesting. There is one mis-spelling I picked up. "The confrontation had escaladed" Change escaladed to "escalated". Other wise a good read.
Olliebuster.
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 09-May-2015
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Thanks ollie for commenting on my story and catching my spag. I thought that didn't look right but the spell check didn't catch it. It seems you may be on to something with your theory. Keep reading.
Jo
