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Poems about the coastline

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Comment from Wabigoon
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Pantygynt--
The British summer is that bad, eh? If you can stand the summer you can defeat the Blitz! I like that.

Aye, the beautifully foiled expectations of your stanzas here are what make this a terrific, moody, evocative poem -- to say nothing of strong.

Thanks
Wabigoon

 Comment Written 08-May-2015

reply by the author on 09-May-2015
    Many thanks for your kind and humerous review. I am most grateful.
Comment from BJ_Barnes
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Excellent poem! It flows together very well and has its own rhythm. Thank you for including the notes it really made it easier to understand. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 08-May-2015

reply by the author on 08-May-2015
    Thank you so much dfor reading and reviewing. I'm glad you found the notes helpful.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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Would be nice to be sitting out on that pier right about now. Picture definitely illustrates poem well. Verses fit together nicely and notes interesting. Write on.

 Comment Written 08-May-2015

reply by the author on 08-May-2015
    Thasnk you so much for reiewing this.
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
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That was an interesting look at summer in the UK. Quite chilling I would say..Thank you for adding the notes as it did,unlike the weather' clear things up a bit for me..Now I live in Hawaii where fog is almost never seen and the sun shines 12 mos a year.. Am I lucky dog or what lol
tk

 Comment Written 08-May-2015

reply by the author on 08-May-2015
    And going out with a mermaid there so I'm told! I'd say you had luck in spades man!

    Thanks for this review.
reply by A TARNISHED KNIGHT on 08-May-2015
    Yes I am my friend But think maybe an ace of hearts would better serve as my lucky card heheh
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
    Uh huh - definitely a better choice of suit.
Comment from Treischel
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So, that explains the British propensities. A damp and dreary Summer season. You 5-7-5 formatted stanzas described the beachfront environment on a dull day perfectly. A delightful piece about an unpleasant and unprofitable day. Nicely done!

 Comment Written 08-May-2015

reply by the author on 08-May-2015
    Thank you very much for this. It's not always as bad as that but right now we are going through a relly cold and dismal patch.
Comment from Debbie Noland
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I admire the way this piece is able to convey both resignation (to the weather conditions) and anticipation (of when the gray season will lift.) the playful imagery shines through a sort of "Rain, Rain, Go Away" atmosphere. These things give the reader an unusual feel for (not just view of) this place and time. I find that very appealing.

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 Comment Written 08-May-2015

reply by the author on 08-May-2015
    Thank you for this insiteful review. I'm glad you were able to pick up the humour in the stuff. Different cultures do not always react the same way to humour.
Comment from I am Cat
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I love Punch and Judy... I used to watch them on Electric Company when I was a kid... sort of like Captain Kangaroo...?

never mind... i figured it out... and I'm going to have another cup of coffee... I'm obviously not even capable of counting to five this morning.
:(

love the imagery... and i'm happy to see Litorral expanding before my eyes... :)

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 Comment Written 08-May-2015

reply by the author on 08-May-2015
    I'm not sure I understand: "a one consonant word... " Did you mean syllable? Well it is single syllabled. It has to be to fit the the form. Sorry, bemused.
reply by I am Cat on 08-May-2015
    damn.... see what happens when I don't sleep... yeah, that's what I mean... but... hold on... wasn't it supposed to have seven syllables?
reply by I am Cat on 08-May-2015
    damn.... see what happens when I don't sleep... yeah, that's what I mean... but... hold on... wasn't it supposed to have seven syllables?
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
    No it's 5-7-5 like all the others!
reply by I am Cat on 08-May-2015
    yeah... i know. never mind... just point me toward the percolator :(
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
    After what I read elsewhere it better be decaf!
reply by I am Cat on 08-May-2015
    lol... hey, I get ONE cup of caffeinated! PLEASE don't take that away from me!
    (nobody wants that to happen) lol