Act of Endurance
Viewing comments for Chapter 52 "Night in Woods"Dawn of Chaos
29 total reviews
Comment from Lynn27
I did enjoyed the poem and love the details that you tried to paint with your words.
In a lot of your lines are grammar errors, and I think most of them are you left words or used wrong word.
You need to discover way that you can catch most them yourself.
Lynn
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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I did enjoyed the poem and love the details that you tried to paint with your words.
In a lot of your lines are grammar errors, and I think most of them are you left words or used wrong word.
You need to discover way that you can catch most them yourself.
Lynn
Comment Written 13-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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You' re right my search for written comforts has its extremes. Thanking you for generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from c_lucas
Put feet in action and run like hell. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Put feet in action and run like hell. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words, making for a very good read. There is very good imagery.
Comment Written 13-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Yet some state the opposite of your claims, I feel a mid-way compromise. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating views.
Comment from Galactia
Hi
I find your poem very hard to read, it is a little confuding..
Your firdt line sugestion maybe change to...
I am not a lucky person although i take a chance.
There is quite a lot of sentence structure that neadd rearanging/ fixing.
Regards
Tia
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Hi
I find your poem very hard to read, it is a little confuding..
Your firdt line sugestion maybe change to...
I am not a lucky person although i take a chance.
There is quite a lot of sentence structure that neadd rearanging/ fixing.
Regards
Tia
Comment Written 13-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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I thank you for your given insights and pits in my writes do exists: I' m slowly learning wish I could blame age. It's me. Thanking you for generous rate and captivating views.
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Don't wory my poems aren't perfect
eaither, i can tell you know i have grammar and pinctuation issues through mine, i am trying to overcome that issue my self.
Great job
Regards
Tia
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Don't wory my poems aren't perfect
eaither, i can tell you know i have grammar and pinctuation issues through mine, i am trying to overcome that issue my self.
Great job
Regards
Tia
Comment from Dean Kuch
Again, far, FAR too much reverse syntax in this lengthy, hefty write, TPAC...
But I get it...
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Again, far, FAR too much reverse syntax in this lengthy, hefty write, TPAC...
But I get it...
Comment Written 13-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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I still pounding to correct such flaws maybe once mind comprehend such realities: I to advance. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed thoughts.
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You are more than welcome, TPAC.
~Dean
Comment from beizanten
Angsty poetry, well describe in simple and easy to understand words. The angst and lonely emotion flow quite well and easy to relate to but I think it still has room for improvement. Very descriptive yet I think you could use more powerful words/description to show emotion.
I think this is the best line in this. Very good: My steps endless each move futile, heart in thumps they both dance a tango, they to keep struggling aims.
Interesting, chilling ending
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Angsty poetry, well describe in simple and easy to understand words. The angst and lonely emotion flow quite well and easy to relate to but I think it still has room for improvement. Very descriptive yet I think you could use more powerful words/description to show emotion.
I think this is the best line in this. Very good: My steps endless each move futile, heart in thumps they both dance a tango, they to keep struggling aims.
Interesting, chilling ending
Comment Written 13-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Appreciate your given insights and agree with statements of further improvements and well revise. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
Comment from Joan E.
You certainly communicated fear and anxiety as you described your dark and quiet environment among the trees at night in this prose poem. I hope the ghosts stay away! Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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You certainly communicated fear and anxiety as you described your dark and quiet environment among the trees at night in this prose poem. I hope the ghosts stay away! Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 12-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Wonderful is the reviews received about this write. A complex mix of cross seen by its reader: super creative in suggestions hopes of me tighten on loose strings. Thanking you for generous rate and welcomed views.
Comment from foxangie123
I had read this before and reviewed and it is a great as it was the first time. You are very creative and write well. I wish you wrote me as a matter of fact. You place yourself and the reader on or within the road or house you write about.
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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I had read this before and reviewed and it is a great as it was the first time. You are very creative and write well. I wish you wrote me as a matter of fact. You place yourself and the reader on or within the road or house you write about.
Comment Written 12-Jun-2016
reply by the author on 14-Jun-2016
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Your opinion unfortunately I too share, yet reality holds weak presented features others can not ignore. Thanking you for your given insights and captivating comments.
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Hugs to you always.
Comment from Janet Foor
A little different form of poem but I felt the fear in each line like:
My chest reacts pressure swell it forth, shell won't hold air, eyes no vision to me: for me at all now". I could almost feel the fear as I read about this walk in the "Wooded Night".
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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A little different form of poem but I felt the fear in each line like:
My chest reacts pressure swell it forth, shell won't hold air, eyes no vision to me: for me at all now". I could almost feel the fear as I read about this walk in the "Wooded Night".
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2016
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This aim is purpose of any write realistic absorbing its reader taking them within stated content. I wish such achievements by my writes to be. Thanking you for generous rate and touching thoughts.
Comment from richie m
nothing like a little stream of conscious writing to slap you in the face and confuse the wake-up process first thing in the morning.THREE CUPS 'O COFFEE later this is actually well done and pretty inventive' good job--dm
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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nothing like a little stream of conscious writing to slap you in the face and confuse the wake-up process first thing in the morning.THREE CUPS 'O COFFEE later this is actually well done and pretty inventive' good job--dm
Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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Thanking you for your generous rate and captivating comments about this write. Still looking for pits within conveyances.
Comment from evesayshi
I am utterly confused about this poem - I do not know if all the grammatical errors? in the work are actually errors or intended mistakes - if grammatical errors, corrections are in order, if not, it still needs work, which I leave entirely up to you...
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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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I am utterly confused about this poem - I do not know if all the grammatical errors? in the work are actually errors or intended mistakes - if grammatical errors, corrections are in order, if not, it still needs work, which I leave entirely up to you...
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2016
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2016
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Yeah. I suffer in my writes, constant revisions: yet to improve. Thanking you for generous rate and encouraging statements.
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You are so welcome, and because you write, you have a great deal to say - keep writing...
