The Curse of 'Gator Bayou
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "New Orleans Bound"A young Cajun girl struggles to survive.
7 total reviews
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Very familiar with The Big Easy so this tale caught my attention. Story line easy to follow and smooth flowing action holds reader's interest throughout. Write on
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Very familiar with The Big Easy so this tale caught my attention. Story line easy to follow and smooth flowing action holds reader's interest throughout. Write on
Comment Written 11-May-2015
reply by the author on 22-May-2015
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Thank you Brett for your encouraging review. Been on Vacation but will be back to writing more chapters soon.
Jo
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Jo. This is another great chapter mate. I liked that name for the $10 "sawbuck" where did that originate? She is one lucky girl that she got a ride with some decent sailors, they aren't all decent as Richard said. I never thought about needing documents to work, although I've been there myself. This is a very enjoyable story and I'm looking forward to the next installment with crossed fingers for her wellbeing. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 09-May-2015
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G'day Jo. This is another great chapter mate. I liked that name for the $10 "sawbuck" where did that originate? She is one lucky girl that she got a ride with some decent sailors, they aren't all decent as Richard said. I never thought about needing documents to work, although I've been there myself. This is a very enjoyable story and I'm looking forward to the next installment with crossed fingers for her wellbeing. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 09-May-2015
reply by the author on 09-May-2015
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I did a lot of research about the 1940's South prior to beginning my story. I'm not sure, however, where the term sawbuck originated from for $10. Just know it did. :o) Guess I'll have to do some more looking. Now, my curiosity is up. I'm glad you are following my story and enjoying it.
Jo
Comment from Wabigoon
Jo--
Fun and scary. I guess this locates me in time. Second World War? I hope Marie's not the dead body in the bayou? I missed the first chapter. That will be hard if she is.
Yes, hard to believe families could live that off the grid, so to speak.
This is all excellently and simply done. I have no complaints. One observation. In your first paragraph you are describing Marie's route and largely unused US 90. You do all this from an observer point of view and then suddenly inset this first person observation:
"I bet the gas rationing has everyone staying home."
Who would be saying that? Why not just "gas rationing has everyone staying home"?
Thanks for the read. I have no sixes. You will get one here soon.
Jeff
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Jo--
Fun and scary. I guess this locates me in time. Second World War? I hope Marie's not the dead body in the bayou? I missed the first chapter. That will be hard if she is.
Yes, hard to believe families could live that off the grid, so to speak.
This is all excellently and simply done. I have no complaints. One observation. In your first paragraph you are describing Marie's route and largely unused US 90. You do all this from an observer point of view and then suddenly inset this first person observation:
"I bet the gas rationing has everyone staying home."
Who would be saying that? Why not just "gas rationing has everyone staying home"?
Thanks for the read. I have no sixes. You will get one here soon.
Jeff
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Thanks Jeff for pointing out my faux paux with my change of POV. I get wrapped up in my own story sometimes. ;o) It seems to write itself. I've heard that before from writers. I've heard they don't know how it will end til it ends. :o) Kind of what I have done. I just keep writing until the story is told. This book all started with a dream I had. Go figure.
No Marie, is not the dead one in the bayou. First chapter part 1and 2 Renee (Sheriff) His name is pronounced the French way "Herbert" sets up the finding of the body and the autopsy. Chap. 3 is the confession why Marie killed her step-dad.
Glad to have you reading my work.
Jo
Comment from BJ_Barnes
Great writing! I was hooked from start to finish. I can't wait to see how things turn out for her and what is yet to come. I love the picture you chose to accompany it as well. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Great writing! I was hooked from start to finish. I can't wait to see how things turn out for her and what is yet to come. I love the picture you chose to accompany it as well. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 08-May-2015
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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BJ, thank you for your kind review. It pleases me very much that you liked my story.
jo
Comment from abbasjoy
Poor naïve Marie, didn't seem to realize how lucky she was to get a ride from those sailors who didn't take advantage of her. She may not be that lucky next time.
She's going to have a hard time getting work, if she actually makes it to New Orleans. She has no papers, not even a birth certificate, and she sure looks a mess. Who is going to hire her?
The adventure does continue. Hope she makes it; she's got guts if nothing else.
Joan
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Poor naïve Marie, didn't seem to realize how lucky she was to get a ride from those sailors who didn't take advantage of her. She may not be that lucky next time.
She's going to have a hard time getting work, if she actually makes it to New Orleans. She has no papers, not even a birth certificate, and she sure looks a mess. Who is going to hire her?
The adventure does continue. Hope she makes it; she's got guts if nothing else.
Joan
Comment Written 07-May-2015
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Thank you Joan for continuing to read my story. I'm glad you are liking it.
Yes, it will be very hard for her to get a job in war time New Orleans.
Jo
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She's a feisty little thing, and that will stand her in good stead for the trials she will be facing.
Comment from Misrael
I sure hope that she doesn't get in with the wrong kind as that would be very bad for her. I also hope she can get her ssc so she can get a job. This has been a very good and interesting story and I look forward to reading more. Keep up the good work and keep on writing.
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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I sure hope that she doesn't get in with the wrong kind as that would be very bad for her. I also hope she can get her ssc so she can get a job. This has been a very good and interesting story and I look forward to reading more. Keep up the good work and keep on writing.
Comment Written 07-May-2015
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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I'm glad you are enjoying my story and continue to read and review. You are very encouraging.
Thanks,
Jo
Comment from lancellot
An excellent chapter. I will have read the previous chapters for a more contextual review.
Note
I bet the gas rationing [has] everyone staying home.
-perhaps 'had' to keep the past tense telling?
I'm goin' to git dere(.)[,]" Marie said aloud
-change unless this is your preferred style.
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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An excellent chapter. I will have read the previous chapters for a more contextual review.
Note
I bet the gas rationing [has] everyone staying home.
-perhaps 'had' to keep the past tense telling?
I'm goin' to git dere(.)[,]" Marie said aloud
-change unless this is your preferred style.
Comment Written 07-May-2015
reply by the author on 08-May-2015
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Thanks lancellot for catching my spag's. I'll fix. Glad you commented on my story. Catch up if you can. The first few chapters will be important to know later on in the story.
Jo
