Early morning.
A time of delight.83 total reviews
Comment from TAB_that's me
Not only a great 5-7-5 poem in perfect form but also a great haiku with a wonderful satori line. Good luck in the contest.
teresa
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Not only a great 5-7-5 poem in perfect form but also a great haiku with a wonderful satori line. Good luck in the contest.
teresa
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Thanks so much Teresa, for the great review and lovely comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from chasennov
A time of delight. "Early morning." That is a beautiful shot of an early morning sunrise on the Murray River at Renmark. Your poem tells the story well. Good job.
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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A time of delight. "Early morning." That is a beautiful shot of an early morning sunrise on the Murray River at Renmark. Your poem tells the story well. Good job.
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Thanks so much, for the great review and lovely comments, blessings, Roy.
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You are most welcome, Roy.
Comment from TomyKan
A nice little poem, with a well selected photo. It evokes the hope that comes with every new day. The risk with poetry that must adhere to a specific structure, i.e. 5-7-5, is that the structure can deter a more profound message and imagery that evokes strong emotion. You did what you could with what you had to work with. on the whole, well done.
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A nice little poem, with a well selected photo. It evokes the hope that comes with every new day. The risk with poetry that must adhere to a specific structure, i.e. 5-7-5, is that the structure can deter a more profound message and imagery that evokes strong emotion. You did what you could with what you had to work with. on the whole, well done.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Thanks so much, for the great review and lovely comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from costellsgirl33
That picture is awesome! I wish when I walked outside in the morning, that's what I would see :)
Your poem is perfect for the contest. Syllable count is right on point.
I myself am an early riser, no matter what time I go to bed, I always wake up early.
I want to get my day started. Nice job and good luck in the contest
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That picture is awesome! I wish when I walked outside in the morning, that's what I would see :)
Your poem is perfect for the contest. Syllable count is right on point.
I myself am an early riser, no matter what time I go to bed, I always wake up early.
I want to get my day started. Nice job and good luck in the contest
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Thanks so much,for the great review and lovely comments, blessings, Roy.
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Roy,
You are very welcome! I always enjoy your poems.
Arnetta
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Thank you Annetta
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Roy,
You are very welcome! I always enjoy your poems.
Arnetta
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Roy,
You are very welcome! I always enjoy your poems.
Arnetta
Comment from inside echo
What a well written poem. You followed the 5-7-5 and syllable count perfectly.
It is refreshing to read positive, and "happy" poems. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
echo
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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What a well written poem. You followed the 5-7-5 and syllable count perfectly.
It is refreshing to read positive, and "happy" poems. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
echo
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Thanks so much, for the great review and lovely comments, blessings, Roy.
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You are most welcome,
Comment from Dean Kuch
Yes, with each and every sunrise a brand new day dawns. With it comes hope, if we allow it.
Lovely 5-7-5, in great form. Good message conveyed; clear, concise and direct...
Good luck! ~Dean
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Yes, with each and every sunrise a brand new day dawns. With it comes hope, if we allow it.
Lovely 5-7-5, in great form. Good message conveyed; clear, concise and direct...
Good luck! ~Dean
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Thanks so much Dean, for the great review and lovely comments, blessings, Roy.
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Anytime.
Comment from joann r romei
this was a very inspiring little poem and the picture complemented it perfectly. i do agree and the same can be said fro a sunset, very soothing for one who has had a troubled day.
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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this was a very inspiring little poem and the picture complemented it perfectly. i do agree and the same can be said fro a sunset, very soothing for one who has had a troubled day.
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Thanks so much, for the great review and lovely comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Thamp
Ah yes, we share that. The early mornings are the best. In the spring it's early songs of the birds that I love so much. Great piece - good luck in the contest.
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Ah yes, we share that. The early mornings are the best. In the spring it's early songs of the birds that I love so much. Great piece - good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Thanks so much, for the great review and lovely comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from DR DIP
5-7-5 poetry either works or it doesn't its not my favourite poetry i will be honest but on saying that..along with the accompanying beautiful image i think you 3 lines work a treat succinct yet long enough to share a moment , a mood a time
thanks for sharing
dip
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5-7-5 poetry either works or it doesn't its not my favourite poetry i will be honest but on saying that..along with the accompanying beautiful image i think you 3 lines work a treat succinct yet long enough to share a moment , a mood a time
thanks for sharing
dip
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Thanks so much Dip, for the great review and lovely comments, blessings, Roy.
Comment from Sis Cat
A wonderful 5-7-5 with a strong emotional appeal to the hope dawn brings. One suggestion. To create seven syllables in the second line, write it like this,
new hope that is dawning's hold
This may not be the best suggestion. Because of your contraction of "that's" your line only has six syllables and will be disqualified from the contest. If you fix this, your poem has a greater chance in the contest. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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A wonderful 5-7-5 with a strong emotional appeal to the hope dawn brings. One suggestion. To create seven syllables in the second line, write it like this,
new hope that is dawning's hold
This may not be the best suggestion. Because of your contraction of "that's" your line only has six syllables and will be disqualified from the contest. If you fix this, your poem has a greater chance in the contest. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 05-May-2015
reply by the author on 07-May-2015
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Thanks so much, for the great review and lovely comments, blessings, Roy.
