Destiny's Angel
Viewing comments for Chapter 8 "Meeting With C-Daddy"A fantasy novel set in modern day Baltimore
5 total reviews
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Rhonda, this is a great chapter mate and I am happy she found him. That finish to this one is a master stroke and I wish I had a six for it. I lost the first page of messages from my inbox the other day and this must have been on it, so now I can move onto the next one you just posted.
I will try to work on our piece later, but I am days behind as you can see by the lateness of thisa review....
One little spag...
"and I(I'll) have you know it's very environmentally friendly. It has a small carbon footprint."
Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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G'day Rhonda, this is a great chapter mate and I am happy she found him. That finish to this one is a master stroke and I wish I had a six for it. I lost the first page of messages from my inbox the other day and this must have been on it, so now I can move onto the next one you just posted.
I will try to work on our piece later, but I am days behind as you can see by the lateness of thisa review....
One little spag...
"and I(I'll) have you know it's very environmentally friendly. It has a small carbon footprint."
Cheers Fez
Comment Written 06-May-2015
reply by the author on 06-May-2015
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Once more, thanks for the review, and the pointers on spag. Lot's of help to me, and I understand busy. Some days I have lots of time for this site and other times I'm overwhelmed by the "real" world!
Rhonda
Comment from boxergirl
Rutt roh...I imagine guys with guns chasing her is more than Cadence bargained for.
Interesting story line with realistic dialogue. Good job!
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Rutt roh...I imagine guys with guns chasing her is more than Cadence bargained for.
Interesting story line with realistic dialogue. Good job!
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Thank you so much for the review!
And, there will be much she doesn't bargain for...too late now.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Notes interesting. Action flows smoothly. Easy to follow story line. Descriptive language well used throughout. Write on.
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Notes interesting. Action flows smoothly. Easy to follow story line. Descriptive language well used throughout. Write on.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Thank you, Brett. For your review and comments. Hope your contests are going well!
Rhonda
Comment from royowen
Well Cadence locates C-Daddy, and then a lot of double talking goes on, mainly from C-Daady, founding out just where ths package that he was carrying, just where it has vanished to! Then at the end some guys in a blue car come hurtling at them at a breakneck speed and C-Daddy tells Cadence to gun the car, they start firng their guns in their direction, exciting and well written Fiona, looking forward to the next episode, great work my friend, well done, blessings, Roy
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Well Cadence locates C-Daddy, and then a lot of double talking goes on, mainly from C-Daady, founding out just where ths package that he was carrying, just where it has vanished to! Then at the end some guys in a blue car come hurtling at them at a breakneck speed and C-Daddy tells Cadence to gun the car, they start firng their guns in their direction, exciting and well written Fiona, looking forward to the next episode, great work my friend, well done, blessings, Roy
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Thank you so much. I really love the way you give such detailed reviews, it is encouraging and helpful. Thanks, again,
Rhonda
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My pleasure, Rhonda,
Comment from MelB
Well, there is half the battle. She has found C-Daddy, but no package. Whoever these men are that showed up with guns, they mean business. I think a car chase will follow. Hope they can get away. Good solid chapter.
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Well, there is half the battle. She has found C-Daddy, but no package. Whoever these men are that showed up with guns, they mean business. I think a car chase will follow. Hope they can get away. Good solid chapter.
Comment Written 04-May-2015
reply by the author on 04-May-2015
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Thank you, Melissa, for the review and comments. Chase is assured...safe delivery is not...
Thanks, again,
Rhonda
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I'm sure it will be exciting!
