Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is an extremely interesting poem that the author has created with this piece of writing. This is a story of a love spurned. Sometimes love isn't just right for one of the lovers. It is often said that there is always one who loves and one who loves. Maybe that's true or maybe it isn't.

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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reply by the author on 07-May-2015

Thanks for your comments and support.

reply by Tomes Johnston on 07-May-2015

My pleasure

Comment from padumachitta

Excellent

Hi. well quite the poem for a prompt. I enjoyed the flow and would love to hear some guitar rifts with it...
and a smoky bar with a tenor...
padumachitta

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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reply by the author on 07-May-2015

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Comment from chasennov

Excellent

Another love story gone wrong "A Heart As Cold As Stone" This is a very good love poem, or unloved poem you have created here. It sends its message loud and clear. Very well structured and presented. Well done.

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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reply by the author on 07-May-2015

Thanks for your comments.

reply by chasennov on 07-May-2015

A pleasure.

Comment from BJ_Barnes

Excellent

This poem is very well written and kept me intrigued from start to finish. It flows together so well and at the same time conveys the anger and pain one would feel in such a situation. The picture is wonderful as well. Great writing all around.

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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reply by the author on 07-May-2015

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Comment from flamingstar

Excellent

So..."burning the candle at both ends" and "those brand new wings" indicate that she "switched teams" and took off with a woman, yes? I think that happens a lot more frequently than most of us realize. Your syllable counts varied quite a bit which made the rhythm a bit uneven, but that may have been your intention with this piece (given the topic!).

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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reply by the author on 07-May-2015

Given its Country music lyrics they work. Thanks for your comments and support.

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

I enjoyed reading your poem
Your words captured my attention from the first line to the last. This is a poem I call food for thought... meaning after you read it you go mm.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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reply by the author on 07-May-2015

You are so welcome miss cookie.

reply by misscookie on 07-May-2015

Until next time.
Cookie

Comment from CR Delport

Excellent

Sometimes you think you can do better only to find out in the end that you made a terrible mistake, but then it is too late. This is well done.
Take care.
Christelle.

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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reply by the author on 07-May-2015

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Comment from royowen

Excellent

I like the saying on the artwork, almost as much as the poem! Well done with this one, it's a very good entry,ma very sad refrain, would probably make a very good country song, it certainly has the right theme! Beautifully written, Brett, the language is excellent, descriptive imagery is great the aabb rhyming with proximates, a very good entry in this comp. Well done, blessings, Roy.

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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reply by the author on 07-May-2015

As always thank you for your comments and support. Really do appreciate them very much.

reply by royowen on 07-May-2015

Most welcome,

Comment from kiwigirl2821

Excellent

I do like the sentiment of this piece. It is engaging, sorrowful and a reader can feel the anger and lonely heart left behind. It definitely feels of your love of country music. Well done! xoxo Kiwi

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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reply by the author on 07-May-2015

Thanks for your comments and support as always. Really do appreciate them very much.

Comment from Praise000

Excellent

Hie Brett,

Your rhyming words fit perfectly and not forced:
"... more than you can stop the rain.
... better watch out for the pain.
... we let love pass us by.
... wearing won't help you to fly. "
All the best. from Praise000

 Comment Written 07-May-2015

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reply by the author on 07-May-2015

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