Comment from l.raven

Excellent

HI Carolyn, these vulture poems remind me of my parents land...they are always flying overhead...looking for a meal...parents live in the country...very well written you...always good to see you sweet girl...Love Linda xxoo

 Comment Written 02-May-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Hi there Linda,
Thanks for your comments and sharing about your parents farm. From one country girl to another, I can see you understand. :-) Love, Carolyn

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

Appalling thought--vultures waiting for roadkill or whatever. LOL
Good use of alliteration in line one.
Also lazy lay. They sure.
Nice contrast with the civilized announcement in the last line.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Yep, they are just waiting around. Thanks Shari, :-) Carolyn

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

It is interesting where one's inspiration waits. I like your take on the vultures prompt. Everything you said is fitting. Good use of alliteration. Good job on the syllable count.

I see no changes. Good job and thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Thanks again for your encouraging review. This one was a 'tell it like it is' type of prompt. Glad you enjoyed it.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from Walu Feral

Excellent

G'day Carolyn. You are very clever writing this little piece. I do not know how to write them but you are good at it. It's a shame you didn't enter you might have one it. I don't know a lot about vultures but they sure are survivors I think. Delia and Champers say hi back to you and your family our good friend. Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 30-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Jun-2015

Hi there to all of you on this wonderful June 1, 2015 day. I am only a month and a day late. :-) So glad you enjoyed this silly but true little piece.
Love, Carolyn

Comment from Curly Girly

Excellent

I thought this was an original approach to the haiku scene. I am not sure what 'varmints' are, I think that is American colloquial. Best wishes.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

Hi there, I didn't enter this contest, but did get the idea from the prompt.
Varmints are objectionable creatures (could me, in old Western term, slang for a no-good or up to no good person)
Good to hear from you Nicole.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from krys123

Excellent

Carolyn;
+ the pictures appropriately chosen and is very relative and complementary to your haiku.
+ The first two lines are very interconnected and their imagery is very demonstratively descriptive and definitively expressive.
+ The third line or satori gives the haiku the aha moment and creates a wall, composed summary of the concept of the haiku.
+ Good use of enjambment which is the running on of a thought and concepts one stanza and line to the next without a syntactical break.
+ Juxtaposition used with the juxtaposition technique of similarity or association Is warranted where you use the words fly and wait(waiters) together within the same stanza. Juxtaposition is the use of two distinct images and within one stands out or writing.
+ Your excellent imagination is very resourceful and also quite inventive and ingeniously creative.
+ Thank you for sharing and posting and may the good Lord be with you always. Carolyn.
Alex

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

Thanks Alex,
I always look forward to your reviews. They encourage me.
:-) Carolyn

reply by krys123 on 01-May-2015

You are so welcome Carolyn.
Alex

Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT

Excellent

Well now this was high flying short lil piece. Poor vultures are always getting the "Raw" end of the deal lol
good work NAM !!
TK

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

Thanks TK
They get the 'raw' end of the deal but prefer it a little 'aged'... :-)
Those critters will eat anything.
:-) Carolyn

Comment from justjo66

Excellent

Ugh, I'm not found of vultures either but I guess in the scheme of things they serve
their purpose of cleaning up road kill. :o) We see lots of them where I
live in Texas. Usually a dead skunk or armadillo on the road.
I enjoyed your poem. Nice alliteration with the vultures and varmints.

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015

Thanks JO, this was a prompt, I didn't enter the contest but it did 'prompt' me to write. :-)
I have needed a nudge lately. Missouri has our share of Turkey vultures. They are everywhere.
I appreciate your fine comments Jo,
:-) Carolyn

Comment from MizKat

Excellent

Hi Carolyn,

I think you did a great job in writing this poem. I like the picture you used with it too. I wish something would start my writing brain. Ha-ha! I had my head scanned and it's okay although I still get daily headaches and am very forgetful. I've been up since about quarter to four as my two daughters and I are going out to celebrate my 78th birthday.

Kat

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015

Happy Birthday dear Kat,
I hope you have a wonderful day with your daughters. There is nothing
quite like being with our girls.
Thanks for the comments. I'm glad you liked this. My creative juices have
been dead in the water. I did just post another one. Health means everything,
if you don't feel good , you don't feel very poetic. You will get it back, I am
so sorry about those headaches.
Love you,
Carolyn

Comment from misscookie

Excellent

Now, your words captured my attention for real.
This is truly what I call a food for thought poem....
Meaning after you read it you go mm.
Thank you for sharing.
Cookie

 Comment Written 29-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015

Thanks Cookie, :-) Carolyn

reply by misscookie on 30-Apr-2015

You're very welcome.
Have a safe and blessed week end.
Cookie