Expressing Myself
Viewing comments for Chapter 19 "Baby and the Firefly"Writing my way out of depression / mental illness
6 total reviews
Comment from poetadeu
What a beautiful interlude between baby
and firefly. Baby had a lot to say, both
very special I would say. I like your single
rhyming word at the end of every line.
Very sweet scene there in Virginia.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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What a beautiful interlude between baby
and firefly. Baby had a lot to say, both
very special I would say. I like your single
rhyming word at the end of every line.
Very sweet scene there in Virginia.
Comment Written 19-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2015
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Thank you poetadeu, I am so glad you like this one. It was fun to write. I appreciate your feedback! Judy
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So glad you liked my
response to this very cute
and kind of whimsical poem.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Nice presentation in picture, colors, and rhyme. Your poem has good flow. I like the fun of the words. Good imagery in the words of the baby/firefly interaction. I see no changes. Good job and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Nice presentation in picture, colors, and rhyme. Your poem has good flow. I like the fun of the words. Good imagery in the words of the baby/firefly interaction. I see no changes. Good job and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Thank you jannypan!!
Comment from BlueMarble
Cute, imaginative, and I'd like to believe possible. Wonderfully well written poem with perfect rhyme and tempo. I really enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Cute, imaginative, and I'd like to believe possible. Wonderfully well written poem with perfect rhyme and tempo. I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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thank you BlueMarble, for your kind words of encouragement!!
Comment from pharp
Love the artwork selected, love the poem even more.
Beautifully written, smooth flow, great rhyming. Thanks for sharing this well penned poem. Pharp
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Love the artwork selected, love the poem even more.
Beautifully written, smooth flow, great rhyming. Thanks for sharing this well penned poem. Pharp
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much pharp, for your kind and encouraging review!!
Comment from Pyrrho
Sometimes the same rhyme works and sometimes it doesn't. It almost works here except that you repeat the word "night" to soon after the first one. I believe it works better if you change your third line to ... something like ...
"Strolling in the dark, their plight"
It is excellent except for the slight annoyance.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Sometimes the same rhyme works and sometimes it doesn't. It almost works here except that you repeat the word "night" to soon after the first one. I believe it works better if you change your third line to ... something like ...
"Strolling in the dark, their plight"
It is excellent except for the slight annoyance.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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You are so right and I will take your suggestion. Thank you for the heads up and the generous review. Much appreciated.
Comment from bizzygirl
imaginitive, sweet, tender moment between bug and child. I BELIEVE it happened. Children have such a wonder of the world that we often loose as we grow older. My favorite phrase is: 'floating flitting lite' 'human sprite' speaks of fairies and unicorns. DELIGHTFUL
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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imaginitive, sweet, tender moment between bug and child. I BELIEVE it happened. Children have such a wonder of the world that we often loose as we grow older. My favorite phrase is: 'floating flitting lite' 'human sprite' speaks of fairies and unicorns. DELIGHTFUL
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for your kind and encouraging review!!
