haiku (warm bayou rain)
haiku 4/7/526 total reviews
Comment from zanya
An interesting word picture painted here of the moment when 'warm bayou rain' falls to earth and creates some unusual sounds and even sights especially 'grits bubble and boil'
reply by the author on 27-May-2015
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An interesting word picture painted here of the moment when 'warm bayou rain' falls to earth and creates some unusual sounds and even sights especially 'grits bubble and boil'
Comment Written 27-May-2015
reply by the author on 27-May-2015
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thank you for the review
Comment from mermaids
Grist bubble and boil is a wonderful last line. I was not expecting it and I love surprises. Your use of words creates clear images and feelings. The reader can hear the rain.
reply by the author on 27-May-2015
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Grist bubble and boil is a wonderful last line. I was not expecting it and I love surprises. Your use of words creates clear images and feelings. The reader can hear the rain.
Comment Written 27-May-2015
reply by the author on 27-May-2015
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thank you for the lovely review
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Thank you for the lovely review. Haiku should surprise or make one pause
Comment from lalajovanoski
and short you are able to relate a and short you are able to relate a very clear message to the reader you are a very talented poet and I urge you to keep writing best of wishes in the contest God bless
reply by the author on 27-May-2015
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and short you are able to relate a and short you are able to relate a very clear message to the reader you are a very talented poet and I urge you to keep writing best of wishes in the contest God bless
Comment Written 27-May-2015
reply by the author on 27-May-2015
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Thank you for your kind words
Comment from l.raven
HI Val, you are so right about the count...can almost hear the rain on the roof...as I sit here on a warm summers night...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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HI Val, you are so right about the count...can almost hear the rain on the roof...as I sit here on a warm summers night...very well written...Luff Linda xxoo
Comment Written 30-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 01-May-2015
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Thank you for the lovely review, Linda.
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you are always so welcome Val...truly...Luff xxoo
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
When it's raining it's the perfect time to take a nap or just sit and watch it while you write poems or review on Fanstory. I loved your little poem because it captured the sound and relaxing noise perfectly.
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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When it's raining it's the perfect time to take a nap or just sit and watch it while you write poems or review on Fanstory. I loved your little poem because it captured the sound and relaxing noise perfectly.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 30-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for the lovely review.
Comment from Mark Schardine
The rain has probably soaked more than a few people already, and the old tin roof may leak, but a good meal is coming up soon, and everyone is looking forward to it.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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The rain has probably soaked more than a few people already, and the old tin roof may leak, but a good meal is coming up soon, and everyone is looking forward to it.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Mark. Nice review
Comment from skye
warm bayou rain
taps rhythms on old tin roof
grits bubble and boil
This is great with the sounds of rain on the tin roof. That is one of my favorite sounds.
Excellent.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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warm bayou rain
taps rhythms on old tin roof
grits bubble and boil
This is great with the sounds of rain on the tin roof. That is one of my favorite sounds.
Excellent.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Skye.
Comment from royowen
This is a really good entry in this contest, in this haiku poetry contest, and even boldly displayed the numbers, but excellent in its concept, with an satori a a bonus, definitely a great entry in this contest, blessings, Roy,
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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This is a really good entry in this contest, in this haiku poetry contest, and even boldly displayed the numbers, but excellent in its concept, with an satori a a bonus, definitely a great entry in this contest, blessings, Roy,
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Roy
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Most welcome
Comment from Sarah Butterfly
Good alliteration used in bubble and boil. The coloring, picture and words are a nice match. In only a few words you have managed to capture this scenery. Very well done!
Kind regards
Sarah
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Good alliteration used in bubble and boil. The coloring, picture and words are a nice match. In only a few words you have managed to capture this scenery. Very well done!
Kind regards
Sarah
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the review, Sarah.
Comment from justjo66
Hmmm, bubbling grits. A delightful image of rain on a tin roof and warm grits with lots of butter. This is the perfect poem for me. Glad to see your post.
Jo
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Hmmm, bubbling grits. A delightful image of rain on a tin roof and warm grits with lots of butter. This is the perfect poem for me. Glad to see your post.
Jo
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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This "exceptional" has truly brightened my morning. I feel you have captured the essence of my little haiku. Thank you so much for this humbling honor.
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You are very welcome.
