haiku (warm bayou rain)
haiku 4/7/526 total reviews
Comment from w.j.debi
I have never been to the bayou or had grits, but you make it come alive with the imagery you paint. I can hear the rain on that old tin roof. Now that I have heard.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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I have never been to the bayou or had grits, but you make it come alive with the imagery you paint. I can hear the rain on that old tin roof. Now that I have heard.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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I'm glad I brought is "alive" for you. Thank you for the thoughtful review.
Comment from Joan E.
I very much enjoyed the scene you captured along with the local color. You even included sound and abundant alliteration. Well done! Best wishes in the haiku contest- Joan
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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I very much enjoyed the scene you captured along with the local color. You even included sound and abundant alliteration. Well done! Best wishes in the haiku contest- Joan
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2015
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Thank you, Joan E., as I respect your opinion.
Comment from sibhus
What a beautiful image that you have created with just this few words. You have captures that brief moment of pure unexpected beauty, the one you just catch with the corner of your and stop to watch, with these wonderful words. A wonderful poem and thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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What a beautiful image that you have created with just this few words. You have captures that brief moment of pure unexpected beauty, the one you just catch with the corner of your and stop to watch, with these wonderful words. A wonderful poem and thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Thank you for this lovely review.
Comment from Lesley Collier
A interesting haiku of rain poring down on an old tin roof as the comfort of warm grits cook inside. Well written with an interesting comparison!
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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A interesting haiku of rain poring down on an old tin roof as the comfort of warm grits cook inside. Well written with an interesting comparison!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the review.
Comment from wisemind68 (Tina)
Hi Val Crisson,
Well done on your poem. I like writing Haiku. With so few words and yet so powerful. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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Hi Val Crisson,
Well done on your poem. I like writing Haiku. With so few words and yet so powerful. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2015
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I like writing haiku, also. I will need a great deal of "good luck" for this contest, thank you
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
I enjoyed reading your haiku. Good form. Excellent word choice to enhance the theme. Nicely done and good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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I enjoyed reading your haiku. Good form. Excellent word choice to enhance the theme. Nicely done and good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the lovely review.
Comment from inside echo
I so love the sound of rain falling on an old tin roof. One of the most calming memories I have, and to this day still love it. I don't think I know what grits are accept that they are some sort of southern pancake type food. However your words bring a very vivid image to mind. A great poem. Well done. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in your contest.
tgc
echo
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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I so love the sound of rain falling on an old tin roof. One of the most calming memories I have, and to this day still love it. I don't think I know what grits are accept that they are some sort of southern pancake type food. However your words bring a very vivid image to mind. A great poem. Well done. Thank you for sharing. Good luck in your contest.
tgc
echo
Comment Written 12-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Grits are like a porridge and they are a southern food. I'm so glad you enjoyed it. Thank you
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Thank you, grits are like porridge or like porridge pancakes. Sorry, I have heard of them but have never seen them. You are welcome.
echo
Comment from Dawny53
I'm usually not a big fan of haiku.. but I'm glad I stopped to read your entry.. it was a fun little read and I enjoyed it! You're right on the money with the grits.. because that is exactly like both sound.. good luck to you!
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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I'm usually not a big fan of haiku.. but I'm glad I stopped to read your entry.. it was a fun little read and I enjoyed it! You're right on the money with the grits.. because that is exactly like both sound.. good luck to you!
Comment Written 12-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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I'm so glad you liked it, and I feel haiku on this site are very under rated because there are so many bad ones. Thank you
Comment from His Grayness
Excellent work for this style of poetry. I cannot offer any suggestions to make this work any better. I enjoyed it and wish the best to the author! HIS GRAYNESS
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Excellent work for this style of poetry. I cannot offer any suggestions to make this work any better. I enjoyed it and wish the best to the author! HIS GRAYNESS
Comment Written 12-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 13-Jun-2015
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Thank you for the lovely review
Comment from Mystic Angel 7777
This meets the contest requirements splendidly in true haiku fashion. The first two lines of interconnected imagery are wonderful as they evoke all the senses in the well chosen wording. The satori wraps the package up neatly and creates a warmth to counter balance the coolness of the rain. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you so much for sharing it.
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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This meets the contest requirements splendidly in true haiku fashion. The first two lines of interconnected imagery are wonderful as they evoke all the senses in the well chosen wording. The satori wraps the package up neatly and creates a warmth to counter balance the coolness of the rain. I wish you all the best in the judging and thank you so much for sharing it.
Comment Written 27-May-2015
reply by the author on 28-May-2015
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Wonderful review, thank you for the kind words
