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Comment from Brett Matthew West
Poem well written. Action flows smoothly. Story line easy to follow. Descriptive language well used throughout. Write on.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Poem well written. Action flows smoothly. Story line easy to follow. Descriptive language well used throughout. Write on.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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well....alright...-smile-....ah i'm working my flat ass off....but if you insist....i give the collage try...-wink-...lol.....love bug-
Comment from Wabigoon
Reconciled
Very tough to review except in kind. $6.62 is what I have been paid. The dance is a trance. The marathon goes nowhere but malathion's not the Beast and evil is seeded by the best priest in the poorest cassock stark white reverend hidden in parables of incomprehensible swimming pools where mutant prayers crawl up out of Bosch nightmares forever.
Thanks
Wabigoon
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Reconciled
Very tough to review except in kind. $6.62 is what I have been paid. The dance is a trance. The marathon goes nowhere but malathion's not the Beast and evil is seeded by the best priest in the poorest cassock stark white reverend hidden in parables of incomprehensible swimming pools where mutant prayers crawl up out of Bosch nightmares forever.
Thanks
Wabigoon
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Well....I hope you breach minimum wage.....some day....smile.....now wabagone for your review I never did marathons I kick ass quick wink.....and Bosch......which I believe means bullshit in Russian or something.....is something we all carry around if you were to try to be honest but I warn you ....it hurts....smile.....however some just keep flushing that toilet.....but the bullshits still there......smile.....someday wannabe.....someday.....love bug
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
It's so sad that everyone associates 666 with the devil because 6 is my favorite number. Cancer is never good and can ruin a life with the snap of the finger. Great job with such a dark poem
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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It's so sad that everyone associates 666 with the devil because 6 is my favorite number. Cancer is never good and can ruin a life with the snap of the finger. Great job with such a dark poem
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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well i agree...............that cancer kills.....even Saints. God dammit......but I disagree with your therey of everbody's association with six tripled....because everybody didn't....but God. love bug-
Comment from costellsgirl33
Evil does indeed seed itself. Your poem is very dark in my opinion.
I had to read it twice because I didn't understand it at first.
I wasn't sure why you picked that image but now I get it.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Evil does indeed seed itself. Your poem is very dark in my opinion.
I had to read it twice because I didn't understand it at first.
I wasn't sure why you picked that image but now I get it.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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yes maam...it is......................darker than ever believed....before. -smile- well, i thank you sweet lady for your attentions tasting....delisious....love Bug-
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You are very welcome! I do enjoy a dark poem every now and then. I prefer those to sad ones, lol
Arnetta
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You are very welcome! I do enjoy a dark poem every now and then. I prefer those to sad ones, lol
Arnetta
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Nicely done Reconciled,
Congratulations.
---I LOVED THIS POEM!
-excellent tone and rhythm
-good flow
-I like he line, 'preaching better than thou in every rented breath.
---I LOVE THE MUSIC
Write on!
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Nicely done Reconciled,
Congratulations.
---I LOVED THIS POEM!
-excellent tone and rhythm
-good flow
-I like he line, 'preaching better than thou in every rented breath.
---I LOVE THE MUSIC
Write on!
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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yea....love that song....cant seem to get enough of it.....hmm....-smile-.....ahh I dont why....i never plan this .....thing.....it just comes out and not sure how much control is owned......ahh thanks....love Bug-
Comment from Aussie
Well thought out - wolf in sheep's clothing - hoodwinking in faux fleece. In every garden weeds spring up to strangle the beauty of the flowers, so it is with human kind. Well written poet.
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Well thought out - wolf in sheep's clothing - hoodwinking in faux fleece. In every garden weeds spring up to strangle the beauty of the flowers, so it is with human kind. Well written poet.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2015
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Thank you Aussie....smile. Very happy you enjoyed. Love michael
Comment from Joan E.
I admired your string of plants metaphors. Once again you make us think with your provocative phrases like "evil seeds itself," "orchards of ruin," "hoodwinking in faux fleece" and "natural birthmark". All of them should go viral! Cheers- Joan
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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I admired your string of plants metaphors. Once again you make us think with your provocative phrases like "evil seeds itself," "orchards of ruin," "hoodwinking in faux fleece" and "natural birthmark". All of them should go viral! Cheers- Joan
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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what the hell does that mean anyway viral....you know I clean up pretty good....and I'm ...I'm sort of getting used to the poperotzee....-wink-....lol...hey you....-smile- hope you're well...love Michael
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I meant be picked up on the Internet and be read by thousands! I just started taking the supplement CoQ10 and it seems to help--yippee!! Take good care of yourself. More hugs- Joan
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CoQ10 hmm...wear your space helmet J...-smile- goodnight-
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I'm never without my space helmet--Dr. Spock, signing off... -J
Comment from bizzygirl
'drunk on own wines lies' is best line in the poem. 'weed kill what grows' is a wonderful metaphor for satan. I like the photo of the eye but did you see the reflection in the eye? heart? This poem is worth of recognition even if a bit dark.
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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'drunk on own wines lies' is best line in the poem. 'weed kill what grows' is a wonderful metaphor for satan. I like the photo of the eye but did you see the reflection in the eye? heart? This poem is worth of recognition even if a bit dark.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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it has to be ....or just keeeps on...unrecognized ....someone said something in a review i've yet to answer....been working my way....back.....anyway she said ...that at some piont she saw her own darkness...ya know reading it....but thats it you know....some do see.....some dont.....-smile-....thank you very much for what you said.....love bug-
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Comment from courtneysthoughts
This is an interesting little twist of a poem, dark in showcasing evil. It is nicely worded though a bit scary. I believe we all have this inner darkness inside and you did a nice job of making me feel my own darkness.
Thank you for sharing,
Courtney
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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This is an interesting little twist of a poem, dark in showcasing evil. It is nicely worded though a bit scary. I believe we all have this inner darkness inside and you did a nice job of making me feel my own darkness.
Thank you for sharing,
Courtney
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
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yes....-smile-...yes maam....when you know your own capabilities when pressed.....righteous.......I'm sorry its here and happens to love itself and the rest to death.....but....i try to live here too...-smile-...thanks courtney....love bug-
Comment from valerieellis
Excellent! I actually read your poem a few times and saw it from several angles. I especially loved the lines:
"orchards of ruin...
innate fruit putrefied
drunk on own wines lies"
This really painted a very vivid image of waste.
Excellent job! I look forward to reading more of your writings. God bless :)
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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Excellent! I actually read your poem a few times and saw it from several angles. I especially loved the lines:
"orchards of ruin...
innate fruit putrefied
drunk on own wines lies"
This really painted a very vivid image of waste.
Excellent job! I look forward to reading more of your writings. God bless :)
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2015
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well thanks very much....have a great night...love-
