Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "Chapter Quince; Part Dos"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from judiverse
Oh, this is excellent. I'm always excited to read your posts. It's like a serialized novel like they used to include in the magazines. Kuruk isn't under arrest for the time being, but the agents don't like that and warn him his arrest is imminent. Soni has her own tracking to do, and Jim insists on going along. She is in danger, although she seems to want to handle things herself. Great role the dogs play in this. Butkus is quite a character. Funny about him and the horse not getting along. Gus probably has it right that Jim is sweet on Soni, but they have some serious criminal activity to stop before there can be any romance. Great work. judi
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Oh, this is excellent. I'm always excited to read your posts. It's like a serialized novel like they used to include in the magazines. Kuruk isn't under arrest for the time being, but the agents don't like that and warn him his arrest is imminent. Soni has her own tracking to do, and Jim insists on going along. She is in danger, although she seems to want to handle things herself. Great role the dogs play in this. Butkus is quite a character. Funny about him and the horse not getting along. Gus probably has it right that Jim is sweet on Soni, but they have some serious criminal activity to stop before there can be any romance. Great work. judi
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the encouraging review. I always appreciate you reading my posts.
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You're welcome. Great job with the characters and keeping up the suspense. judi
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
It seems Soni is one of those people who is so headstrong she will always be her own worst enemy. How do you stir up enemies? Just spit in the face of a law officer (idiot or not) and then go after a bunch of drug running gangster rustlers on your own. Yes, that ought to do it.
I spotted one correction needed -
You have - "What are you the Piped Piper of men?" - and I think it needs a comma somewhere, either - "What are you, the Piped Piper of men?" - or - "What; are you the Piped Piper of men?"
"No since trying to hide that smile. - sense?
Patrick
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Hi Barbara,
It seems Soni is one of those people who is so headstrong she will always be her own worst enemy. How do you stir up enemies? Just spit in the face of a law officer (idiot or not) and then go after a bunch of drug running gangster rustlers on your own. Yes, that ought to do it.
I spotted one correction needed -
You have - "What are you the Piped Piper of men?" - and I think it needs a comma somewhere, either - "What are you, the Piped Piper of men?" - or - "What; are you the Piped Piper of men?"
"No since trying to hide that smile. - sense?
Patrick
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the kind review and I will make those corrections.
Comment from bizzygirl
IDK have you ever picked up a book started to read it then skipped back a few chapters? I have. I know that from what I see here you have a smooth, easy style(maybe not easy to write but easy to read) If I can visualize the character by how they speak I prefer it to a long description of them(no, I didn't got back) I can and I did. It is the common scenario of man in love with a woman and doing anything to be beside her. I like the pages. I think you write well.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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IDK have you ever picked up a book started to read it then skipped back a few chapters? I have. I know that from what I see here you have a smooth, easy style(maybe not easy to write but easy to read) If I can visualize the character by how they speak I prefer it to a long description of them(no, I didn't got back) I can and I did. It is the common scenario of man in love with a woman and doing anything to be beside her. I like the pages. I think you write well.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Bill Schott
I like this chapter and can learn a lot in a vacuum about the characters' motivations. I will go back to a previous chapter or two to fill in. Seems like Jim has a thing for Soni.
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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I like this chapter and can learn a lot in a vacuum about the characters' motivations. I will go back to a previous chapter or two to fill in. Seems like Jim has a thing for Soni.
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
as she a short breath (took a short breath)
predicable (predictable)
Good chapter, just a couple spags. The changes you made to the end of the last post look fine. Have a blessed day, my friend~Debbie
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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as she a short breath (took a short breath)
predicable (predictable)
Good chapter, just a couple spags. The changes you made to the end of the last post look fine. Have a blessed day, my friend~Debbie
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Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the kind review and I will fix those areas.
Comment from c_lucas
It looks like Soni and Jim are in a staring match, neither one will tell of their true feelings. Things are about to pick up, again. I wonder who will blink. (LOL)
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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It looks like Soni and Jim are in a staring match, neither one will tell of their true feelings. Things are about to pick up, again. I wonder who will blink. (LOL)
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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I am wondering who will blink first, myself. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome, Barbara. Charlie
