Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 43 "Chapter Quince; Part Dos"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from Curly Girly
This is a well written chapter. I saw a documentary on people and drug trafficking in across the Mexican boarder into the USA on TV. It was quite eye-opening and harsh.
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This is a well written chapter. I saw a documentary on people and drug trafficking in across the Mexican boarder into the USA on TV. It was quite eye-opening and harsh.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
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Yes it is. We hear about it often in TX. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from angelface2
Aha. I thought this might happen at sometime. Jim and Soni would make a nice couple I think. I am glad Jim is going with Soni. She shouldn't go alone. The picture of the ducks is so cute. Love it. No spag that I saw. Miss Sally :>D
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Aha. I thought this might happen at sometime. Jim and Soni would make a nice couple I think. I am glad Jim is going with Soni. She shouldn't go alone. The picture of the ducks is so cute. Love it. No spag that I saw. Miss Sally :>D
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
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Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting post that the author has created with this piece of work. I can see no errors or room for improvement. I haven't been following the story, but it seems like a good one.
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This is an interesting post that the author has created with this piece of work. I can see no errors or room for improvement. I haven't been following the story, but it seems like a good one.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
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My pleasure
Comment from Sis Cat
Clean, engaging prose. I enjoyed your use of action attribution, for example,
"Sort of like, always swim with a buddy?" Gus grinned.
This polishes your writing in a way that "he said" and "she said would not have achieved. This also helps me see the characters and know who is talking by their action. Thank you for sharing.
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Clean, engaging prose. I enjoyed your use of action attribution, for example,
"Sort of like, always swim with a buddy?" Gus grinned.
This polishes your writing in a way that "he said" and "she said would not have achieved. This also helps me see the characters and know who is talking by their action. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 29-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Mastery
Hi, Barbara. "Gus leaned against the stable door and laughed. "What are you, the Piped Piper of men?" Good one.
You have many good images in your writing, Barbara. Like:
"Diego's glance went to the door of the house. Midnight nuzzled him. Diego moaned softly and meandered toward the house.
Suggestion: "A cough slipped from Gus's mouth. He studied his boots. (Just say, Gus coughed as he studied the toes of his boots.)
I just want you to be aware, that sometimes I want to give you six stars but I have to spread the wealth as it were as you know the way it works on here. LOL
Blessings. Bob
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Hi, Barbara. "Gus leaned against the stable door and laughed. "What are you, the Piped Piper of men?" Good one.
You have many good images in your writing, Barbara. Like:
"Diego's glance went to the door of the house. Midnight nuzzled him. Diego moaned softly and meandered toward the house.
Suggestion: "A cough slipped from Gus's mouth. He studied his boots. (Just say, Gus coughed as he studied the toes of his boots.)
I just want you to be aware, that sometimes I want to give you six stars but I have to spread the wealth as it were as you know the way it works on here. LOL
Blessings. Bob
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I will check this area. Gus didn't really cough, he was sort of making light.
Comment from Chris Tee
This is another interesting chapter and I look forward to the next I can not find any bad critic in this chapter and as per usual it is absolutely well written. Well done Barbara.
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This is another interesting chapter and I look forward to the next I can not find any bad critic in this chapter and as per usual it is absolutely well written. Well done Barbara.
Comment Written 28-Apr-2015
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Comment from Ric Myworld
Yes, I think it's obvious that Jim has a crush on Soni, but for some reason, there just seems to be more to it than goo-goo eyes. Oh, well, whatever it is, you've got me tuned in for the duration. Great chapter. :-)
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Yes, I think it's obvious that Jim has a crush on Soni, but for some reason, there just seems to be more to it than goo-goo eyes. Oh, well, whatever it is, you've got me tuned in for the duration. Great chapter. :-)
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
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Comment from Donovan
I am thinking Ms Soni is way too much woman for Jimbo. She'll use him up and spit him out and he will not know what happened or why, but still have a skunk eating grin on his face. And I still think I know who the rat is...we will wait and see. As for the answer to your question. I think the last part makes sense...but then again I thought it did originally.
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I am thinking Ms Soni is way too much woman for Jimbo. She'll use him up and spit him out and he will not know what happened or why, but still have a skunk eating grin on his face. And I still think I know who the rat is...we will wait and see. As for the answer to your question. I think the last part makes sense...but then again I thought it did originally.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. You're too kind.
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
This is for all your chapters, Barbara - which I've been following and always enjoy.
I look forward to you posting - I'm away now until the 4th May, but will catch up when I return.
take care.
Margaret
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This is for all your chapters, Barbara - which I've been following and always enjoy.
I look forward to you posting - I'm away now until the 4th May, but will catch up when I return.
take care.
Margaret
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
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Comment from boxergirl
Ha! Can't get anything past Gus. He and everyone but perhaps Jim and Sono can see some sparks between the two. Hope Soni can handle Midnight...must be some trouble up ahead. 8-)
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Ha! Can't get anything past Gus. He and everyone but perhaps Jim and Sono can see some sparks between the two. Hope Soni can handle Midnight...must be some trouble up ahead. 8-)
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
