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Poems about the coastline

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Comment from patcelaw
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Your poem has given me another bit of knowledge in my mind. I did not know there was such a things as salt marshes. Thanks for posting this. Patricia

 Comment Written 28-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 28-Apr-2015
    It's surprising what you can learn on FS. Thanks for reviewing
Comment from Treischel
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A very good description of this marshy area of East Anglian, UK. The lack of rhyme and meter makes the use is imagery more important here. And like the lack of trees does not signal lack of wildlife, so to lack of rhyme in no means lack of character. It is sorinkled with alliteration, assonance, consonance, and metaphor, onomatopoeia. And in-line rhyme.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
    Lost my internet conection earlier so I may have already replied but many thanks for this review.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
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Picture illustrates poem well. Notes helpful. Action flows smoothly. Easy to follow story line. Descriptive language used throughout. Write on.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
    Lost my internet conection earlier so I may have already replied but many thanks for this review.
Comment from benoenose
Exceptional
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Salt marshland that the tide has brought is also natures horrific scene. The nature changes the system of atmosphere for which the sea obeys. Thus causing this disastrous tide is a sign of the ferocious nature.
Mostly read by ecological readers, lovers of nature and natural calamities.

 Comment Written 27-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
    Thank you for yet another generous review. You are greatly appreciated.
Comment from lakeport
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Salt March, indeed that looks like a wonderful place for wildlife. I enjoyed reading the story, Very nice flow, God bless you. Lakeport.

 Comment Written 26-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
    Thank you for reading and reviewing. Certainly is as far as birds are concerned.
reply by lakeport on 26-Apr-2015
    you are very welcome,Lakeport,
Comment from Gloria ....
Exceptional
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I actually really like the green, Pantygynt. Green is my favourite colour, especially emerald green. Lovely artwork too.

Now on to the real meat of it all, the poem.

Oh man I love it when birds take off all at once. In fact the whole journey you've painted for us is marvelous.

I'm not going to comment on your rhythm and subtle use of poetic devices because as you state in your author notes, the poesy came from everything except for tail end rhyme.

The imagery is awesome PG and it is so realistic I was there making this poem well worth a six star at least.

Do you spend a lot of time in the marshlands? I'm not really fond of them because I'm afraid of alligators and quicksand. They tell me gators don't live there, but you just never know where those people migrate off to. ;-)

This is another beautiful addition to your book, my friend. I'm still waiting for the Crown of Heroic Sonnets.

Gloria





 Comment Written 26-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
    How can the same poem merit 6 stars from one reviewe and 2 from another? Hey ho! That's the glory of FS I suppose. Anyway, many thanks for your six and I am so glad when someone like yourself is impressed with my work. Gators in Norfolk? Only if one should escape from a zoo. The Crown is the final poem of the book so there's some time to go yet.
reply by Gloria .... on 26-Apr-2015
    Because the assclown who gave you a two star review didn't know what they were talking about and based their decision on bullshit crap. How's that for an answer? I am right and they are wrong.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
    You have a sweet choice of words when you're angry! I'd like to think you're right. Thanks for the vote of confidence.
reply by Gloria .... on 26-Apr-2015
    Speaking eloquently is one of my many skills.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
    I had noticed!
Comment from kiwijenny
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Beautiful evocative poem about a beautiful wild place...the birds like skeins...beautiful image...the crepuscular...I,love that...
Well penned
God bless

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
    Thank you, Jenny for this kind review.
Comment from Colette
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Oh dear! it was tough going reading on that glaring green, if I didn't know better I would believe you were promoting Ireland's green land. Having said that Ireland is just across the "pond" so maybe you have fantasies of GREEN Ireland, not that green.

I am an avid birdwatcher and marshlands are the perfect place to spot the unusual feathered friend.

Please change the colour and I will come back and review my rating.

I promised I would return and I keep my promises. Thank you,

You have a lovely style of writing, it slows me down and helps me appreciate the
poem. You paint beautiful pictures of nature, I can almost smell the ozone in the
air. I can see by your description that you love your homeland and I have to say I feel the same, infact these islands are totally beguiling to me.

Thank you for sharing and I apologise for bring you back to change background colour, I am waiting to have lazer surgery so on my eyes so I really do appreciate your kindness.

Colette

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
    Sorry if I dazzled you. I'll have another look and tone it down, maybe. Dear me, I've never had such a poor review!
Comment from Kingsland
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This is a very good poem you have written here. It has some very colorful language and good imagery in its thoughts as well. I learned a new word when reading your poem this day... Crepuscular, meaning twilight, or dusk. This was a very enjoyable piece of poetic art to have read and written this response for... John

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
    Thank you so much for reading and reviewing.
Comment from Walu Feral
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G'day mate. I'm up with you now, but only in the reviewing stakes, certainly not in poetic skill. You have a tremendous vocabulary and pen it to perfection. I leaned something else just now as I read this one. I thought salt marsh were mangroves, now I know different. Do you catch crabs and things in them? Cheers Fez

 Comment Written 25-Apr-2015


reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
    I suppose mangroves are a type of salt marsh, but not this type. This is a much more wide open space and I'm not sure about crabs but I know there are plenty of eels to be found. They like the mud! Thanks for your kind review.