Destiny's Angel
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Note"A fantasy novel set in modern day Baltimore
7 total reviews
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Rhonda, I've finally got one to give you mate. I was thinking when I read the last chapter, the other day that I want something to contribute for you, like a typo, spag, just something, but there is nothing. Your work is spot on so I'll just go along for the ride, but I feel lazy doing that. This is a great suspense filled story and I want to know what is in that bloody package and I want to know it now or I will start stamping my feet, even though Delia hates it when I do that! Well done mate, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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G'day Rhonda, I've finally got one to give you mate. I was thinking when I read the last chapter, the other day that I want something to contribute for you, like a typo, spag, just something, but there is nothing. Your work is spot on so I'll just go along for the ride, but I feel lazy doing that. This is a great suspense filled story and I want to know what is in that bloody package and I want to know it now or I will start stamping my feet, even though Delia hates it when I do that! Well done mate, cheers Fez
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much, Fez, you are a true friend and wonderful storyteller. Thank you so much for the six stars, that is very generous. The story I'm writing will go on, but I'm not so sure you'll find out what's inside the pocket just yet!
If you do find a typo, don't be afraid to point it out. I will be publishing this someday and would love to know when I mess up or when I write something that doesn't make sense.
And all of yours are 6 stars, too. Thanks, so much, again!
Rhonda
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Thank you so much, Fez, you are a true friend and wonderful storyteller. Thank you so much for the six stars, that is very generous. The story I'm writing will go on, but I'm not so sure you'll find out what's inside the pocket just yet!
If you do find a typo, don't be afraid to point it out. I will be publishing this someday and would love to know when I mess up or when I write something that doesn't make sense.
And all of yours are 6 stars, too. Thanks, so much, again!
Rhonda
Comment from royowen
Cadence and Co. Are still chasing and are hopeful after the appointment that Cadence was late for, disappointingly hasn't brought the donation to fruition, but I believe that there's more to this than meets the eye, nick Collins' son lives next door, and he could be a doorway! Well done, beautifully written, Rhonda, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Cadence and Co. Are still chasing and are hopeful after the appointment that Cadence was late for, disappointingly hasn't brought the donation to fruition, but I believe that there's more to this than meets the eye, nick Collins' son lives next door, and he could be a doorway! Well done, beautifully written, Rhonda, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thanks so much, Roy. I appreciate your words of encouragement and review. Don't be afraid to tell me if you notice typos or something that can be rephrased to sound better. I need my friends to point out my mistakes, as well as read the story! I want to be good, like you!
Thanks,
Rhonda
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Thanks so much, Roy. I appreciate your words of encouragement and review. Don't be afraid to tell me if you notice typos or something that can be rephrased to sound better. I need my friends to point out my mistakes, as well as read the story! I want to be good, like you!
Thanks,
Rhonda
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I certainly will Rhonda, I don't know about being like me, there's nobody like Rhonda, God's chosen vessel, you have your own mantle God has given just you, but I will help were I can, ever onward and upward, dear friend, blessings, Roy
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Thank you, Roy, and you are right, we have all been given a mission, and, maybe like Cadence, I'm not sure why he has chosen me.
Thanks, and God Bless,
Rhonda
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HE loves you! With an abiding love, Rhonda, you are important to God, Roy,
Comment from MelB
She held the slip of paper of for him and Sarah to see. - up for him and Sarah
Solid chapter. The group is tiring of it already. Just what is this guy up to? So much mystery surrounds him.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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She held the slip of paper of for him and Sarah to see. - up for him and Sarah
Solid chapter. The group is tiring of it already. Just what is this guy up to? So much mystery surrounds him.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thanks for the review and suggestion. I appreciate another set of eyes watching out for revisions!
Rhonda
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You're welcome:)
Comment from boxergirl
The group seems to be getting fed up with Nick's pompous attitude that even exudes from his note. They do decide however to go talk to his son and see if they can find out what Nick is up to. Lots of mystery left to be uncovered. 8-)
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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The group seems to be getting fed up with Nick's pompous attitude that even exudes from his note. They do decide however to go talk to his son and see if they can find out what Nick is up to. Lots of mystery left to be uncovered. 8-)
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the review. Yes, there is a lot of mystery, and action will show up shortly. Thanks for following!
Rhonda
Comment from lancellot
a solid chapter brimming with mystery and leaving the reader with a bit of tease. We want to know who and what Charles has to say about his dad too. Well done.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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a solid chapter brimming with mystery and leaving the reader with a bit of tease. We want to know who and what Charles has to say about his dad too. Well done.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for the review and comments. Charles will be refreshingly different than dad!
Rhonda
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Like your background information. Helps keep reader's up to date with your story. Action flows smoothly and story line easy to follow. Write on.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Like your background information. Helps keep reader's up to date with your story. Action flows smoothly and story line easy to follow. Write on.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Brett. I find it easy when I'm reading other people's stories to have them tell who the charactors and basic plot is. I get rather lost, otherwise. Thanks for reading it through!
Rhonda
Comment from Eternal Muse
An interesting chapter. I am fascinated by this eccentric philanthropist who promises them a large sum of money in exchange for some services. I wonder what a visit with his son Nick will reveal.
Excellent flow and a masterful use of a dialogue. Liked your characters, they are so well shaped and real.
Looking forward to a sequel.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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An interesting chapter. I am fascinated by this eccentric philanthropist who promises them a large sum of money in exchange for some services. I wonder what a visit with his son Nick will reveal.
Excellent flow and a masterful use of a dialogue. Liked your characters, they are so well shaped and real.
Looking forward to a sequel.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for the review. It is wonderful to see your story through the eyes of other people. The story will continue, thanks again,
Rhonda
