twisted desire
flash fiction horror contest6 total reviews
Comment from emkoutny
I liked this. Naturally it reminded me of Dexter. This was an interesting glimpse into the mind of a psychopath. Creepy.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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I liked this. Naturally it reminded me of Dexter. This was an interesting glimpse into the mind of a psychopath. Creepy.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Hi, thank you for the review you have given. I enjoy writing in this genre. May I ask why you gave it a 4 star rating and where I may need improvement. Thank you for your time,
God bless!
Comment from w.j.debi
I think I will avoid rest stops for a while. "What is lurking behind that bush?" is certain to come to mind. You build the suspense well as you look at the prey through the eyes of the predator anticipating his actions. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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I think I will avoid rest stops for a while. "What is lurking behind that bush?" is certain to come to mind. You build the suspense well as you look at the prey through the eyes of the predator anticipating his actions. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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LOL! Thank you W.J.Debi for this most excellent review my friend.
Have a blessed day!
Steve
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Not interested in this at all. Have no desire to read about someone taking a pee or you being aroused by it in any manner. Not sure you will accomplish much in this writing contest with this one. Would not receive my vote. Harsh words I know, but, reality is what it is. If you asked for my opinion a re-write about something else is certainly in order particularly for a writing contest of any kind.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Not interested in this at all. Have no desire to read about someone taking a pee or you being aroused by it in any manner. Not sure you will accomplish much in this writing contest with this one. Would not receive my vote. Harsh words I know, but, reality is what it is. If you asked for my opinion a re-write about something else is certainly in order particularly for a writing contest of any kind.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you Brett for your feedback, this is certainly how we grow as author's. My style of writing is definitely not suited for everyone, but it has brought me many fans in which I am elated. I would suggest you skip over my horror or thriller pieces, for they will only add to the frustration you felt with this piece.
I have received a few votes with twisted desire. My work conjures up both negative and positive feedback with many All Time best and several first place wins. If you like the more docile pieces, I have several in the poetry and haiku department that are warm and fuzzy. This is where the majority of my wins have stemmed from.
I hope this piece does not turn you off to my other works.
God bless!
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My point is reading about somebody taking a pee has absolutely no interest to me. Perhaps you have an audience for that but I am not counted in those numbers just like not everybody is interested in what I write about. That is the problem with subjectively reviewing somebody else's work and having to objectively state it. That is one thing with this otherwise good site I am not 100 percent convinced I am particularly fond of. And, as I said if I was voting in this particular contest it would not be for this particular piece of writing from you. I enjoy good horror stories but I did not care for this one. Maybe a future one of yours will get a different response. Time will tell.
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the story. It was a unusual murder weapon. The murderer killed with a cheese grater. I wonder if forensics would have a problem with this one. The kill location was a scary one. I don't think I would stop at a secluded rest stop for a while. Great work.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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I love the story. It was a unusual murder weapon. The murderer killed with a cheese grater. I wonder if forensics would have a problem with this one. The kill location was a scary one. I don't think I would stop at a secluded rest stop for a while. Great work.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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LOL! I always try to find different tools that are not generally used in murder. Thank you so much for this most excellent review Nellie. I have had a couple of not so great reviews on this piece with a rather nasty comment to boot LOL!
God bless!
Comment from Dayswerebrightred
Kudos to you for the premise of this piece, it's classic slasher movie horror.
I do, however, feel that the sentences were a little stilted, a little too much "tell" and not enough "show", which may just be the nature of having such a word count restriction. Also, tiny nitpick I'm sorry, you have a typo " mans neck " should be man's neck :)
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Kudos to you for the premise of this piece, it's classic slasher movie horror.
I do, however, feel that the sentences were a little stilted, a little too much "tell" and not enough "show", which may just be the nature of having such a word count restriction. Also, tiny nitpick I'm sorry, you have a typo " mans neck " should be man's neck :)
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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I do love the horror, thriller genre so! I appreciate your time in reviewing my work and offering feedback. This is how we grow as authors.
God bless!
Comment from lancellot
Hmm. It is more thriller than horror but I can see how a serial killer stalking a random person can make a reader visualize themselves being an unexpected victim of a figure from the shadows.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Hmm. It is more thriller than horror but I can see how a serial killer stalking a random person can make a reader visualize themselves being an unexpected victim of a figure from the shadows.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you lancellot for this most excellent review my friend. I do enjoy crafting in this genre. Thank you for your time and God bless!
