If There Was A Heaven
The phone call I would make29 total reviews
Comment from pipersfancy
Wouldn't it be wonderful? To have the opportunity for one more conversation, one more chance to laugh over old times, one more time to say, "I love you."
Then again - I think we do have those opportunities. I know I feel very close to my dad, though he's been gone nearly 20 years. Some days, I'd swear that he is close enough to talk to... so, I do.
You were right, TK - this one brought tears!
Christina
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Wouldn't it be wonderful? To have the opportunity for one more conversation, one more chance to laugh over old times, one more time to say, "I love you."
Then again - I think we do have those opportunities. I know I feel very close to my dad, though he's been gone nearly 20 years. Some days, I'd swear that he is close enough to talk to... so, I do.
You were right, TK - this one brought tears!
Christina
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for awarding the Big Greenie Christina..greatly appreciated..This was a bit different from my usual spinning reels of rhymes but think it turned out pretty well. FYI The story or phone call really stems from real life happenings..Well not the phone call but son died in 2000 wife in 2007 dog and cat the between years. Have had this on my mind for a few years... even completed one similar to it but was not in my opinion good enough to post anywhere... Then one night just sat down and let it flow and this was the result Thank you again for listening in on my phone call to heaven
tk
Comment from justafan
What are stars really worth here....nothing. This work of art( which it most certainly is) touched me profoundly. Time is irrelevant with the love that is apparent here. Through time and yes even death, love conquers! Just Brilliant TK.
Always justafan,
Missy
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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What are stars really worth here....nothing. This work of art( which it most certainly is) touched me profoundly. Time is irrelevant with the love that is apparent here. Through time and yes even death, love conquers! Just Brilliant TK.
Always justafan,
Missy
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you much my dear Lady Missy I am very glad you liked my phone call And glad that you listed in
HUGS
tk
Comment from misscookie
I wish I had a star to give.
This write was filled with mix emotions.
And to have you write such a heartfelt story it touch my heart.
Its nice to see that you have a light side with in you. Even thought you let the dark side show more.
You made miss cookie happy today.
Who care about perfect grammar. LOL.
Cookie
God bless you.
Cookie
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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I wish I had a star to give.
This write was filled with mix emotions.
And to have you write such a heartfelt story it touch my heart.
Its nice to see that you have a light side with in you. Even thought you let the dark side show more.
You made miss cookie happy today.
Who care about perfect grammar. LOL.
Cookie
God bless you.
Cookie
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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See I am not all dark my lady I even have a soft and gentle side..Please do not let that get around don not want to ruin my image lol
Thanks so much for the review of my phone call !!
Comment from dmt1967
'And for (your) to get prepared for the
pinch on the cheek she always gave you.' I think you mean (you).
Good poem and thank you for sharing.
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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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'And for (your) to get prepared for the
pinch on the cheek she always gave you.' I think you mean (you).
Good poem and thank you for sharing.
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Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thanks for reading and catching that miscue Changed it already
TK
Comment from bizzygirl
"gets one's emotions flowing" ok. but how about tears? Yup, made me cry. It is poingant, a bit sad(how could it not be?) and yet hopeful of seeing the beloved family again. Beautifully written. You state it is true. I can relate to losses. Memories we keep in our hearts. My favorit stanza: "No, son you see...." That is the one that caused tears to flow. I was choked up before.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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"gets one's emotions flowing" ok. but how about tears? Yup, made me cry. It is poingant, a bit sad(how could it not be?) and yet hopeful of seeing the beloved family again. Beautifully written. You state it is true. I can relate to losses. Memories we keep in our hearts. My favorit stanza: "No, son you see...." That is the one that caused tears to flow. I was choked up before.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much BG Yes sometimes those memories just flow from ones heart write on to the page Thanks again very much for sharing my phone call
tk
Comment from Sasha
I wish I had a 6 to give you for this one, but I am out. This is so deeply moving that it brought tears to my eyes. I love the idea of a token and especially love the line: You know how mom hates it when someone drops in without calling...very sad, but beautifully written.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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I wish I had a 6 to give you for this one, but I am out. This is so deeply moving that it brought tears to my eyes. I love the idea of a token and especially love the line: You know how mom hates it when someone drops in without calling...very sad, but beautifully written.
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much Lady Smurph I am glad it moved you and that cyber 6 means just as much to me as that lil ole emerald cross
TK
Comment from Glasstruth
Your children will always be your children even when they get old. The love never stops. The dialogue is like I'm listening in on a telephone conversation. Love the part:
"(This is HIS operator.)
"You have thirty seconds before disconnect"
I think there should be a comma after 'fishing' in "The things we did together, fishing(,) the camping trips." Superb writing. Les
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Your children will always be your children even when they get old. The love never stops. The dialogue is like I'm listening in on a telephone conversation. Love the part:
"(This is HIS operator.)
"You have thirty seconds before disconnect"
I think there should be a comma after 'fishing' in "The things we did together, fishing(,) the camping trips." Superb writing. Les
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you much Les I knew there would be a few grammar issues on this I am not used to doing a conversation piece I am going to add that now Thanks again
Comment from TAB_that's me
This one has tears running down my face and chills in spine. I was a had a six for it. It makes me wonder what I would say to my loved ones in Heaven if I had that chance.
teresa
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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This one has tears running down my face and chills in spine. I was a had a six for it. It makes me wonder what I would say to my loved ones in Heaven if I had that chance.
teresa
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you so very much Teresa.. Glad that moved it you !!!
hugs
tk
Comment from Brett Matthew West
What a tough write Never easy to lose someone we care deeply about. Poem flowed well and shows you never stopped caring about your son. One small typo in the second line under your picture that helps illustrate this well written poem. The word "the", where you are talking about Shylow, should be deleted. Write on.
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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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What a tough write Never easy to lose someone we care deeply about. Poem flowed well and shows you never stopped caring about your son. One small typo in the second line under your picture that helps illustrate this well written poem. The word "the", where you are talking about Shylow, should be deleted. Write on.
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Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much Brett for your review and catching that "THE" I had originally just used The Cat but thought better to to use our and read it again and still did not catch it..
