Comment from Tomes Johnston

Excellent

This is a beautiful poem that the author has created with this piece of work. This is a very telling poem that gets its message across in an extremely short format. That is a skill I have yet to develop. Well done.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015

Thanks so much for your review, rating and very kind comments. Have a wonderful weekend./ Pharp

reply by Tomes Johnston on 24-Apr-2015

Same to you

Comment from Dom G Robles

Excellent

A Haiku of 17 syllables.
The writer presented a beautiful picture of the scene at sunset. The image is lovely. With the setting of the sun with some clouds hanging in the Western horizon, the picture presented is colorful. And the beauty seems to have been a heaven's bless.



I like the observation presented by the writer.The clouds at sunset give color and beauty, with the reflection of the setting sun.
The beauty seen seems to be a blessings from Heaven.

 Comment Written 24-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015

Thanks so much for your rating, review and very kind comments. Have a great weekend. Pharp

reply by Dom G Robles on 24-Apr-2015

You are very welcome Pharp. Dom

Comment from TAB_that's me

Excellent

Excellent entry for the cloud haiku contest. It is written in perfect form. Great last line! Good luck to you in the contest.

Teresa

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 24-Apr-2015

Thanks so much for your rating, review and very kind comments. Greatly appreciated! Pharp

Comment from Ben Colder

Excellent

Interesting poem. Beautiful wording in 5-7-5 poetry. Good contest piece. Nothing wrong. I enjoyed it much. You have my vote. Thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015

Thanks so much for your review, rating and very kind comments. And thank you for your vote. Blessings Portia

Comment from GregoryCody

Excellent

Great illustration with your words. The word choices are great. I love the message too.

Quick notes:

Just because of the rules, there are supposed to be two interconnected lines. You could, for instance, say:

Sunset clouds
Shine reflective light above

Also, there is an extra syllable in the second line

Keep it up though!

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015

Thanks so much for your rating, review and very kind comments. I really appreciate your suggestions as this is my first time writing this type of poem. It is too late to make any changes as they are in the process of voting. I guess I didn't quite understand the rule. I just return back to Fanstory after being gone for three years. Thanks for caring enough to share your suggestions. I will do my research next time. Portia

reply by GregoryCody on 23-Apr-2015

Of course. Keep going!

Comment from Hawaiian Mermaid

Excellent

Aloha from Hawaii,
I like your poem very much, it didn't need a photo. Whenever color is involved I love it. Thank you for sharing. Have a great day.
Aloha, Ginger
Hawaiian Mermaid

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015

Hello from Georgia,
Thanks so much for your rating, review, and very kind comments. Blessings and have a wonderful day. / Pharp

Comment from harmony13

Excellent

Excellent Poem! The first two lines flow and connect well. The last line says it all. The color scheme is perfect and
complimented the theme of this poem.

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015

Thanks so much for your rating, review and very kind comments. Greatly appreciated- Pharp

Comment from valerieellis

Excellent

Excellent! It is not easy to paint a vivid picture with just a few words. You did a great job! The words seemed to stand out even more with your choice of font and background color. Thank you for sharing :) God bless!

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015

Thanks so much for your rating, review and very kind comments./Blessings- Pharp

Comment from Pantygynt

Excellent

This I think is an excellent description of a sunset that works on both the physical and metaphysical planes. I am certainly not a Haiku expert so I can't really comment on the kigo word or veven the absence of it!

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015

Thanks so much for your rating and review. Greatly appreciated. Pharp

Comment from visionary1234

Excellent

a few corrections and then you'll have a lovely entry!

Corlorful Clouds(colorful)
"Sunset Clouds"
sunset clouds

reflective colors illuminates(illuminate)

Heaven gives praise

Title should be written as haiku(sunset clouds)

:)S

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015

Thank you so much for your review and for bringing to my attention the corrections needed. Greatly appreciated. /Pharp