haiku (God rinses his brush)
sunset haiku34 total reviews
Comment from seaglass
I don't usually get much out of haikus. I think they must lose something moving to English. However this is a great one. He never paints two of the same.
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I don't usually get much out of haikus. I think they must lose something moving to English. However this is a great one. He never paints two of the same.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
Comment from Alan K Pease
Your poem fits perfectly the constraints perfectly of haiku poetry with satori and title and other constraints admirably. Good luck in the contest, Michael
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Your poem fits perfectly the constraints perfectly of haiku poetry with satori and title and other constraints admirably. Good luck in the contest, Michael
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
Comment from Lylise
I don't usually review Asian poetry because I think it's dumb but this is just beautiful. Killer presentation. It's not very long but I read it three times already. Would that the masses write like you. I would read more. Very well done.
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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I don't usually review Asian poetry because I think it's dumb but this is just beautiful. Killer presentation. It's not very long but I read it three times already. Would that the masses write like you. I would read more. Very well done.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 29-Apr-2015
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Other than posting I've been barely here for awhile. What a wonderful compliment from one of my favorite people here. It always means more coming from talent I admire and aspire to. Thank you so much, mikey
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You deserved it. Excellent piece.
Comment from Charlene0513
To michaelcahill,
A picture perfect portrait of what God can do
to one of His amazing creations.
-swirling sunset-alliteration
Charlene0513
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To michaelcahill,
A picture perfect portrait of what God can do
to one of His amazing creations.
-swirling sunset-alliteration
Charlene0513
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your presentation is beautiful. I love the picture. Good job on the syllable count and the alliteration with swirling sunset.
No changes. Good luck in the contest.
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Your presentation is beautiful. I love the picture. Good job on the syllable count and the alliteration with swirling sunset.
No changes. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
Comment from nelliesellie
I love the picture. I love the poem. The sunset does look like some one washed out a well used brush. The colors melt together in a eye popping array. It is all of God's colors in one display. Great work.
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I love the picture. I love the poem. The sunset does look like some one washed out a well used brush. The colors melt together in a eye popping array. It is all of God's colors in one display. Great work.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
Comment from GregoryCody
Ha your photo Is better! Great alliteration in the close. Your voice is so strong in this. Powerful. Fantastic choices of words. Great piece man
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Ha your photo Is better! Great alliteration in the close. Your voice is so strong in this. Powerful. Fantastic choices of words. Great piece man
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
God rinses his brush
turning day into night
swirling sunset
such a clever use of words, Michael
and a lovely presentation.
Good luck with the contest.
margaret
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God rinses his brush
turning day into night
swirling sunset
such a clever use of words, Michael
and a lovely presentation.
Good luck with the contest.
margaret
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
Comment from stephybs
Lovely words and beautifully put together with the stunning art work. The world is beautiful and certain words just make this even more special. Excellent
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Lovely words and beautifully put together with the stunning art work. The world is beautiful and certain words just make this even more special. Excellent
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
Comment from skye
God rinses his brush
turning day into night
swirling sunset
Using the paint brush and swirling water to create the sunset of beautiful motion is wonderful.
Well done.
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God rinses his brush
turning day into night
swirling sunset
Using the paint brush and swirling water to create the sunset of beautiful motion is wonderful.
Well done.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
