Seeing Behind the Eyes
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "Kathy's Eyes"A book of poems on people.
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Comment from Day Z Chayn
Right or wrong, I'm picturing Kathy as a person literally and figuratively "starving for attention" almost to the point of literal or figurate 'anorexia' a starvation of sorts of the spirit as well as the body.
She seems to store up anxieties and avarice in oder to hibernate through her own long bitter 'winter of her discontent.
If the eyes are the window to the soul, then it seems like her own soul has been broken; her 'heart's home' has been ransacked & she is now 'emotionally removed' from her surroundings.
How's that for a picture of her own "mind's I"? (not 'eye')
Her own 'id', 'ego' & 'super-ego' seem to be in constant conflict here.
Blessings,
Shane
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Right or wrong, I'm picturing Kathy as a person literally and figuratively "starving for attention" almost to the point of literal or figurate 'anorexia' a starvation of sorts of the spirit as well as the body.
She seems to store up anxieties and avarice in oder to hibernate through her own long bitter 'winter of her discontent.
If the eyes are the window to the soul, then it seems like her own soul has been broken; her 'heart's home' has been ransacked & she is now 'emotionally removed' from her surroundings.
How's that for a picture of her own "mind's I"? (not 'eye')
Her own 'id', 'ego' & 'super-ego' seem to be in constant conflict here.
Blessings,
Shane
Comment Written 14-Aug-2015
reply by the author on 15-Aug-2015
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Like your thoughts and suggestions here. thanks shane.
Comment from michaelcahill
Yes, this does paint a picture for the reader and probably a little different for each reader. The second stanza has amazing imagery. I found myself picturing a war bunker with those little narrow slits to see out of and poke a weapon through. I can see this girl inside of it looking out, unreachable. Wish I had more time to review your work, always excellent. I read and enjoy all the time, but I guess a review now and then would tell you that. :)) mikey
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Yes, this does paint a picture for the reader and probably a little different for each reader. The second stanza has amazing imagery. I found myself picturing a war bunker with those little narrow slits to see out of and poke a weapon through. I can see this girl inside of it looking out, unreachable. Wish I had more time to review your work, always excellent. I read and enjoy all the time, but I guess a review now and then would tell you that. :)) mikey
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Thank you Mikey:) I always appreciate your reviews.
Comment from jlsavell
tab-that's-me
this is an excellent poem depicting the reality and subtle hints our eyes give way to.
Exceptional in content. I believe I just read a story by mark Valentine about the eyes and your poem reverberates his commentary which was researched. well done.. jlsavell
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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tab-that's-me
this is an excellent poem depicting the reality and subtle hints our eyes give way to.
Exceptional in content. I believe I just read a story by mark Valentine about the eyes and your poem reverberates his commentary which was researched. well done.. jlsavell
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much:)
Comment from Bill Schott
This is an interesting characterization in free verse of someone who creates a veneer of normalcy over the deep-stained soul that resides within. Nice job.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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This is an interesting characterization in free verse of someone who creates a veneer of normalcy over the deep-stained soul that resides within. Nice job.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015
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Thank you Bill for the excellent rating and review:)
Comment from skye
I like this, because it is a little personal, as that is my name, too.
Your descriptive lines outline the reality of someone who has less self-esteem, less courage, and it shows through the eyes.
Well done.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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I like this, because it is a little personal, as that is my name, too.
Your descriptive lines outline the reality of someone who has less self-esteem, less courage, and it shows through the eyes.
Well done.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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Thank you Kathy:) I always figured skye was your real name:)
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Nope. My pen name, after my granddaughter, because it is so free and beautiful.
Comment from valerieellis
I really wish I had another 6star! This was exceptional!! You painted a vivid image of the girl (physically and emotionally). This poem evoked strong emotions because I also struggle with self-esteem, depression, and having some HUGE walls around me. And I have always been told, my eyes give me away. I look forward to reading more of your writings. Great job!! God bless :)
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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I really wish I had another 6star! This was exceptional!! You painted a vivid image of the girl (physically and emotionally). This poem evoked strong emotions because I also struggle with self-esteem, depression, and having some HUGE walls around me. And I have always been told, my eyes give me away. I look forward to reading more of your writings. Great job!! God bless :)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much Valerie for the wonderful review and the thought of the six:)
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I don't give out sixes generally for poetry but there you go. This was great. It read so well, and is oh so true as well.
Great write - simple
G
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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Hi there,
I don't give out sixes generally for poetry but there you go. This was great. It read so well, and is oh so true as well.
Great write - simple
G
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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I am so touched that you gave me a six with your comments! Thanks so much!!
Comment from Treischel
A very poignant portrait of this well coiffed and adorned woman with those sad eyes. Excellent free verse sketch of her. You describe her in detail but come back again to the eyes.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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A very poignant portrait of this well coiffed and adorned woman with those sad eyes. Excellent free verse sketch of her. You describe her in detail but come back again to the eyes.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much:)
Comment from Wabigoon
Tab--
I really like the opening stanza which evokes "Kathy"perfectly. The second stanza does not have the same ease as the first and for me, at least, the last line is a bit of a cliche. "Windows into the soul" would be too, so I'm not sure how I would suggest changing it. I think...what I am looking for is for you, the poet, to somehow empathize with the attempt to hide, bring the blinds down on that pain inside her, not just reveal that it's there.
Thanks for the memorable portrait.
Wabigoon
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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Tab--
I really like the opening stanza which evokes "Kathy"perfectly. The second stanza does not have the same ease as the first and for me, at least, the last line is a bit of a cliche. "Windows into the soul" would be too, so I'm not sure how I would suggest changing it. I think...what I am looking for is for you, the poet, to somehow empathize with the attempt to hide, bring the blinds down on that pain inside her, not just reveal that it's there.
Thanks for the memorable portrait.
Wabigoon
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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Thanks for truly reading and reviewing this - telling the parts you like and don't like. I really appreciate it and wish more reviews would do that.
Comment from royowen
They say if girl lacks self esteem or a poor self image, it means she was not loved or appreciated by a good father, I know with my daughters this is not the case, they are very self assured and as a result treat their loved ones well, could be why there's so much child abuse, which is really sad! Nice poem Teresa, they say the eyes are the window to one's soul, as you have so eloquently exposed. Well done, my friend, blessings, Roy.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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They say if girl lacks self esteem or a poor self image, it means she was not loved or appreciated by a good father, I know with my daughters this is not the case, they are very self assured and as a result treat their loved ones well, could be why there's so much child abuse, which is really sad! Nice poem Teresa, they say the eyes are the window to one's soul, as you have so eloquently exposed. Well done, my friend, blessings, Roy.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much Roy:)
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Most welcome
