Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "Chapter Quince; Part Uno"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from Fridayauthor
Nicely written chapter, as usual.
I've been away for more than a month so I have some catching up to do.
trail those men and see where they came from."
back-track those men and see where they came from." ??
Wouldn't "trail" tell where they were going?
Garrison's eyes watched him leave.
Garrison's eyes watched him exit."
(I'm just being picky but there were three "leaves" in two sentences.)
Thank you!
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Nicely written chapter, as usual.
I've been away for more than a month so I have some catching up to do.
trail those men and see where they came from."
back-track those men and see where they came from." ??
Wouldn't "trail" tell where they were going?
Garrison's eyes watched him leave.
Garrison's eyes watched him exit."
(I'm just being picky but there were three "leaves" in two sentences.)
Thank you!
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. Will fix those leave. I got careless.
Comment from Writingfundimension
I just want to strangle that Federal Agent. My guess is Jim had a hand in getting the criminal lawyer, but it's just a guess LoL. Another fine chapter, Barbara. Good to see you posting again.
To check:
'I doubt any of our friends...' seems incomplete.
:) Bev
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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I just want to strangle that Federal Agent. My guess is Jim had a hand in getting the criminal lawyer, but it's just a guess LoL. Another fine chapter, Barbara. Good to see you posting again.
To check:
'I doubt any of our friends...' seems incomplete.
:) Bev
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I thought I could get by with it in dialogue. Maybe not.
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You're welcome, Barbara. :) Bev
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
The agent's very adamant he'll arrest Kuruk
and wasn't very happy when he left.
Oh well, we'll have to wait and see what
comes of it.
A well presented chapter, Barbara.
Margaret
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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The agent's very adamant he'll arrest Kuruk
and wasn't very happy when he left.
Oh well, we'll have to wait and see what
comes of it.
A well presented chapter, Barbara.
Margaret
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Phyllis Stewart
Why is that jerk so anxious to arrest Kuruk? Is he in on it somehow, hooked up with the criminals who are causing trouble? Pointless to ask, since you won't tell. LOL! :)
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Why is that jerk so anxious to arrest Kuruk? Is he in on it somehow, hooked up with the criminals who are causing trouble? Pointless to ask, since you won't tell. LOL! :)
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. My lips are sealed, but someone told me my little dog, Harley could be bought. LOL
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Harley wouldn't take five dogs treats and a soup bone. Sigh... Either he's a loyal dog or not hungry enough. :)
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He's a doxie. He's always hungry. LOL Maybe loyal....not really sure about that either.
Comment from boxergirl
A calm continuation of your story line. It seems that Garrison will be helpful to Sonia. Are Gray and Garrison the same person?
I wonder still who the eight men are? 8-)
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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A calm continuation of your story line. It seems that Garrison will be helpful to Sonia. Are Gray and Garrison the same person?
I wonder still who the eight men are? 8-)
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. Yes, His name is Gray Garrison.
Comment from Donovan
This Jim only has about 50 to 100 pages to get going. He has as much passion as a rotten mango at Krogers. I'm not sure Soni is much better, but I have full faith and confidence that writer, that's you, in case you forgot, will figure it out. And I think I know who the culprit is...I need to figure out a way to seal my answer...and if it is not the one you have...then change the story. And about this female thing...Wonder Woman was a woman and I liked her...but I digress...It's the knife throwing woman that would make me nervous...Well like the rest of your minions, I shall humbly...that may be a bit of an overstretch...wait to find out.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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This Jim only has about 50 to 100 pages to get going. He has as much passion as a rotten mango at Krogers. I'm not sure Soni is much better, but I have full faith and confidence that writer, that's you, in case you forgot, will figure it out. And I think I know who the culprit is...I need to figure out a way to seal my answer...and if it is not the one you have...then change the story. And about this female thing...Wonder Woman was a woman and I liked her...but I digress...It's the knife throwing woman that would make me nervous...Well like the rest of your minions, I shall humbly...that may be a bit of an overstretch...wait to find out.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. Luv ya, Vaya con Dios.
Comment from Patrick G Cox
Hi Barbara,
Hmmm, could Mr Gray be someone Jim has whistled up? This Homeland Security Agent seems to think he's above the normal law, and I certainly don't like his prejudices. Now you've thrown Mr Sanchez into the mix as well - now I find myself wondering where he fits into what Jim is doing, and what he had to do with the theft of Soni's horse ...
I smell things getting a lot worse - and something stinks already!
Patrick
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Hi Barbara,
Hmmm, could Mr Gray be someone Jim has whistled up? This Homeland Security Agent seems to think he's above the normal law, and I certainly don't like his prejudices. Now you've thrown Mr Sanchez into the mix as well - now I find myself wondering where he fits into what Jim is doing, and what he had to do with the theft of Soni's horse ...
I smell things getting a lot worse - and something stinks already!
Patrick
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I think there's a real gun battle heating up, but I am not sure.
Comment from thee-name
Excellent chapter. Seen no mistakes. Writing was interesting.
Alex stepped onto the front porch. "Soni, Mr. Garrison has a few questions.
After Gray answered, Soni left the house. Jim followed.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Excellent chapter. Seen no mistakes. Writing was interesting.
Alex stepped onto the front porch. "Soni, Mr. Garrison has a few questions.
After Gray answered, Soni left the house. Jim followed.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
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thank you!
Comment from marylou4
Every chapter draws me into the lives of your characters. I really appreciate the delicate and exciting way you reveal a new layer of your characters. You are careful to share a little information at a time.
That is effective and captures the readers imagination. The plot has a reasonable flow and development.
Your characters talk and behave in harmony with their personality.
I am waiting excitedly, for your next chapter.
Excellent in every aspect.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Every chapter draws me into the lives of your characters. I really appreciate the delicate and exciting way you reveal a new layer of your characters. You are careful to share a little information at a time.
That is effective and captures the readers imagination. The plot has a reasonable flow and development.
Your characters talk and behave in harmony with their personality.
I am waiting excitedly, for your next chapter.
Excellent in every aspect.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this encouraging review.
Comment from adewpearl
he listed a few possibilities, and I don't remember- add comma
I like the way you include her back story so well through the questions about who might be behind the trouble
good character development
and you continue to keep the reader intrigued with the mystery of who is behind all this
Brooke
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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he listed a few possibilities, and I don't remember- add comma
I like the way you include her back story so well through the questions about who might be behind the trouble
good character development
and you continue to keep the reader intrigued with the mystery of who is behind all this
Brooke
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. Will fix that missing comma
