Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 42 "Chapter Quince; Part Uno"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
36 total reviews
Comment from kriver
Hi,
I am enjoying your book so far.
The dialogue is smooth flowing
and believable.
The scene descriptions
are very good.
The character interaction
is excellent.
There is a very good
build up of suspense and drama.
The only weak spot that I could see was the last two lines Soni asks a question but
Grays answer was never stated it just says that he answered It does not say how or what he said. His answer is only implied
not stated, because she left the house.
Over all I think it is a fine write.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Hi,
I am enjoying your book so far.
The dialogue is smooth flowing
and believable.
The scene descriptions
are very good.
The character interaction
is excellent.
There is a very good
build up of suspense and drama.
The only weak spot that I could see was the last two lines Soni asks a question but
Grays answer was never stated it just says that he answered It does not say how or what he said. His answer is only implied
not stated, because she left the house.
Over all I think it is a fine write.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I feel the tension in this chapter and will be pleased to find out what Soni finds when she's tracking the riders. I feel this is excellent writing and the influence of the Indian heritage makes it more interesting. It gives colour to the story. Giddy
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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I feel the tension in this chapter and will be pleased to find out what Soni finds when she's tracking the riders. I feel this is excellent writing and the influence of the Indian heritage makes it more interesting. It gives colour to the story. Giddy
Comment Written 23-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Comment from Ric Myworld
It's obvious that someone is setting all this trouble up, but who, and why, which I'm sure we are getting closer all the time in finding out. Thanks for another fine chapter that leaves me with more questions than answers, ready to know who Jim really is and what's going on. Great job. :-)
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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It's obvious that someone is setting all this trouble up, but who, and why, which I'm sure we are getting closer all the time in finding out. Thanks for another fine chapter that leaves me with more questions than answers, ready to know who Jim really is and what's going on. Great job. :-)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Comment from Ulla
Well, I seemed to follow the story line ok and I liked what I read. I think you describe the era and the setting very well. Of course I have missed out a few chapters but I am looking forward to read on. Ulla
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Well, I seemed to follow the story line ok and I liked what I read. I think you describe the era and the setting very well. Of course I have missed out a few chapters but I am looking forward to read on. Ulla
Comment Written 22-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Comment from Sis Cat
Clean prose and lines, dynamic dialogue and descriptions propelled the story forward. I became so engrossed in it that I was disappointed when it ended because I wanted to read more. I look forward to your next installment. Thanks.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Clean prose and lines, dynamic dialogue and descriptions propelled the story forward. I became so engrossed in it that I was disappointed when it ended because I wanted to read more. I look forward to your next installment. Thanks.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Comment from abbasjoy
I also do not particularly like Miguel Sanchez and agree it would be a good place to start, by investigating him.
Seems that agent from Homeland Security is not a happy camper, and in fact quite upset he wasn't able to carry out an arrest on Kuruk. For certain, he'll be back. Not sure what kind of evidence he'll have, but he'll be back.
Thankfully that judge could be reached, in order to stop such travesty of justice. But the agent is like a dog with a bone.
Now I wonder why those men on horseback were paying so much attention to the ranch? Something's up and it's not good.
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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I also do not particularly like Miguel Sanchez and agree it would be a good place to start, by investigating him.
Seems that agent from Homeland Security is not a happy camper, and in fact quite upset he wasn't able to carry out an arrest on Kuruk. For certain, he'll be back. Not sure what kind of evidence he'll have, but he'll be back.
Thankfully that judge could be reached, in order to stop such travesty of justice. But the agent is like a dog with a bone.
Now I wonder why those men on horseback were paying so much attention to the ranch? Something's up and it's not good.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Comment from Mastery
Hi, Barb. another excellent chapter. worthy of six stars easily. Sometimes I can't give them to you though, because I have to "spread the wealth" as it were, if you know what I mean.
Suggestion: "I don't think he's happy." Garrison's eyes watched him leave. "I don't think you'd better leave the house." (Perhaps, AND, I don't think you'd better leave the house for a while."
Good job, Barbara. Bob
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Hi, Barb. another excellent chapter. worthy of six stars easily. Sometimes I can't give them to you though, because I have to "spread the wealth" as it were, if you know what I mean.
Suggestion: "I don't think he's happy." Garrison's eyes watched him leave. "I don't think you'd better leave the house." (Perhaps, AND, I don't think you'd better leave the house for a while."
Good job, Barbara. Bob
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Comment from kiwijenny
Barbara I love your author notes. I got a three star review because my chapter didn't stand alone...but it isn't supposed to...this is a great continuation..well done..well deserving of ribbons
God bless
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Barbara I love your author notes. I got a three star review because my chapter didn't stand alone...but it isn't supposed to...this is a great continuation..well done..well deserving of ribbons
God bless
Comment Written 21-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I get some really strange reviews and I fail to see because they haven't read from the beginning it's my fault.
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I have one guy lately who I have never seen before give me fours because I haven't developed it enought
read the previous 32 chapters I develop plenty back there grrrrr
Comment from rama devi
Hi dear B. Another well paced chapter with authentic-sounding dialog that moves the story along. Having not read all chapters, can't comment on plot and character aspects but them seem well developed, as far as I can tell. Just have a couple of spag suggestions:
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Soni glanced at Jim. "Later(,) I'll trail those men and see where they came from."
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"First(,) I have a few questions.
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Soni read and then said, "So you specialize in criminal law."
Is this meant as a statement? I heard it in my head as a question, so you might consider:
Soni read and then asked, "So you specialize in criminal law?"
My only other feedback is optional, too...that you might consider weaving in a few more sensory details (using all senses, including smell, sound, touch etc.--visual and auditory and olfactory, etc) in the narrative bits.
Warmly, rd
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Hi dear B. Another well paced chapter with authentic-sounding dialog that moves the story along. Having not read all chapters, can't comment on plot and character aspects but them seem well developed, as far as I can tell. Just have a couple of spag suggestions:
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Soni glanced at Jim. "Later(,) I'll trail those men and see where they came from."
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"First(,) I have a few questions.
*
Soni read and then said, "So you specialize in criminal law."
Is this meant as a statement? I heard it in my head as a question, so you might consider:
Soni read and then asked, "So you specialize in criminal law?"
My only other feedback is optional, too...that you might consider weaving in a few more sensory details (using all senses, including smell, sound, touch etc.--visual and auditory and olfactory, etc) in the narrative bits.
Warmly, rd
Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I will take another look at those areas.
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Comment from elgone
I assume from author notes that you're receiving some feedback from short story authors who haven't a clue about how a novel is constructed. I hope they aren't punishing you with low ratings. I recall receiving a two star review concerning one of my books that is being published. Guess my publisher has a different take on how to write a story.
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reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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I assume from author notes that you're receiving some feedback from short story authors who haven't a clue about how a novel is constructed. I hope they aren't punishing you with low ratings. I recall receiving a two star review concerning one of my books that is being published. Guess my publisher has a different take on how to write a story.
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Comment Written 20-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. Yes, they are. LOL You understand completely.
