Comment from RYME4U

Excellent

This is cleverly written. I like the play on words and the humorous slant on an old nursery rhyme. This is also well presented. Great job!

 Comment Written 23-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 23-Apr-2015

Thank you kindly...very appreciated...Dennis

Comment from Eternal Muse

Excellent

This is a very fun haiku, and I love the play on words - "died thirsty butt well". Excellent drawing to compliment your poem.

Poor Jack - this is what can happen when you get tired of going uphill (lol).

A very entertaining offering which should do well in the contest.

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015

So glad you liked it and took time to comment on it...and for so little payment! :) Appreciated, Dennis

Comment from davisr (Rhonda)

Excellent

You have one a great job of using plays on words, from Jack sans Jill, to "Died thirsty, butt well."

Also funny that Jack tired of going uphill. After many years of being part of the famous nursery rhyme, I'll bet he did get tired of it.

I love the drawing, did you do it?

Good luck in the contest,
Rhonda

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015

Thank you, just a little fun....I don't draw as well as that picture :) God bless, Dennis

reply by davisr (Rhonda) on 19-Apr-2015

That is so funny! I'm sure you can draw at least that well.