A Memoir
Just a memory long gone46 total reviews
Comment from Phoenix8
It truly is beautiful to see a memory written about something that made someone happy especially in the innocence of a child. Unfortunately it is the bad memories that are often the ones that fill our heart and mind, so to read something like this was truly refreshing.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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It truly is beautiful to see a memory written about something that made someone happy especially in the innocence of a child. Unfortunately it is the bad memories that are often the ones that fill our heart and mind, so to read something like this was truly refreshing.
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much. I am so glad you liked it. It's a very cheerished memory for me. Ulla
Comment from Praise000
I like the way you started out by defining and differentiating the meanings of
the words a memory, and a memoir. Honestly speaking I would think that not understanding the meaning of words or phrases at the beginning of reading a book or any material is a put off. Well done. You also managed to package a long story short by giving the readers only the important bits, which I would call highlights.
Your illustration of flowers in a pair of old boots brings out the sense of beauty in their old state. Well done. Keep writing, keep smiling.
Praise00
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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I like the way you started out by defining and differentiating the meanings of
the words a memory, and a memoir. Honestly speaking I would think that not understanding the meaning of words or phrases at the beginning of reading a book or any material is a put off. Well done. You also managed to package a long story short by giving the readers only the important bits, which I would call highlights.
Your illustration of flowers in a pair of old boots brings out the sense of beauty in their old state. Well done. Keep writing, keep smiling.
Praise00
Comment Written 27-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for a very encouraging review. Ulla
Comment from patsolstad
You indicate that this is fiction, but it seems like such a legitimate memory. You seem to know just how children's young minds work--what they can remember, and what they cannot. I will choose to think it is a real story...a real and well-told story. Excellent work!
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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You indicate that this is fiction, but it seems like such a legitimate memory. You seem to know just how children's young minds work--what they can remember, and what they cannot. I will choose to think it is a real story...a real and well-told story. Excellent work!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much. It is a real story. It is my story. Thanks a lot. Ulla
Comment from MelB
A very nice story. This little one was clinging on to a free gift, a gift of love, not only of boots, but a mother and father. No wonder you remember the color of the wall so vividly.
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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A very nice story. This little one was clinging on to a free gift, a gift of love, not only of boots, but a mother and father. No wonder you remember the color of the wall so vividly.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much. and you are right, I think why I do remember the colour of the wall. Ulla
Comment from zanya
This is such an evocative portrayal of what it means to 'belong' - to matter to fit in somewhere in the scheme of things - a distinct sense of finally beginning to 'matter' emerges - so well conveyed
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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This is such an evocative portrayal of what it means to 'belong' - to matter to fit in somewhere in the scheme of things - a distinct sense of finally beginning to 'matter' emerges - so well conveyed
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 27-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much. It is very appreciated. Ulla
Comment from donalola
My reviews are very respectful and I do not intend to offend anyone. Ulla you will have to review this story and make it flow. It jumps and distracts too much.
It is a nice story with a bit of editing and more vocabulary (you repeat too many words in the same paragraph).
All the best!
Donalola
"But first-I think-I'll have to give you some of the background" (Why not all the background?)
"I was born back? or I was born at the start of the nineteen fifties, and certainly I did not have the usual start as a baby"
"I was handed over to an orphanage where I spent the first couple of years of my life" (I spent my first couple of years of my life is redundant)
"...it will be enough to say that I was probably as happy as it could be expected..."
"But being so young it is not entirely a conscious memory?" what is the meaning here? May be rather: The fact that I was so young makes it an almost unconscious memory.
"Some people would say that it was impossible for me to remember anything at that age; few have believed my memory"
"...that was the shade of green I was looking at"
"In my hands I held a pair of leather boots while looking to the wall..."
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reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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My reviews are very respectful and I do not intend to offend anyone. Ulla you will have to review this story and make it flow. It jumps and distracts too much.
It is a nice story with a bit of editing and more vocabulary (you repeat too many words in the same paragraph).
All the best!
Donalola
"But first-I think-I'll have to give you some of the background" (Why not all the background?)
"I was born back? or I was born at the start of the nineteen fifties, and certainly I did not have the usual start as a baby"
"I was handed over to an orphanage where I spent the first couple of years of my life" (I spent my first couple of years of my life is redundant)
"...it will be enough to say that I was probably as happy as it could be expected..."
"But being so young it is not entirely a conscious memory?" what is the meaning here? May be rather: The fact that I was so young makes it an almost unconscious memory.
"Some people would say that it was impossible for me to remember anything at that age; few have believed my memory"
"...that was the shade of green I was looking at"
"In my hands I held a pair of leather boots while looking to the wall..."
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thanks. Ulla
Comment from Eric1
Hi Ulla, this is a wonderfully written story and very suitable as a competition entry for 'what's your story' a story that stems from childhood and tugs at the heartstrings of the reader, it is strange that for so long you didn't have an answer to your memory yet now you have!, This happens to me too!
Good luck in the contest my friend.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Hi Ulla, this is a wonderfully written story and very suitable as a competition entry for 'what's your story' a story that stems from childhood and tugs at the heartstrings of the reader, it is strange that for so long you didn't have an answer to your memory yet now you have!, This happens to me too!
Good luck in the contest my friend.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for a very thoughtful review. Ulla
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You are very welcome my friend.
Comment from Tomes Johnston
This is an interesting and memorable piece of work that the author has created with this post. We do indeed all have memories. Some are good and some are not so good. Well done indeed.
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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This is an interesting and memorable piece of work that the author has created with this post. We do indeed all have memories. Some are good and some are not so good. Well done indeed.
Comment Written 26-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much. Very encouraging. Ulla
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My pleasure
Comment from happykat4
I followed the story beginning to end without my mind wandering. The memory was so personal and it brings the reading right into the room with you. They understand your feelings. I could not tell you if at two or less we can remember but I personally would not rule it out. In my mind, I see you almost hugging your boots. You finally had something of your own. Good luck in the contest. I enjoyed your memory! :) Kat
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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I followed the story beginning to end without my mind wandering. The memory was so personal and it brings the reading right into the room with you. They understand your feelings. I could not tell you if at two or less we can remember but I personally would not rule it out. In my mind, I see you almost hugging your boots. You finally had something of your own. Good luck in the contest. I enjoyed your memory! :) Kat
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2015
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Thanks a lot. Very encouraging. I do remember it. It is like a snapshot. II don't have any other recollection from that time. Ulla
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
It always amazes me how we can recall so clearly details which happened in early childhood. Colours, time, relationships are so much more revealing in retrospect.
Things which did not make sense when they occurred now reveal their place in the grand scheme of things.
The memory which you retain of your attachment to those boots and their significance is quite revealing and very touching.
Warmly,
Juliette
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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It always amazes me how we can recall so clearly details which happened in early childhood. Colours, time, relationships are so much more revealing in retrospect.
Things which did not make sense when they occurred now reveal their place in the grand scheme of things.
The memory which you retain of your attachment to those boots and their significance is quite revealing and very touching.
Warmly,
Juliette
Comment Written 25-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 25-Apr-2015
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Thank you so much for your very touching review. Ulla
