Comment from justafan

Excellent

Poetry is not really my genre...The different styles is alien to me. But, That being said, I really enjoyed reading this Bill. There is no "crit" I could give to detract or make this better...I will just say Well Done!!
Always,
Justafan
Melissa

 Comment Written 19-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015

Thank you, Melissa, for the excellent review. Bill

Comment from c_lucas

Excellent

Concrete slippers will fill the bill
A cheap way to make your kill.
****
One needs dependable help. This is very well written with a smooth flow of words.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 18-Apr-2015

Thank you, Charlie, for giving this a look. Bill

reply by c_lucas on 18-Apr-2015

You're welcome, Bill. Charlei

Comment from Donovan

Excellent

I think have I have some of that gene pool. A wonderful, whimsical story that is far more true than it should be. Goods words, whelp kelp, counting clams....so many meanings. Now I am going to read more.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2015

Thanks, Donovan, for the excellent review. Bill

Comment from BeasPeas

Good

Hmmm, sounds like me contemplating to dump my lawn guy who hasn't shown up even though he got a deposit. Unreliable people--yuk! This is a humorous poem with good rhyming. I like your interesting rhyme scheme where the first three lines of each stanza rhyme and the last line of all three, rhyme with each other. Story poem keeps the reader "engaged" in what is going to happen. The ending lets us know that cousins are out and brothers are in. Marilyn

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 Comment Written 16-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015

Thank you, Marilyn, for the good rating.

Comment from emrpoems

Excellent

Nice whimsical poem
with good rhythm and rhyme
Good enjambment
Excellent use of alliteration
Well paired picture and poem
an enjoyable read

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015

Thank you, emr, for the excellent review. Bill

Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT

Excellent

Ah yes you have captured well the disappoint when those who you thought you can depend on let you down..And you did it with humor..Don't think I would be so kind
TK

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015

Thank you, TK, for giving this a look. Bill

Comment from Nosha17

Excellent

Those cousins didn't live up to expectations, now they're for the chop! Fun poem about some slackers who let you down. Good use of rhyming and humour. Faye

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015

Thank you, Faye, for the positive review. Bill

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Dear Bill - this seems to just roll off the tongue. Loved the humor in this one - each stanza though different keeps me smiling. Nicely penned with strong rhyme, solid imagery too. That poor sod in the photo is not going to catch any fish with that other crew in front of him neither...LOL
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015

Thank you, Maureen, for the excellent review. Bill

Comment from thomdble

Excellent

Ha ha, know the feeling well. The picture is perfect. You are really good at getting your point across with a certain biting humor. I like it a lot. Thank you

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015

Thank you, thomdble, for the encouraging review. Bill

Comment from jennifdrake

Exceptional

Mr. Schott, two in a row that are refreshingly fun! At first I felt frustration which quickly led to "dump two cousins in the sea." It was enjoyable. I am going to check out more of your work. Consider me a fan.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2015

Thank you, Jennifer(?), for the encouraging review and generous rating. Bill