Texas Dream Catcher
Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "Chapter Catorce; Part Cuatro"Drug & human trafficking, can romance win?
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Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello Barb
I don't mind skipping around reading your chapters
I find you have anew (to me) a interesting character
I like --
I believe her name is "Naiyenesgani (is that right) what an unique way she speaks,
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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Hello Barb
I don't mind skipping around reading your chapters
I find you have anew (to me) a interesting character
I like --
I believe her name is "Naiyenesgani (is that right) what an unique way she speaks,
Comment Written 07-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2015
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I am glad. Thank you
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smiles
Comment from justafan
Well done. I had no trouble jumping in where I did...That tells me it flows well throughout. I will bookcase this and find all the others to catch up. Curious to find out if they find love. Again well done.
Always,
Melissa
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Well done. I had no trouble jumping in where I did...That tells me it flows well throughout. I will bookcase this and find all the others to catch up. Curious to find out if they find love. Again well done.
Always,
Melissa
Comment Written 16-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Tellis
Sorry I haven't been reviewing for awhile I've been swamped at work and no energy to read and review. I really like this story and enjoy every chapter. I found no spags as usual. Keep up the great work.
Tellis
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Sorry I haven't been reviewing for awhile I've been swamped at work and no energy to read and review. I really like this story and enjoy every chapter. I found no spags as usual. Keep up the great work.
Tellis
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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I completely understand. My working is swamping me right now and I am struggling to keep up with my writing. Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review
Comment from Brett Matthew West
Very well written that is why it is rated an All Time Best. Interesting with descriptive language that held reader's interest throughout. Picture definitely adds depth to this. Write on.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Very well written that is why it is rated an All Time Best. Interesting with descriptive language that held reader's interest throughout. Picture definitely adds depth to this. Write on.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Bryana
I enjoy reading your writing even if I haven't read all the chapters, when I have time I will read them.
You leave me in suspense. Now I'm wondering what those men in horseback are doing. I think that man is right, is not good what the men in horses are there.
You are a grandmother? It's hard to believe. My congratulations. I also enjoy my grandchildren.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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I enjoy reading your writing even if I haven't read all the chapters, when I have time I will read them.
You leave me in suspense. Now I'm wondering what those men in horseback are doing. I think that man is right, is not good what the men in horses are there.
You are a grandmother? It's hard to believe. My congratulations. I also enjoy my grandchildren.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from rmj09
The focus waiting for the lawyer. The storyline development Soni calls their lawyer and tells the top agent that they must wait for their lawyer as the warrants may not be good. After an hour he appears, the top agent had received a call and were waiting. Jim goes out on the porch returns to his room for his binoculars. He is watching a helicopter and eight men on horses. Soni comes out and asks what he is doing. He said watching the helicopter and the men on horses. Soni didn't know who was on the horses or what they were doing.
The dialog shows the characters and development of the story. The narration shows the action calling the attorney, the helicopter observing the riders and the riders.
The hook who are the men and what are they doing?
Keep on writing.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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The focus waiting for the lawyer. The storyline development Soni calls their lawyer and tells the top agent that they must wait for their lawyer as the warrants may not be good. After an hour he appears, the top agent had received a call and were waiting. Jim goes out on the porch returns to his room for his binoculars. He is watching a helicopter and eight men on horses. Soni comes out and asks what he is doing. He said watching the helicopter and the men on horses. Soni didn't know who was on the horses or what they were doing.
The dialog shows the characters and development of the story. The narration shows the action calling the attorney, the helicopter observing the riders and the riders.
The hook who are the men and what are they doing?
Keep on writing.
Comment Written 14-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep
I love the way you command the characters, constantly defining them in their roles. It seems to me that there may be a crisis looming, but that will expose some truths, I think. Very much looking forward to the next chapter, Giddy
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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I love the way you command the characters, constantly defining them in their roles. It seems to me that there may be a crisis looming, but that will expose some truths, I think. Very much looking forward to the next chapter, Giddy
Comment Written 14-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review
Comment from Ric Myworld
Now I know I must be getting old, worried that something might be wrong with someone I don't even really know, starting to always think the worst. Anyway, glad everything was okay and you had a enjoyable weekend with your grandchild. Yep, and I thank you for another enjoyable chapter that I was so glad to find today. :-)
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Now I know I must be getting old, worried that something might be wrong with someone I don't even really know, starting to always think the worst. Anyway, glad everything was okay and you had a enjoyable weekend with your grandchild. Yep, and I thank you for another enjoyable chapter that I was so glad to find today. :-)
Comment Written 14-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review. I worry about many characters in books I read, I know I'm old too.
Comment from Dawn Munro
edit - Space needed between paragraphs after "See that helicopter?"
Another chapter to raise this reader's blood pressure. (Your characters are so real, the story so easy to fall into, I'm outraged at the harassment Soni is under - LOL.)
Jim is also very frustrating - I'm sure he DOES know something, and I can't guess why he won't spill it! :)
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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edit - Space needed between paragraphs after "See that helicopter?"
Another chapter to raise this reader's blood pressure. (Your characters are so real, the story so easy to fall into, I'm outraged at the harassment Soni is under - LOL.)
Jim is also very frustrating - I'm sure he DOES know something, and I can't guess why he won't spill it! :)
Comment Written 14-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
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You're very welcome.
Comment from Connie P
Hello Barbara, it's been such a long time since I've read or reviewed any of your posts, in fact, since I've been on Fanstory at all. I'm hoping to prime the pump by jumping back in. I enjoyed the chapter, your writing is as clean and good as ever. I did chuckle about the pollen offering for the coyote. We, in Alabama, we would be happy to supply the pollen about now. Connie P
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Hello Barbara, it's been such a long time since I've read or reviewed any of your posts, in fact, since I've been on Fanstory at all. I'm hoping to prime the pump by jumping back in. I enjoyed the chapter, your writing is as clean and good as ever. I did chuckle about the pollen offering for the coyote. We, in Alabama, we would be happy to supply the pollen about now. Connie P
Comment Written 14-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2015
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Thank you for dropping by and leaving this kind review.
