Let's Talk Dirty!
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Comment from wordsfromsue
Jenny and Karen to be ready to greet them,(her)
And the Kitchen(small k) and dining room?...
Karen thought she might end up drawing blood (...she might draw blood)(to offset the 2nd 'up' used in the sentence)
her arrogance spilling out of her in the way it always had. (...arrogance spilling out of every inch of her, one last time.) (getting rid of the 2nd and 3rd 'her' and the one last time just felt good. :-). )
Love the 'without activating a single digit' line! Speaks volumes. :-)
This is worthy of a six, alas, I have none left. :-(
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Jenny and Karen to be ready to greet them,(her)
And the Kitchen(small k) and dining room?...
Karen thought she might end up drawing blood (...she might draw blood)(to offset the 2nd 'up' used in the sentence)
her arrogance spilling out of her in the way it always had. (...arrogance spilling out of every inch of her, one last time.) (getting rid of the 2nd and 3rd 'her' and the one last time just felt good. :-). )
Love the 'without activating a single digit' line! Speaks volumes. :-)
This is worthy of a six, alas, I have none left. :-(
Comment Written 27-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2015
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Thank you for your perseverance, Sue. I hope the office move isn't too arduous this week. Just think of your time off coming up. You'll probably be dying to go back! Alexis xxx
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Nice job!
The story of 3 women's empowerment and the satisfaction of making their tyrant boss. In summary the plot satisfied me.
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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Nice job!
The story of 3 women's empowerment and the satisfaction of making their tyrant boss. In summary the plot satisfied me.
Comment Written 27-May-2015
reply by the author on 29-May-2015
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it. It was certainly empowering to write because it reminded me of someone I used to work for. Alexis x
Comment from Curly Girly
Well done! Congratulations on finishing your story. I liked the ending. I am glad the girls walked out and handed their aprons back. Enjoy your R&R! Nicole
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Well done! Congratulations on finishing your story. I liked the ending. I am glad the girls walked out and handed their aprons back. Enjoy your R&R! Nicole
Comment Written 10-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Thank you Nicole, not only for the wonderful six, but for your help and encouragement throughout the book. 'The Bedford' will be starting off from where Lets Talk Dirty leaves off, so I look forward to sharing the 'girls' new experiences there. Back from France tomorrow totally refreshed! Alexis xxx
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Alexis. Congratulations on a brilliant book mate. I told you that I don't have the attention span to read books when I read the first chapter and now I don't think my life will be the same without this book and those girls of mine. I haven't found a spag in it for weeks, well done. Enjoy France my friend and hurry up and write again please. Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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G'day Alexis. Congratulations on a brilliant book mate. I told you that I don't have the attention span to read books when I read the first chapter and now I don't think my life will be the same without this book and those girls of mine. I haven't found a spag in it for weeks, well done. Enjoy France my friend and hurry up and write again please. Cheers Fez
Comment Written 09-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Thank you Fez, not only for the wonderful six, but for your help and encouragement throughout the book. 'The Bedford' will be starting off from where 'Lets Talk Dirty' leaves off, so I look forward to sharing the 'girls' new experiences there. Back from France tomorrow totally refreshed! Alexis xxx
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WOOHOO! Bring it on.
Comment from rwilliam
What an awesome way to end this! I loved every minute of it! I am always sad when I come to the end of one of your books. I just enjoy reading them so much! I am thrilled to hear you have more on the way! YAY!
Enjoy your much deserved R&R in France. I look forward to reading more when you return.
'Do you not want to meet your new employer, Mrs Johns...'HAHAHAHAHAHA Oh my word, I love the name, 'Mr.s Johns". LOL :-P
P.S. It's an honor to read your work at any price!
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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What an awesome way to end this! I loved every minute of it! I am always sad when I come to the end of one of your books. I just enjoy reading them so much! I am thrilled to hear you have more on the way! YAY!
Enjoy your much deserved R&R in France. I look forward to reading more when you return.
'Do you not want to meet your new employer, Mrs Johns...'HAHAHAHAHAHA Oh my word, I love the name, 'Mr.s Johns". LOL :-P
P.S. It's an honor to read your work at any price!
Comment Written 09-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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I thought long and hard as to how to end this book and decided that the only thing that must be confirmed is the purchase of the hotel. As to the ladies love lives, 'The Bedford' will be focusing more on that, along with a few hopefully hilarious situations because I now have all three women back under the same roof on a regular basis. I look forward to seeing you there! Hugs from France, Alexis xxx
Comment from Cat of Letters
Hi Alexis,
I think the first para could use some small tweaks and strengthening.
Where is Michael dealing with the website now? In his bedroom with Laura or in his flat with Stewart?
You have kind of lost me on this new home Laura has. OK I see where this goes at the end of the chapter, the girls buy the Patels' hotel. But you still need to tweak and strengthen that para. You must have your ending chapter right up to the plate.
They say it is the first chapter that sells the book and the last that sells the sequel. The Laura moving out of the flat thing is kind of - ambiguous. Which I am sure you intend but you must work some on it.
Other minor stuff:
jacques' once again the '
godsend - one word
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Well HURRAH! Wave the red swimsuit in the air like a flag! It is a great ending, after all the enticing twists and turns.
Wonderful fun, all of it Alexis.
Best wishes, Alison
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Hi Alexis,
I think the first para could use some small tweaks and strengthening.
Where is Michael dealing with the website now? In his bedroom with Laura or in his flat with Stewart?
You have kind of lost me on this new home Laura has. OK I see where this goes at the end of the chapter, the girls buy the Patels' hotel. But you still need to tweak and strengthen that para. You must have your ending chapter right up to the plate.
They say it is the first chapter that sells the book and the last that sells the sequel. The Laura moving out of the flat thing is kind of - ambiguous. Which I am sure you intend but you must work some on it.
Other minor stuff:
jacques' once again the '
godsend - one word
__
Well HURRAH! Wave the red swimsuit in the air like a flag! It is a great ending, after all the enticing twists and turns.
Wonderful fun, all of it Alexis.
Best wishes, Alison
Comment Written 08-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Alison. As you know, I'm really grateful for all the help you've given me throughout the book. It is the way it used to be with reviewing here on Fan Story, and I've sorely missed it. Now on to 'The Bedford!' Hugs from France, Alexis xxx
Comment from Cindy Warren
I can imagine the look on Mrs. Patel's face. It would be priceless! Now Karen can have her resturant, and it will serve alcohol. Yes, I would have loved to be there for that. Did the rest of the staff know?
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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I can imagine the look on Mrs. Patel's face. It would be priceless! Now Karen can have her resturant, and it will serve alcohol. Yes, I would have loved to be there for that. Did the rest of the staff know?
Comment Written 07-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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So can I! 'The Bedford' will be starting off from where 'Lets Talk Dirty' leaves off, so I look forward to sharing the 'girls' new experiences there. My thanks again for your continued support throughout this journey! Alexis xxx
Comment from MelB
Great way to end it Alexis. I am so glad the girls were able to get the hotel. I would have loved to see the look on Mrs. Patel's face! That Michael, again reminds me of my son. I can't put anything past my son either. He is too smart for his own good and so is Michael! I like that you included much of your own story in this one. Have a great rest and I look forward to reading The Bedford when you return.
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Great way to end it Alexis. I am so glad the girls were able to get the hotel. I would have loved to see the look on Mrs. Patel's face! That Michael, again reminds me of my son. I can't put anything past my son either. He is too smart for his own good and so is Michael! I like that you included much of your own story in this one. Have a great rest and I look forward to reading The Bedford when you return.
Comment Written 07-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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I'm so glad you enjoyed the ending. It's been quite a journey! I look forward to hearing what you think about the new book when I start posting again soon. Alexis xxx
Comment from Spitfire
I suspected you were headed for an ending. Great bit with Michael's remark to his mother about not having to work the chat. As for the ending, I burst out laughing LOL
Have a wonderful time in one of my favorite countries.
Hugs,
Shari
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2015
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I suspected you were headed for an ending. Great bit with Michael's remark to his mother about not having to work the chat. As for the ending, I burst out laughing LOL
Have a wonderful time in one of my favorite countries.
Hugs,
Shari
Comment Written 07-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2015
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I certainly will! Thank you for all your support and encouragement. Alexis x
Comment from Margaret Snowdon
What a wonderful ending to a lovely story - the girls
landing on their feet and everything working out well.
I really enjoyed the journey with you, ALexis - now you
will be busy editing after you return from France.
Karen and Jenny simultaneously untied - why is simultaneously in smaller print?
Have a wonderful time.
hugs,
Margaret
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2015
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What a wonderful ending to a lovely story - the girls
landing on their feet and everything working out well.
I really enjoyed the journey with you, ALexis - now you
will be busy editing after you return from France.
Karen and Jenny simultaneously untied - why is simultaneously in smaller print?
Have a wonderful time.
hugs,
Margaret
Comment Written 07-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2015
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See you soon, Margaret! My sincere thanks for your continued support. Alexis x
