The Wonder
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Comment from Dean Kuch
Michael, you have such a personal, unique style all your own, and I enjoy the ways in which you express yourself within your poetry. This fantastic free verse offering is certainly no exception.
We're all going to die eventually. It's as inevitable as paying taxes. No sense trying to run from it. Best to face it head-on with a modicum of dignity.
For some reason everyone seems so surprised when it happens to someone they love dearly, or even more so when it happens to themselves.
I've been declared dead for nearly four minutes. Can't say I liked what I saw much when I got to wherever it was I was sent. It wasn't Hell, but it was far from Heaven, either.
A black, undulating sea of what looked like molten glass stretched out beneath me, and a completely black sky was all around.
And them... Gelatinous, shapeless, faceless blobs of what appeared to be rotting flesh which stunk to high heavens. The nearer they drew to where I was standing, the more paralyzed I became.
But, I won't bore you any further will the details of my near death experience.
I enjoyed reading your intriguing piece very much.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016
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Michael, you have such a personal, unique style all your own, and I enjoy the ways in which you express yourself within your poetry. This fantastic free verse offering is certainly no exception.
We're all going to die eventually. It's as inevitable as paying taxes. No sense trying to run from it. Best to face it head-on with a modicum of dignity.
For some reason everyone seems so surprised when it happens to someone they love dearly, or even more so when it happens to themselves.
I've been declared dead for nearly four minutes. Can't say I liked what I saw much when I got to wherever it was I was sent. It wasn't Hell, but it was far from Heaven, either.
A black, undulating sea of what looked like molten glass stretched out beneath me, and a completely black sky was all around.
And them... Gelatinous, shapeless, faceless blobs of what appeared to be rotting flesh which stunk to high heavens. The nearer they drew to where I was standing, the more paralyzed I became.
But, I won't bore you any further will the details of my near death experience.
I enjoyed reading your intriguing piece very much.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2016
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Hey Dean...-smile-
thank you Sir.
no I'm very much interested....was there warning...? I mean you returned obviously...thank God....but was there warning...? love to you...Michael
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No warning at all, Michael. I was shoveling our cars out after a Nor'easter hit the Jersey shore.
I suffered a massive heart attack and was dead for well over three minutes, almost four, on my living room floor.
I could see and hear my daughter (who called 9-1-1 immediately and saved my life) screaming at the EMTs to not to let her daddy die. I could see and hear everything they were doing to me from above. But I couldn't move, only watch.
It was such a helpless feeling.
It was really horrible.
Anyhow, enough about that.
This was a great poem, and you're very welcome.
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Yes that's how my grandfather died.....shoveling snow. But I meant ....where ever you went. Afterward or during did you have a sense you were being warned? Was there some kind of revelation...? Did you change your life?
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No, no warnings at all, Michael.
I never wrote dark poetry and stories before my NDE. I sometimes think I brought something back with me from the other side.
I became a born again Christian in 1977, at the age of seventeen. It was 2010 when the incident occurred.
I've always try to treat people as I would like to be treated. My parents raised me that way.
I abhor drugs and alcohol, although I do still smoke a cigarette from time to time.
I know, stupid is as stupid does. My cardiologist wants to strangle me, I think, lol.
So, no, I had no indications that anything in my life was amiss. My pastor has tried to explain it to me but still isn't sure what to make of it.
I'm at a loss myself.
I've discovered while doing a bit of research on my own that many others have had similar near death experiences.
Eerily similar.
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huh...I replied to you earlier...and its gonna read real funny...if sent to someone other than....haha.
what I said and sent to someone was.... thats how my grandfather died....shoveling snow. but what I meant was was there "warning"...or a sense of it. did you "understand" that you needed to change ...thought, behavior....is what I meant.
I died too....once. I overdosed in some girls living room. prescription drugs...Valium....Quaalude. I dont rember anything...apparently, I started convulsing, and they called for an ambulance....had to use the electric paddles to re start my heart. I just remember waking up in the hospital. always wondered if maybe that meant something....-smile-...i'm not kidding. love-
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No, there was no sense of it, Michael...none at all.
It's not like I was on a path to hell...leading a destructively wicked life...or anything like that.
I'm sure what I saw I was made to see for a reason. One day that reason will be made known to me.
Thank goodness you survived your ordeal as well.
Wow...that's very scary.
~Dean
Comment from lancellot
Yes, that about sums up most of human history and the human experience. WE never know when our time will come and while we are here we are in constant flux. Excellent work.
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Yes, that about sums up most of human history and the human experience. WE never know when our time will come and while we are here we are in constant flux. Excellent work.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2016
Comment from Susanne M. Psyris
Wow! Totally incredibly wonderful!!! Loved the verses and the great imagery provided as a result. You did a fine job on this. God bless and hugs, Susanne
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
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Wow! Totally incredibly wonderful!!! Loved the verses and the great imagery provided as a result. You did a fine job on this. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment Written 22-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
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-smile-....you make "wow" look wonderful Susanne. thank you Dear....happy you enjoyed. love to you...Michael
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Michael, I love your personal style and unique way of expressing yourself. God bless and hugs, Susanne
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-smile-...you too-
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Michael, I love your personal style and unique way of expressing yourself. God bless and hugs, Susanne
Comment from ExperiencingLiphe
It's funny how a sudden health scare or something like that can make you re-evaluate everything. My grandpa and his wife are on their way up from Florida as I write this and they stay with my parents. My mom likes her time alone when she gets home and when people stay with them for extended periods of time she doesn't get that. I always remind her that he's getting older and this might be the last time he's up so to try to enjoy the chaos that comes with them, it is chaos, you should see how they are getting up here. We call their little adventure getting up here the circus. The circus will be arriving in the next couple days. It's all with love. Great job.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
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It's funny how a sudden health scare or something like that can make you re-evaluate everything. My grandpa and his wife are on their way up from Florida as I write this and they stay with my parents. My mom likes her time alone when she gets home and when people stay with them for extended periods of time she doesn't get that. I always remind her that he's getting older and this might be the last time he's up so to try to enjoy the chaos that comes with them, it is chaos, you should see how they are getting up here. We call their little adventure getting up here the circus. The circus will be arriving in the next couple days. It's all with love. Great job.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2016
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ahhaha....-smile- thank you for sharing that...haha...the "circus"...dont tell me they show up in 1985 Winnebago...almost self sufficient with an extension cord and shovel for homemade septic containment. haha...just kidding. I think your Mom great...and you very wise. just keep smiling....love to you...michael
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Well, actually the troll's son (The troll is my grandpa's wife. If you've ever seen a little troll doll when you were younger she looks exactly like it.) but he paid $4000 for an RV for them bring up. But be bought it sight unseen so now we're not sure if they can get in and out of it, her son never even thought about their age and getting in and out. And they do indeed plug it in with an extension cord at my parents house. lol. They are in Ohio and no one really knows when they are coming, how their getting to my parents house or whose bringing them. It's a surprise because it changes daily. lol
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you see if Grandma was still here...this kind of thing wouldn't happen...-fingershake-....ahh...well it maybe just a phase you remember how Pat Boone started to act there for a while, Just pray he dont show up in tight leather....-smile-...ah you guys are great. tell your Mom its gonna be okay...love-
Comment from honeytree
Excellent art work for these words written
We are born we grow we learn and we work
We love and hate and just don't care for others
As humans we should share our love and care
when we can.
I have no six left.
Honey tree
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Excellent art work for these words written
We are born we grow we learn and we work
We love and hate and just don't care for others
As humans we should share our love and care
when we can.
I have no six left.
Honey tree
Comment Written 22-Jul-2016
Comment from LIJ Red
The image of God, a little lower than the angels, capable of enraging him enough to torture us forever. Given the ability to think, doomed to die
and wondering why. Your poem is scary, like the human condition...not bad...
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016
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The image of God, a little lower than the angels, capable of enraging him enough to torture us forever. Given the ability to think, doomed to die
and wondering why. Your poem is scary, like the human condition...not bad...
Comment Written 21-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 21-Jul-2016
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We all die...to this life.
and it usually comes as surprise....for some strange reason.
I feel its because "we've" never experienced it...personally...ya know until. I feel certain that if "we" "knew" so and so was gonna be here anymore...we'd act or do differently....dont you...? thanks man....love Michael
Comment from Sandra du Plessis
A very well-written poem. Sometimes we have an undiscovered health condition. To the surprise of many our loved one dies suddenly of a heart attack.
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A very well-written poem. Sometimes we have an undiscovered health condition. To the surprise of many our loved one dies suddenly of a heart attack.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2016
Comment from dejohnsrld (Debbie)
we hate what we love
love what we hate and innate procreates
sharpening egos relish to prove wrong
Great lines here, my friend and an excellent poem as well~Debbie
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we hate what we love
love what we hate and innate procreates
sharpening egos relish to prove wrong
Great lines here, my friend and an excellent poem as well~Debbie
Comment Written 20-Jul-2016
Comment from djsaxon
I love your work, as you well know. You challenge me to reevaluate conventional wisdom, or maybe just face it head on and find a new truth. You possess a rich and telling pen. Love - DJ
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2016
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I love your work, as you well know. You challenge me to reevaluate conventional wisdom, or maybe just face it head on and find a new truth. You possess a rich and telling pen. Love - DJ
Comment Written 20-Jul-2016
reply by the author on 20-Jul-2016
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Hey DJ...-smile-...
thanks Bro. I never really "read" a lot of conventional poetry.
used to bother me somewhat...now I think I'm glad. I dont want to copy to express what I feel. love to you...michael
Comment from dragonpoet
I'm not sure I understand this circular free verse poem, but I think you mean life is a bunch of contractions and surprise so you can't real schedule anyhing.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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reply by the author on 06-Apr-2015
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I'm not sure I understand this circular free verse poem, but I think you mean life is a bunch of contractions and surprise so you can't real schedule anyhing.
Keep writing
dragonpoet
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Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2015
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Bingo...dragon breath...bingo...-wink-
