The Wonder
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Comment from jlsavell
Love is vulnerable,
fragile like thin glass
but its strength is as strong
as diamonds
Elemental is its makeup
One molecular detour
Like the runaway neutron
Will create havoc
Love felt is a balmy salve
Tasted is a delicate balance
Breathed is a filled with life's oxygen
Infused is blood's sanctity
Held lifts the weight of the world
Seen is the transformation of grace
Least understood
When the beaker explodes
But a welcomed relief
When the force of gravity
Grounds and polarizes
Its truth
All in so few words,
In so few actions
It will be okay
When one says
the one who knows you best
I love you
take care dear sweet man..
Jimi
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Love is vulnerable,
fragile like thin glass
but its strength is as strong
as diamonds
Elemental is its makeup
One molecular detour
Like the runaway neutron
Will create havoc
Love felt is a balmy salve
Tasted is a delicate balance
Breathed is a filled with life's oxygen
Infused is blood's sanctity
Held lifts the weight of the world
Seen is the transformation of grace
Least understood
When the beaker explodes
But a welcomed relief
When the force of gravity
Grounds and polarizes
Its truth
All in so few words,
In so few actions
It will be okay
When one says
the one who knows you best
I love you
take care dear sweet man..
Jimi
Comment Written 05-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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love is every days gravity measured and weighed yet carried by desires sub conscience need to breathe. love is life...always has been and will be... the desire of every hearts hope realized. I will, you Take care of your Son...he needs you now. -smile-...and stop being mad at me. thank you Jimi. love Michael
Comment from Glasstruth
Love and faith seem to go hand in hand here. Some interesting metaphors that really made me think, such as: "give me golden eggs laid safe only mine/ cover my life with yours" Your poem can have several meanings. The line that got me confused a bit was "Angry Moses rock fresh water faith" The word 'angry' doesn't seem to go with love. Maybe I'm misreading something. Great imagery as always. Well crafted. Les
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Love and faith seem to go hand in hand here. Some interesting metaphors that really made me think, such as: "give me golden eggs laid safe only mine/ cover my life with yours" Your poem can have several meanings. The line that got me confused a bit was "Angry Moses rock fresh water faith" The word 'angry' doesn't seem to go with love. Maybe I'm misreading something. Great imagery as always. Well crafted. Les
Comment Written 04-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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I'm assuming you know the story...of moses anger and the rock. I don't know really...Moon-struck angry Moses rock fresh water faith...full...is loves beauty. ...each ending thought begins another...but I think I'm going to change it to "rocks"...-wink- thank you Charlie...love Bug-
Comment from A TARNISHED KNIGHT
Something about this works strikes me as being understood more by the writer than by most of the readers. Maybe I am older than I thought for I can understand a Bob Dylan metaphor but the ones here completely have me baffled But just for writing it and taking the chance others would understand I have to High "5" yea lol
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Something about this works strikes me as being understood more by the writer than by most of the readers. Maybe I am older than I thought for I can understand a Bob Dylan metaphor but the ones here completely have me baffled But just for writing it and taking the chance others would understand I have to High "5" yea lol
Comment Written 04-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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are you laughing at me Lancelot...? Welp...I'll tell you I quit following the directions on the back of Captain Crunch boxes after the first year here....but I've always been special...-wink-...ahhh lol....now that's funny....love Bug-
Comment from robina1978
Excellent photo that complements your poem perfectly. It tells about love, and has
some nice wordplay in it, like Wilhelm Tell. The first and last chapter are the best ones as often with you.
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Excellent photo that complements your poem perfectly. It tells about love, and has
some nice wordplay in it, like Wilhelm Tell. The first and last chapter are the best ones as often with you.
Comment Written 04-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Hey Sis....-smile- whats knew with you...? why I thank you Dear...the pleasure is always mucho mine....love Bug-
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Michael - I may be off track on this one. But to me this speaks of love as a whole, the way it gets inside us and guides us. The faith to believe in it, with all its layers and functions. We all need it, and love I think is often misjudged, given rules of what is and what isn't. Yet for me love encompasses All....and I mean All. Least that is what I get from this one:)
Thanks for sharing,
mo
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Dear Michael - I may be off track on this one. But to me this speaks of love as a whole, the way it gets inside us and guides us. The faith to believe in it, with all its layers and functions. We all need it, and love I think is often misjudged, given rules of what is and what isn't. Yet for me love encompasses All....and I mean All. Least that is what I get from this one:)
Thanks for sharing,
mo
Comment Written 04-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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go on....please....say it again. encompass all my attention, take my breath away at your whim, wave me in yours arms like magic loves to dance, whisper my name just born . ...Oh....I'm doing again arent I......-shouldershrug-....whoops......love your Bug- ....
Comment from fossilhunter
I don't really understand this. You have a lot of nice words. How does Moses, William Tell, Johnny Appleseed and Jesus fit together?Then there is cupid and the golden egg mixed in there. If I'm missing the boat, clue me in. I'd appreciate your thoughts.
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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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I don't really understand this. You have a lot of nice words. How does Moses, William Tell, Johnny Appleseed and Jesus fit together?Then there is cupid and the golden egg mixed in there. If I'm missing the boat, clue me in. I'd appreciate your thoughts.
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Comment Written 04-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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I know...-smile- and that's the point...that love you ...we don't understand but find foundation upon it. -headscratch- hmm....okay tell me what this means...and it stoned me to my soul...stoned me just like jelly roll....and stoned me to my soul....you see when I read that...-headscratch-...but when I feel it....-eyeswide-...yea just like jelly roll.....lol man if you cant figure this out on your own...you can walk with me....but I warn you I do tend to detour. love the Bug-
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I'd like to kick a can down the road with you and talk about Moses and Jesus.
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yea...I can see that. but ...were gonna need to work on your approach,,,-wink- ...when I come to kick a can...I politely ring the bell, introduce myself and then take to the street. If yer gonna hang with me your gonna have to dress yourself accordingly . alright...? alright lets unsaddle the horses and get to kickin'...-smile- after you please-
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You might ought to ring the bell. I may be your grandmother's best friend, but kicking cans (Campbell's Pork 'n Beans) is good for thinking. I'll be dressed appropriately for a dusty road thought exchange.
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no that's not possible...they're all three sets in heaven...now...and aint none of um had many friends....no sir...maam...? I do recon your other than....are you government man...? a simple man in need of forgiveness, or Prophet sent by God. ...well strike the can...lets find out-
Comment from Carolyn 'Deaton' Stephens
Your style just blows me away. I loved this one, had to read it a couple of times to get the full impact.
The repeated stanzas added splendor to the over-all poem.
Well done Michael.
:-) Carolyn
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Your style just blows me away. I loved this one, had to read it a couple of times to get the full impact.
The repeated stanzas added splendor to the over-all poem.
Well done Michael.
:-) Carolyn
Comment Written 04-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Why thank you Carolyn. ...-smile- ...what a great thing to say to make my day extra special. appreciated....love Bug-
Comment from Joan E.
You are the master of making thought-provoking references in your poems--in this one, from Moses to William Tell and Johnny Appleseed. I liked the poem coming full circle with the repeat of the first stanza. "Everything...is going to be okay"! Smiles- Joan
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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You are the master of making thought-provoking references in your poems--in this one, from Moses to William Tell and Johnny Appleseed. I liked the poem coming full circle with the repeat of the first stanza. "Everything...is going to be okay"! Smiles- Joan
Comment Written 04-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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-smile-...i feel it. Thank you J....you champion friendship....goodnight you guys....love bug-
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Good morning and happy, hopping Easter weekend! More smiles- Joan
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you too happy Easter...hope Bob gets you a big bunny basket...-wink-
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He's not big on gifts, but I got us a solid chocolate bunny! Our son has had the stomach flu, so we'll have a quiet dinner of roast lamb and the trimmings. I hope you enjoy some festivities and sunshine. Many more hugs- Joan
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sounds perfectly fabulous...except the sick part....get well soon Bro....see ya next summer....-smile-
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Thanks for the get well wishes and take good care of yourself. Hugs within hugs- Joan
Comment from l.raven
Michael, sweetie...where love is the love you are talking about...love that makes you so secure...love that when felt...you know you are safe...when whispered in your ear...everything will be ok...just believe...the love you speak of is true love...when you read it to me today...I loved it then...as I do now...it's beautiful...picture perfect for tonight...I told the girls to make a wish at the moon...Joanna too!!! a wonderful poem...love you Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Michael, sweetie...where love is the love you are talking about...love that makes you so secure...love that when felt...you know you are safe...when whispered in your ear...everything will be ok...just believe...the love you speak of is true love...when you read it to me today...I loved it then...as I do now...it's beautiful...picture perfect for tonight...I told the girls to make a wish at the moon...Joanna too!!! a wonderful poem...love you Linda xxoo
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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all love makes us feel secure...but there is for everyone I think...one um....known, trusted....safe bet every freakin' time. you can see it if you look, feel it if you own it....you are blessed....-smile- thank you Beautiful. love Michael
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thank you baby...than feel secure...love you...xoox
Comment from livelylinda
Michael: tender with some rough/gruf edges saying "I am the man", yet saying "play me, I'm yours". Very well done. This poem shows a softer you. You got it bad!! Happy Easter! distant thunder
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Michael: tender with some rough/gruf edges saying "I am the man", yet saying "play me, I'm yours". Very well done. This poem shows a softer you. You got it bad!! Happy Easter! distant thunder
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Ah...no...not really....I'm saying what we all say at least in silent prayer....I need you. I believe we ...all people, being created in His image own an innate longing to be loved supreme. Have you ever noticed...experienced...ah a soul...um bewildered, unsure, frightened...when great change...or tribulation encroaches...who do they...you...turn to....? who's voice of comfort do they seek, who is the ballast that steady's their ship. It was raining today....I had to wait until lunchtime for my customer to get home to let me inside....I'm painting both...and I wrote this waiting. Alright Thunder....love Michael
