Let's Talk Dirty!
Viewing comments for Chapter 74 "Exposure Aftermath"The story about three women who need to make money
15 total reviews
Comment from wordsfromsue
Aww, sweet chapter. I'm so glad her son is as proud of it as he is. And she thought he'd be upset, how funny!
I do think Marks and Spencer could afford to cough up a new suit for her, or show her picture in the store, who knows?
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reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Aww, sweet chapter. I'm so glad her son is as proud of it as he is. And she thought he'd be upset, how funny!
I do think Marks and Spencer could afford to cough up a new suit for her, or show her picture in the store, who knows?
Nothing to correct, found.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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This one was easy to write because of Richard's real life reaction. I thought he'd be furious, but he said he was proud of me, as did my daughter, Elysia. It was a different matter with my horrible brother who I'd stopped talking to the year before. Apparently, as a well known solicitor, he found it very embarrassing to find out that his little sister was strutting her stuff in the press. I'm so glad! Alexis xxx
Comment from Cindy Warren
I'm glad Michael isn't too upset. I thought he would be. She's going to make money with the sites, but will it be enough and soon enough to by the hotel?
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2015
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I'm glad Michael isn't too upset. I thought he would be. She's going to make money with the sites, but will it be enough and soon enough to by the hotel?
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2015
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Last chapter posted today, where all will be revealed. I hope you enjoy it! Many thanks for your continued support and reviews. Alexis x
Comment from Cat of Letters
Hi Alexis,
Another good chapter. I am glad this is working to Laura's advantage in the story. I got a good laugh about her not being able to go to the local pool anymore with the red swimsuit.
A few spags and suggestions:
About midway down Jacque's contribution - should be Jacques'
Same para" the Red swimsuit small R
rather embarrassing (Suggest you cut the rather. Lol!)
Marks and Spencer's you have it once with an ' - once without - check which is correct.
didn't think it mattered if they didn't contacted her - two didn'ts.
didn't think it mattered if they contacted her or not
too long sentence:
not just over-fifties. (Period) Cut 'so' I can only assume . . .
If that is the case, (cut then I think)
short-sighted
she'd looked through them (suggest you cut 'and absorbed what they said'.)
Best wishes, Alison
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Hi Alexis,
Another good chapter. I am glad this is working to Laura's advantage in the story. I got a good laugh about her not being able to go to the local pool anymore with the red swimsuit.
A few spags and suggestions:
About midway down Jacque's contribution - should be Jacques'
Same para" the Red swimsuit small R
rather embarrassing (Suggest you cut the rather. Lol!)
Marks and Spencer's you have it once with an ' - once without - check which is correct.
didn't think it mattered if they didn't contacted her - two didn'ts.
didn't think it mattered if they contacted her or not
too long sentence:
not just over-fifties. (Period) Cut 'so' I can only assume . . .
If that is the case, (cut then I think)
short-sighted
she'd looked through them (suggest you cut 'and absorbed what they said'.)
Best wishes, Alison
Comment Written 04-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Joking apart, I've never worn the bloody thing since the photo shoot. What a waste! Never mind, old widowed pal of mine keeps asking if I'll go on a cruise with him on the Queen Mary 2, so who knows? Thank you again for your really helpful review, Alison. I hope you're having a great Easter. Alexis xxx
Comment from Walu Feral
Far out brussel sprout! G'day Alexis, this is again a great chapter. I planned this chapter so well, I knew she'd find a way LOL. Just imagine the celebration after the intitial shock wore off. Great stuff mate, cheers Fez
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Far out brussel sprout! G'day Alexis, this is again a great chapter. I planned this chapter so well, I knew she'd find a way LOL. Just imagine the celebration after the intitial shock wore off. Great stuff mate, cheers Fez
Comment Written 04-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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What a great expression! Yes, I think the loose ends are nearly tied up. I think you'll get a surprise at today's ramblings! Alexis xxx
Comment from rwilliam
Oh I love this one so much. One of my favorite. You have me all worried sitting on the couch with her and then calm and worried again. I just love the way you write!!!
I am so excited to read the next chapter!
Happy Easter, my friend.:D
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Oh I love this one so much. One of my favorite. You have me all worried sitting on the couch with her and then calm and worried again. I just love the way you write!!!
I am so excited to read the next chapter!
Happy Easter, my friend.:D
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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The one I posted today should be a surprise (makes a pleasant change not having to write about bally swimsuits! I hope you enjoy it. Only a couple to go. Have a wonderful Easter, Alexis xxx
Comment from Spitfire
So now Michael's bursting out laughing. LOL
A skillful write with many details to show all the interest in Laura's looks and websites. Sounds as if her pinch-penny days might be over!
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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So now Michael's bursting out laughing. LOL
A skillful write with many details to show all the interest in Laura's looks and websites. Sounds as if her pinch-penny days might be over!
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Sorry! If I could find half a dozen ways to say it, this book would have been so much easier to write because the sods are always laughing! Happy Easter, my friend. Alexis x
Comment from MelB
Laura reacts exactly the way I would. I started laughing when her jaw dropped and she realized it was on the internet too. I liked the interaction between mother and son. I like the joking Michael does. Reminds me a lot of my son. A nice gesture bringing home the champagne to share with his mom. An enjoyable chapter.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Laura reacts exactly the way I would. I started laughing when her jaw dropped and she realized it was on the internet too. I liked the interaction between mother and son. I like the joking Michael does. Reminds me a lot of my son. A nice gesture bringing home the champagne to share with his mom. An enjoyable chapter.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Michael seems to be popular with a lot of the reviewers for the same reason. You know what they say. Boys will be boys! It makes it so much easier to write their scenes when you have one of your own. Thank you again for your review, my friend. Alexis x
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I think I like Michael because he reminds me of my son. He would say the things Michael does.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Yippee! She did it! Good for her. Friendship sites were a great idea. I needed that when Jim died. I suffered two and a half- three years. When I found FS and my ability to write poetry I began to heal. I am much stronger now but I could have used a friend who didn't cry with me like our kids and the rest of the family did. Good job Alexis. Nancy
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Yippee! She did it! Good for her. Friendship sites were a great idea. I needed that when Jim died. I suffered two and a half- three years. When I found FS and my ability to write poetry I began to heal. I am much stronger now but I could have used a friend who didn't cry with me like our kids and the rest of the family did. Good job Alexis. Nancy
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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I think there are a few people here on Fan Story that joined for the same reason. I know it helped me retain my sanity two years after I was widowed. You also have the added bonus of doing some cathartic writing--much cheaper than therapy! Thank you again, Nancy. Alexis x
Comment from Joy Graham
I'm enjoying this story. your writing is smooth and I can picture the movements of the characters. Your characters are easy to like.
I like that you call them friendship sites.
"...as he poured the (sparking) liquid..." - should it be sparkling?
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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I'm enjoying this story. your writing is smooth and I can picture the movements of the characters. Your characters are easy to like.
I like that you call them friendship sites.
"...as he poured the (sparking) liquid..." - should it be sparkling?
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Well spotted, Joy. How is it, you can read something twenty times, and still miss silly mistakes? I can't thank you enough for reviewing at this late stage. It's a great compliment that you can still make sense of it all. Alexis x
Comment from scongrove
Great chapter! I can just feel Laura's tension when she was worried how her son would feel about the picture of her in the paper. Do you have a son? I was wondering if that part happened for real?
I'm so glad Michael wasn't upset. Whew! You never know how your kids are going to react to certain things you do. I have a son that is 26. When I embarrassed him when he was a teenager, (which happened on occasion) he would always say, "Oh Mom! You're so crazy!" And then he would always laugh about it. I told him about the book I was writing and he said, "I've heard crazy people write good books." And of course he laughed about it. Kids! LOL!
I really love this story. I can't wait to read more to come. :)
Shana :)
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Great chapter! I can just feel Laura's tension when she was worried how her son would feel about the picture of her in the paper. Do you have a son? I was wondering if that part happened for real?
I'm so glad Michael wasn't upset. Whew! You never know how your kids are going to react to certain things you do. I have a son that is 26. When I embarrassed him when he was a teenager, (which happened on occasion) he would always say, "Oh Mom! You're so crazy!" And then he would always laugh about it. I told him about the book I was writing and he said, "I've heard crazy people write good books." And of course he laughed about it. Kids! LOL!
I really love this story. I can't wait to read more to come. :)
Shana :)
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Spooky! My son has just turned 27. It sounds as though your son is a bit like mine. They don't mind our craziness, as long as it doesn't embarrass them too much! Richard (my son) did tease me about taking the picture because he'd squirmed so much when he took it, but he forgave me in the end. Only 3 or four chapters to go and we're at the end, but I've already started making notes for 'The Bedford,' the sequel, so I'll get stuck into that while I'm in France for a week without the internet.
Have a wonderful Easter, my friend. Alexis xxx
