The Wonder
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Comment from amanda98653
I like this poem a lot.
"human thunderstorms
wet as wingless birds dreaming thirst
and the poet knows... "--wow! Pure poetic creation. Such powerful imagery.
We are easily breakable, but our faith is profoundly strong.
Exceptional poem
Hugs
Amanda
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2015
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I like this poem a lot.
"human thunderstorms
wet as wingless birds dreaming thirst
and the poet knows... "--wow! Pure poetic creation. Such powerful imagery.
We are easily breakable, but our faith is profoundly strong.
Exceptional poem
Hugs
Amanda
Comment Written 22-Jul-2015
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2015
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-bigsmile-...thank you Princess....Proud of the way you handle yourself out there...you did real good...-wink- . I worry about you sometimes now....you spread y0ur wings with caution you hear...looking left and right, seatbelts and signals on, always aware of your surroundings....got it...Alright gimmie a hug...-smile- love Michael
Comment from MizKat
Hi Michael,
This is a great little poem. You have written it very well and it held my interest from beginning to end. You sure do know how to get out a couple of a poems every day. I'm doing well, if I can get one out every 3 or 4 days.
Mom
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Hi Michael,
This is a great little poem. You have written it very well and it held my interest from beginning to end. You sure do know how to get out a couple of a poems every day. I'm doing well, if I can get one out every 3 or 4 days.
Mom
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Ello Mum....-smile- delightful to see you Darling...please do come in and share your wanderings both to and fro...for I have missed your abundant life....-smile- love you Michael
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Hi Son,
So nice to hear from you. I don't get to write much. It seems I'm always reviewing others work. I am also getting very forgetful and had to go to Duluth to find out what's what. I get the results on Wednesday.
Love you, Mom
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Hi Michael, I loved once, too. You really only get the real thing once. But that is enough, better than never having been loved and loved back the same. Some never find it, some spurn love because they are afraid. Timid vulnerable flesh and bone, we are too easily broken. Your poem is great, my friend, lots going on inside it. Love you my dear Micheal. Sandy. xxxx
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Hi Michael, I loved once, too. You really only get the real thing once. But that is enough, better than never having been loved and loved back the same. Some never find it, some spurn love because they are afraid. Timid vulnerable flesh and bone, we are too easily broken. Your poem is great, my friend, lots going on inside it. Love you my dear Micheal. Sandy. xxxx
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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do we...? or was an ahh ideal of perfection almost obtained. I dont know like you...you had the follow through...you owned it from beginning to end. I don't think I've ever been loved enough to feel safe, I thought I did...I mean I did...but I wasn't...was I....yes....I know that whom I've loved couldn't have been loved better or more. It is anger um...-headshake- pride I guess....that makes us think it ...ahh okay...supposed to be that a ah relationships wane or widening should end and even end in annomosity. I never did understand that...but I've met some Baptist bullshiters who encourage and deem it necessary...go figure....-headshake-...some people will never find their way home with even the directions tucked up under arm. hm...here is great example of ...most... who offer love unworthy, weightless as hot air. compared to the Christ presume to follow...I watched these people turn into the world their founder and God Himself warns against, absolutely convinced in their righteous worth more than you or I...or any other who do not don their misguided doctrine. Ah somebody is at the door....love you michael
Comment from Jacob Collins
I thought that your choice of words were great in this piece. I particularly liked your last line: wet as wingless birds dreaming thirst. Good use of description throughout and your writing flowed well. I couldn't spot any faults...Jacob
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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I thought that your choice of words were great in this piece. I particularly liked your last line: wet as wingless birds dreaming thirst. Good use of description throughout and your writing flowed well. I couldn't spot any faults...Jacob
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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Hi Jacob...-smile- thank you man...appreciate you reading...love Michael
Comment from MoonMuse
Oh how I love your reversed lines at the end. It always seems to bring everything full circle. "Wet as wingless birds dreaming thirst" was just such a great use of words. Love it. Cheers, MM
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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Oh how I love your reversed lines at the end. It always seems to bring everything full circle. "Wet as wingless birds dreaming thirst" was just such a great use of words. Love it. Cheers, MM
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2015
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Hey Sarge...sorry I'm late....thank you so much Sir...hope you're well.....love Michael
Comment from l.raven
HI Baby, the kids movie just got over...so I was able to hear the song... I love it...love this line...I loved once so deep it keeps time...beyond our reach...truly a great one sweetie...and I love the last three lines...words only you could write...so very well written...love you..you...Linda xxoo goodnight
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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HI Baby, the kids movie just got over...so I was able to hear the song... I love it...love this line...I loved once so deep it keeps time...beyond our reach...truly a great one sweetie...and I love the last three lines...words only you could write...so very well written...love you..you...Linda xxoo goodnight
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Hello Sweetheart...-smile- ahh well thank you...just a lil' observations voice over....very pleased you enjoyed. Happy Easter Beautiful....love Michael
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thank you baby...it has been a wonderful Easter...smiling big you...love back at ya...Linda xxoo
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
I think you have a wonderfully thoughtful poem. I love the word choices. I read this several times to really appreciate the message in your poem. Really a terrific write.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2015
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I think you have a wonderfully thoughtful poem. I love the word choices. I read this several times to really appreciate the message in your poem. Really a terrific write.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2015
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well thank you very much....-smile- appreciate you enjoying. love Bug-
Comment from royowen
This actually speaks to me, despite it's abstractions, I love the imagery you have vividly portrayed in this Michael, the starkness of humankind from the cradle to the grave, as in Ecclesiastes, talks of the meaninglessness of life, and it's troubled journey, or sojourn, as you eloquently assert, well done, in expressive, descriptive language, elegantly penned, blessings and happy Easter to you and yours, Roy.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2015
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This actually speaks to me, despite it's abstractions, I love the imagery you have vividly portrayed in this Michael, the starkness of humankind from the cradle to the grave, as in Ecclesiastes, talks of the meaninglessness of life, and it's troubled journey, or sojourn, as you eloquently assert, well done, in expressive, descriptive language, elegantly penned, blessings and happy Easter to you and yours, Roy.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2015
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Hey Roy...-smile- thank you sir. You know when I first came here, all I wrote was my God poems.....I had been doing it..."my God thing" for a year or so before....I would frame one of them and hand it to my customers as I was walking out. I guess my own little ministry...I felt like I was doing something...sometimes anyway...-smile- .....but...my life is not all spirit walk...I'm half and half...one white dog and one black....and theres a whole bunch of gray in between the two...and if I'm honest , I write about it all......and then I started writing in the moment....whatever I was feeling...felt ...usually sparked by a songs message to me...where it took me...takes...right then and now. -shouldershrug-...I don't know evolution...? lol love Bug-
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Well done, Michael
Comment from IndianaIrish
This is a wowzer of a poem, Michael. Especially love the first/final stanza...you're the poet, so you must know. This has to be on your top ten best list. You're da man.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2015
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This is a wowzer of a poem, Michael. Especially love the first/final stanza...you're the poet, so you must know. This has to be on your top ten best list. You're da man.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)
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Comment Written 02-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2015
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-handsonhip-..what ya mean this one...there ALL wowzers K...K...? lets keep it real....lol Hello Girlean....long time no see...sons come and go but Karyn forgets it seems....-headshake-...what ya mad at me for...I didn't do anything, I'm convinced.ahhh -smile- gimmie kiss....love Bug-
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Every single one is a wowzer? LOL,Imwish mine were.,I've written some ucks for sure. I've never been mad at you ... Well, okay, one time. LOL but that was so long ago I forgot. I like your new nickname :-)
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-headshake-...yep...it should be obvious K....that's why we call it a wowzer...-wink-....lol ahh good...I have a few people who hate for no reason
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I'm not one. Although I do hate fishy fish, centipedes, arthritis, and insurance rigmarole. LOL
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear Michael - I thought this is one of your best - how you have crafted the poet himself within the storm:
" human thunderstorms
wet as wingless birds dreaming thirst
and the poet knows... " // loved this stanza!
" tip velvet threshold experience each and every breath
held indefinite empathetic awareness
carefully yields to temptations taste starving need obese " // Also thought you did some great imagery in this stanza too.
Overall a great work Michael. A six from me.
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2015
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Dear Michael - I thought this is one of your best - how you have crafted the poet himself within the storm:
" human thunderstorms
wet as wingless birds dreaming thirst
and the poet knows... " // loved this stanza!
" tip velvet threshold experience each and every breath
held indefinite empathetic awareness
carefully yields to temptations taste starving need obese " // Also thought you did some great imagery in this stanza too.
Overall a great work Michael. A six from me.
Thanks for sharing,
Maureen
Comment Written 02-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2015
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whoa ho woo wee...looky...the best teacher in the school loves me....I feel...yes I FEEL!....like I got all A's today and everythings gonna be just okay! because of WOOOoooooOOOOoOOoooooo hooo you! Love your Bug!
