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Comment from wordsfromsue
the food and wine was (were) excellent, as was their coffee.
This is a very busy, amusing and direction turning chapter! Laura certainly has things happen to her in quick succession. :-)
It's all winding down, boo, hiss. :-( I've got used to these three crazy ladies. :-)
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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the food and wine was (were) excellent, as was their coffee.
This is a very busy, amusing and direction turning chapter! Laura certainly has things happen to her in quick succession. :-)
It's all winding down, boo, hiss. :-( I've got used to these three crazy ladies. :-)
Comment Written 24-Jun-2015
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2015
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Don't worry, Sue. 'A new Beginning now has twenty chapters posted, and although there are a few new characters, the three girls are still featuring strongly throughout. I've written that one as a comedy, with a few serious chapters here and there. If I can get LTD turned into a film, I want people to know there's is a follow up in the making. Only eight chapters to go! Alexis xxx
Comment from Curly Girly
Ha-ha! I thought this was funny--everyone recognised her because of the famous picture taken of her in the red swimsuit! Way to go! Just imagine that.... :)
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Ha-ha! I thought this was funny--everyone recognised her because of the famous picture taken of her in the red swimsuit! Way to go! Just imagine that.... :)
Comment Written 10-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2015
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Lol, yes. I'm afraid it was too tempting not to use all that experience! Thank you Nicole, your reviews are always witty and inspiring. Alexis xxx
Comment from Cindy Warren
Here I am catching up again. It seems Laura might have a little more exposure than she wanted. Jacques is interesting, tho. I think he likes her. Could they end up together?
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2015
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Here I am catching up again. It seems Laura might have a little more exposure than she wanted. Jacques is interesting, tho. I think he likes her. Could they end up together?
Comment Written 06-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 07-Apr-2015
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Maybe, maybe not. For the moment I'm leaving that one for the readers imagination! Alexis x
Comment from Walu Feral
G'day Alexis, that is another great chapter mate. Now you gone and made me all emotional, I am so proud of her! What a fantastic thing to happen and what a cool way to find out. Wow! Cheers Fez
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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G'day Alexis, that is another great chapter mate. Now you gone and made me all emotional, I am so proud of her! What a fantastic thing to happen and what a cool way to find out. Wow! Cheers Fez
Comment Written 04-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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One of the most surreal moments of my life, because I was the last to know. Now back to the book to tie up a few loose ends. Now, where the hell was I? Alexis x
Comment from MelB
LOL - I didn't realize it until her lunch was free. At that point, I figured her swimsuit pic made it in the paper. It will be interesting to see what other fun things happen because of this newspaper article. It didn't hurt with getting Jacques to approve things either. Great chapter.
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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LOL - I didn't realize it until her lunch was free. At that point, I figured her swimsuit pic made it in the paper. It will be interesting to see what other fun things happen because of this newspaper article. It didn't hurt with getting Jacques to approve things either. Great chapter.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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I'm so glad you enjoyed it. A surreal moment for sure to find out that everyone knows who you are, and you can't understand why! This could be the answer to their prayers--only two chapters to go! Alexis x
Comment from Joy Graham
I think I'm reading the chapters backwards today. Heavy sigh and my apologies. It's a good chapter and I look forward to reading more :)
"It wasn't a church the woman had ever been (too)..." - should be to
Is it express or espresso?
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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I think I'm reading the chapters backwards today. Heavy sigh and my apologies. It's a good chapter and I look forward to reading more :)
"It wasn't a church the woman had ever been (too)..." - should be to
Is it express or espresso?
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 05-Apr-2015
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Lol, you're the first one to spot either of those mistakes. I don't drink espressos, so just assumed (incorrectly!) that it was expresso. It didn't correct me on word, so it must mean something else in the English dictionary. Thank you! Alexis x
Comment from rwilliam
Wonderful chapter. SO amusing and VERY well written! Love every minute of this read!!
There was no way she wanted to be left alone in the restaurant after Jacques left, especially now.-This made me chuckle! I know exactly what the feeling is. LOL
Such great writing. So real and believable.
The red swimsuit waving like a flag.. That's the best!! :-D
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Wonderful chapter. SO amusing and VERY well written! Love every minute of this read!!
There was no way she wanted to be left alone in the restaurant after Jacques left, especially now.-This made me chuckle! I know exactly what the feeling is. LOL
Such great writing. So real and believable.
The red swimsuit waving like a flag.. That's the best!! :-D
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015
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Lol, I'm having a problem letting go, but the end is in sight. I can't thank you enough, not only for the wonderful six, but for your continued support through this journey for the three women. This chapter is also written from memory, so was fairly easy. Have a wonderful Easter! Hugs, Alexis xxx
Comment from Maureen's Pen
Dear BC - LOL - I remember! Ok this was good, I did have a few stumbles on dialogue smoothness but on the second read it was better, so I'm not sure if it was me just reading too fast - oops. Detail and imagery was great, so was the witty humor!
Overall a good read.
Love
wc
xxx
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Dear BC - LOL - I remember! Ok this was good, I did have a few stumbles on dialogue smoothness but on the second read it was better, so I'm not sure if it was me just reading too fast - oops. Detail and imagery was great, so was the witty humor!
Overall a good read.
Love
wc
xxx
Comment Written 02-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Thank you, wc. I so enjoy getting your reviews. Thank you! Hugs from a cloudy Glasgow, Alexis xxx
Comment from Cat of Letters
Hi Alexis,
I am on the old site on the board, so I will put errors first.
Lol about Spitfire, by the way.
"No, An expresso .. small a on the an
another glass of wine . . . (not --)
-- is when someone is interrupted by another character in their speech.
... is when a character, who is not being interrupted by someone else is speaking hesitantly.
As I was saying
This is not a good dialogue break here. You would be better to put the tag in front of it all. She continued after the waiter. .. And put all she says together. You broke her up mid sentence. If you can not do this don't do it.
I HAD to do it a couple of times in 'Death in The Air'. Because there was not much other choice. Because the Red Baron spoke slowly, he was drunk and knew for much longer than my narrator that he was being confronted by a dead person.
But is is NOT a good technique to split dialogue mid sentence... It is OK, but poor. Avoid if able.
St. Mary - In Oxford Canadian Dic you need a .
Check UK Oxford dic on line
going to rack my brains to try to - cut the second ad third ing words
started to stare at you. - Again cut the ing word
recognized. Is it not a z? Check UK Oxford dic.
Jacques' chat line
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Hee, hee , hee . The corner shop at the end of the chapter. Yes this is great, it is a real laugh. With content too. Laura's points to Jacques about widowers/wids are well made. You get that over in fine form.
Right on target, Alexis.
Alison
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Hi Alexis,
I am on the old site on the board, so I will put errors first.
Lol about Spitfire, by the way.
"No, An expresso .. small a on the an
another glass of wine . . . (not --)
-- is when someone is interrupted by another character in their speech.
... is when a character, who is not being interrupted by someone else is speaking hesitantly.
As I was saying
This is not a good dialogue break here. You would be better to put the tag in front of it all. She continued after the waiter. .. And put all she says together. You broke her up mid sentence. If you can not do this don't do it.
I HAD to do it a couple of times in 'Death in The Air'. Because there was not much other choice. Because the Red Baron spoke slowly, he was drunk and knew for much longer than my narrator that he was being confronted by a dead person.
But is is NOT a good technique to split dialogue mid sentence... It is OK, but poor. Avoid if able.
St. Mary - In Oxford Canadian Dic you need a .
Check UK Oxford dic on line
going to rack my brains to try to - cut the second ad third ing words
started to stare at you. - Again cut the ing word
recognized. Is it not a z? Check UK Oxford dic.
Jacques' chat line
___
Hee, hee , hee . The corner shop at the end of the chapter. Yes this is great, it is a real laugh. With content too. Laura's points to Jacques about widowers/wids are well made. You get that over in fine form.
Right on target, Alexis.
Alison
Comment Written 02-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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You are an angel! When you point these things out, I could kick myself sometimes. The only thing that I haven't changed is the 'recognized, because we spell it with an 's' here in the UK. In fact there are loads of 'zs' we have s's for. It must be a nightmare for publishers, but I can only assume they have two versions. I think I'll be finished on Tuesday, then I'm having a week without the internet in France with a pal. I'm just looking forward to reading the book from the start, and tidying it up a bit. Fingers crossed!
I hope the snow problems are easing up for you, Alison. Alexis xxx
Comment from Spitfire
LOLOL. I wonder that readers will think of my advice although I would suggest you put it in italics as in an afterthought that won't interrupt the flow.
I figured it was the swimsuit picture that did that trick and I'm delighted to hear it's based on truth. From what I've seen the majority of women past fifty are headed toward obesity.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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LOLOL. I wonder that readers will think of my advice although I would suggest you put it in italics as in an afterthought that won't interrupt the flow.
I figured it was the swimsuit picture that did that trick and I'm delighted to hear it's based on truth. From what I've seen the majority of women past fifty are headed toward obesity.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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I'm glad you got a laugh out of it. Now removed, but a couple of the reviewers who saw it BURST OUT LAUGHING! Tee hee. I think you're right about the weight thing. I suppose a lot of women give up regarding their figures in later life, and eat to much of the things they enjoy instead. As long as their happy, and it doesn't cause any health issues, that's the most important thing. Alexis x
