Comment from resist-impulse

Excellent

I'm new to poetry and this may be my favorite kind. What type of poetry is this? I enjoyed the consistent rhyming and I like how it had a slight dark feel to it...Awesome writing!

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015

Thank you for your comments and interest. This particular form is a bit of a one-off. It has a regular rhythm of a trochee (a long syllable followed by a short syllable) paired with an iamb (a short syllable followed by a long syllable). Each line has a definite caesura or break in the middle, rather like Old English alliterative verse, so the effect is dum de de dum/dum de de dum.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

Nicely rhymed couplets. many times our muse will seem quiet then all of a sudden the muse will keep us writing through the night. Blessings, Patricia

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015

Exactly! You have it in a nutshell! Best wishes, Tony

Comment from livelylinda

Excellent

Tony: a bit different from your usual writing . . .Short and terse, almost angry or on edge. Great rhyme and stubby rhythm. I just read some ones story which had too much information in it and was confusing. Then I read this which is right to the point with no extra fluff and I almost fell off my chair! I always love reading your words. Linda

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015

Thanks, Linda. Glad you enjoyed this one. It was a bit of an experiment in a meter that I don't usually use. Best wishes, Tony.

Comment from seaglass

Excellent

This is a fun little poem that clips right along at a fast rhyming pace. It is refreshing in a long line of sad-dreary proses and poems in the lineup this week.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015

I know what you mean! Sad-dreary sums it up nicely! Tony

Comment from Treischel

Excellent

Loved the quick pace created by the caesura. It gave a staccato effect on the whole. Well rhymed. Romantic. The aabb rhymed quatrains told a poignant presentation of the pain and joy of love. I liked the tension this created.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015

Thanks, Tom. This one was a bit of an experiment. Your comments are most affirming. Best wishes, Tony.

Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Excellent

This is a fantastic poem, Tony. The short sentences in the verses seem to work very well, probably because your rhyming is so well done. It sounded quite emotional to me, Giddy

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015

Thanks, giddy. A bit of an experiment. Glad you enjoyed it. Best wishes, Tony..

Comment from Spitfire

Excellent

You're talking to your muse, I get it--asking her to give the words or ideas that will assault, quicken, and capture ears. "Time is my thief... cut to the chase." I hear you, Tony. A more than gentle persuasion.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015

She' a fickle and perverse lady!

Comment from meggie13

Excellent

Excellent poem written for your muse. Seems like she is not responding to your plight and you are trying to have her back. You have personified her , "our tale will last while you are mine". Nothing to comment on all perfect write. The picture used shows a very disturbed woman. ****** virtual.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015

She's a fickle and infuriating young lady!

reply by meggie13 on 01-Apr-2015

Thanks for the info.

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Hi Tony,

This person seems like he or she has masochistic tendencies, LOL.

Oh, that tone changes gradually in the middle stanza and then is gone in the last.

I really enjoyed the unusual rhythm of this piece.

Hugs,
Lou

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015

You're right. We put up with more from our muses than from our loved ones!

Comment from Delahay

Excellent

I can't really tell if you are speaking of a person, one you don't really trust but get a great deal of inspiration to write from, or if you are speaking of some other muse.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015

Many thanks for your review, Delahay. The poem was deliberately ambiguous. It can be taken either way the reader chooses.