Comment from Michael Ludwinder

Excellent

I thought this was excellent. I could feel Ted's confidence as he addressed them. The reaction was as you'd expect from a group like this. Very well written. Excellent use of dialogue. And this easily held my interest.

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015

You're very kind, thank you

Comment from Adri7enne

Exceptional

Cause for rejoicing to see you back. I've forgotten who Ted is. It'll come back to me, I guess.

"A couple LOOK less conspicuous." LOOKS? However, in dialogue, maybe that's how Shades would have said it?

Poor Darling! I'm sorry to read you'd been ill. "Don't start.!" LOL! Forgive me if I take it personally. I hope you're better Snod. In my own weird way, I love you, you know. I'm bloody glad to have you back. A good chapter, my friend. Just so good to read you again after so long! Yea!!!

 Comment Written 30-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015

Thanks. I'm better now, thanks, but the tablest made me a zombie for a fortnight and now I'm caffeine-free(ish) I'm struggling to keep my eyes open on the train, but I'll finish it before I expire, I swear.

Glad you lie it. Ted is Shades' mate from work. You're right about the looks, but i might be able to get away with it in speech. i'll think about it