Comment from I am Cat

Excellent

uh oh... tenuous circumstances... why does it always have to be all or nothing with some kids? lol

ok, i"m locked in again... (which isn't good for me, because i'm getting 2 cents apiece on a sunday night. LOL which isn't the way FS works at all) lol and I just posted a poem... ok, gonna read another half dozen because its FUN! :)

I did find a type here:
I thrilled to hear genuine excitement and yes, hope, in Nichole's voice (believe you'll want to insert the word "was" between I and thrilled) maybe?

:)

moving on..... :)

 Comment Written 12-Jul-2015

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reply by the author on 12-Jul-2015

Wow! I'm flattered that you are taking the time to read for two cents. I like reading some, but wish we could just write one line for a review. Sigh...

Comment from w.j.debi

Excellent

Oh, the continual ups and downs of the mother-daughter relationship. The joy of her success and the excitement you shared comes through clearly. The worry and concern as well. You always have to put that hook out there for the next chapter don't you? Well done.

 Comment Written 11-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 11-Apr-2015

I learned that trick by reading novels. I have to stop in the middle of a chapter or I'll stay up until I finish it! The endings keep me going.

Comment from Rosalyne

Excellent

Hi Shari.
You showed so well the patching of the relationship between you and Nichole. Being a parent is never easy, and all we want for our kids is the best. Sometimes, it's so hard to not say too much as we watch them stray down a pathway that's different from what we'd hope. I could hear your excitement and sense of relief when you saw Nichole without Jeff. You ended the chapter well, with a hint of mystery.
Bye, my friend!
Rosalyne :)

 Comment Written 09-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 09-Apr-2015

Thanks, Rosalyne, for taking to time to read this one. Working on the next one now which will tick off the reader, I hope.

Comment from Cat of Letters

Excellent

Hi there,

Slow to get to this one.

Well this is an interesting turn of events. It sounds like Nichole has landed a great job.

An enjoyable chapter.

Best wishes, Alison

 Comment Written 04-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 04-Apr-2015

Thanks, Alison. You would think. But personally, after two weeks on a ship, I'm ready to go home.

Comment from Muffins

Excellent

When everything is working, the sun feels likes its going to shine on your situation forever, a drop of rain comes and spoils it, as your last sentence indicated.

The absence of Jeff is a big question mark. Glad you didn't dwell on it and left that to the reader.

 Comment Written 02-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 02-Apr-2015

Thanks, Muffins. More on that in the next chapter.

Comment from ProSongwriter

Excellent

Hi Shari ...

I'm liking this more and as I read on. That opening line is classic ... totally loved it!

So, things start getting better and better with Nichole, then she asks the dreaded question when you meet. Doesn't it seem that life does that to us a lot? We get warm air beneath our wings, then a cold breeze rushes in to put a chill on everything. Sucks!

You didn't expound on "no Jeff' when you and Frank met Nichole. Looking forward to read more about that. Great teaser line at the end ... one of my favorite characteristics in a writer.

Super job! See ya next chapter ...

Alan

 Comment Written 01-Apr-2015

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reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015

Great analogy, Alan, about the warm air and wings.
Thanks for following this.

reply by ProSongwriter on 01-Apr-2015

Hi Shari ...

You are welcome! And I'm glad you liked that analogy. I'll keep reading along! See ya at the next chapter ...

Alan

Comment from Maureen's Pen

Excellent

Dear Shari - ah the joys of families and all that rains on them. This reads smooth, loved the upbeat portions that seem to stabilize the rocking boat of life...till the cruise line at the end....oh-oh!
Well penned -thanks for sharing,
Maureen

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015

Hi. Just checked your profile page to find out what's going on. I trust your headaches are gone now. Those upbeat moments are the ones to remember. :-)
Hugs,
Shari

Comment from Sasha

Excellent

I've never been on a cruise, but from what I hear, they are not cheap. I am pleased your relationship with your daughter in on the upswing. It is so hard when mother and daughter don't get along...something I am far too familiar with.

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015

It was even more painful since Nichole and I were so close until she met Jeff. I'm beginning to see a more mature attitude though each week that I call her in L.A. She's now 46. I haven't seen for six years.

reply by Sasha on 01-Apr-2015

Oh my, that IS a long time.

Comment from IndianaIrish

Excellent

Great chapter describing the change in Nichole, the exciting life changes, and your relationship changes. But then that ending ... Can't wait to read more, Shari.
Smiles,
Karyn :-)

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015

I'm working on the next chapter now.

Comment from Louise Michelle

Excellent

Hi Shari,

That's wonderful she got a gig on a cruise line. I remember you and Frank took a lot of cruises, so maybe this is how it started.

This is a great chapter, fast paced and interesting to read.

Hugs,
Lou

 Comment Written 31-Mar-2015

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reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015

Thanks, Lou. Don't count on a happy ending though. Sigh...

reply by Louise Michelle on 31-Mar-2015

There is seldom a happy ending for anyone pursuing the arts. Too much competition and not enough breaks.