Pattern
Supertanka. 10-14-10-14-1416 total reviews
Comment from pennedup
very nicely done. They came together really well as well as stand alone. You didn't have to separate your poems with the .... just use them as one line each.
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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very nicely done. They came together really well as well as stand alone. You didn't have to separate your poems with the .... just use them as one line each.
Comment Written 03-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 03-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the excellent review.
Comment from scd41
A poet writing a Supertanka is comparable to an alchemist and you have successfully merged two tankas to make this strong entry for the contest. Best of luck.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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A poet writing a Supertanka is comparable to an alchemist and you have successfully merged two tankas to make this strong entry for the contest. Best of luck.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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Thank you for the positive review.
Comment from c_lucas
If i had to take a wild guess, I would say that a supertanka is a series of tankas with a single theme. You're on the correct pathway. Good luck in your contest.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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If i had to take a wild guess, I would say that a supertanka is a series of tankas with a single theme. You're on the correct pathway. Good luck in your contest.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2015
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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Thank you, Charlie, for giving this a look. The tankas should read as both separate poems and as one 10-14-10-14-14.
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You're welcome.
Comment from artemis53
Interesting style. I've never seen it before but it seems to have a lot of potential. I truly appreciate the 'cause and effect' of each line. They all ring true.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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Interesting style. I've never seen it before but it seems to have a lot of potential. I truly appreciate the 'cause and effect' of each line. They all ring true.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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Thank you for giving this a look.
Comment from Joan E.
I had never seen this form before either, but I liked your side-by-side presentation in the 5-7-5-7-7 format, which allows for the work to be read continuously or as two separate, but connected tanka. The artwork you selected is striking too. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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I had never seen this form before either, but I liked your side-by-side presentation in the 5-7-5-7-7 format, which allows for the work to be read continuously or as two separate, but connected tanka. The artwork you selected is striking too. Best wishes in the contest- Joan
Comment Written 31-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2015
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Thank you for giving this a look.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Wonderful artwork that coordinates with your poem.
-Format is good.
-Very cleverly written.
-I like reading it as two separate poems, but either way is good.
-Some good imagery.
-The last line is an effective conclusion.
-Overall, a very good poem.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
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-Wonderful artwork that coordinates with your poem.
-Format is good.
-Very cleverly written.
-I like reading it as two separate poems, but either way is good.
-Some good imagery.
-The last line is an effective conclusion.
-Overall, a very good poem.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2015
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Thank you for giving it a look.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Lylise
This is a strong entry into the Supertanka Poem writing prompt. It is well written and this presentation is great. Contest requirements fulfilled in spades. I enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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This is a strong entry into the Supertanka Poem writing prompt. It is well written and this presentation is great. Contest requirements fulfilled in spades. I enjoyed this. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Thank you for the positive review.
Comment from lakeport
Pattern, indeed that some pattern, I haven not seen this Tanka form before, I enjoyed reading it. Good luck at the contest, God bless you, lakeport.
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Pattern, indeed that some pattern, I haven not seen this Tanka form before, I enjoyed reading it. Good luck at the contest, God bless you, lakeport.
Comment Written 30-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Thank you, lakeport, for the positive review.
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you are very welcome.lakeport.,
Comment from patcelaw
I read this first as two separate poems and then read it as a continuous poem and it made a lot of sense all three ways. But to read as a continuous poem makes the most sense to me. Patricia
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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I read this first as two separate poems and then read it as a continuous poem and it made a lot of sense all three ways. But to read as a continuous poem makes the most sense to me. Patricia
Comment Written 30-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 30-Mar-2015
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Thank you, Patricia, for reviewing this, and for your positive words.
Comment from Green_Jello
I think the supertanka is such a cool poem especially when done right and you have done a great job here. I really like the formatting of the poem as well, great job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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I think the supertanka is such a cool poem especially when done right and you have done a great job here. I really like the formatting of the poem as well, great job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 29-Mar-2015
reply by the author on 29-Mar-2015
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Thank you, GJ, for the kind review.
